Deb Radke Poet Choka

Sloth

sin so seemingly harmless
offending no one 
sloth hides behind selfish smiles
feigning pain or pitiful 
preening and purring 
inside it acquiesces 
accepting of assistance 
sighing it lays back 
secure in the knowledge 
others will carry its load 
it is the knowing 
which renders it so deadly





10/31/2018

Written for Choka poetry contest 
“One of the Seven Deadly Sins”
Sponsored by Edward Ibeh

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Line Gauthier November 11, 2018 at 1:44 PM Great poem, Deb. Congrats on your top win.

Nette Onclaud November 8, 2018 at 4:45 PM a well deserved win, deb... sweet congrats!...huggs

Susan Palli November 7, 2018 at 12:25 PM Excellent, Deb. Never thought about the “knowing” part of being a sloth! Congrats! Deb Radke November 7, 2018 at 4:09 PM Thanks, Susan. Yes, it seems to me sloth has that reputation of doing no harm, yet in its worse, it knows what it is doing. I appreciate your kind words.

Winged Warrior November 6, 2018 at 11:33 PM A great rendition of the Sloth meaning my friend...should be used for the modern day poetic dictionary...and congrats! on your win, Deb...love & light...^WW^ Deb Radke November 7, 2018 at 4:06 PM Thank you so much, WW. I loved yours as well. I appreciate your words of support.

Jessica Thompson November 6, 2018 at 9:30 PM Wonderful write Debs, congrats on you win! Hope you have a wonderful day. Best Wishes, Jess Deb Radke November 7, 2018 at 4:04 PM Thanks, Jess. I appreciate your reading and commenting on my poem. Your words of support mean a lot. Wishing you a great day as well.

Laura Leiser November 6, 2018 at 9:16 PM Your well penned poem shows great insight into the psyche of the sloth, Deb. Congrats on your win! :) Deb Radke November 7, 2018 at 4:04 PM Thanks, Laura. I do think sloth is underrated as a sin. I appreciate your comments.

Wendy Watson November 6, 2018 at 4:17 PM Congratulations,Deb. I felt sure that this excellent description would be highly rated. Best wishes Wendy Deb Radke November 6, 2018 at 7:42 PM Thanks so much, Wendy. I appreciate your taking time to write and all your support. Deb

Edward Ibeh November 6, 2018 at 3:46 PM Thanks for participating in my contest, Deb!:-) Wonderful write! Congratulations on your top win! Deb Radke November 6, 2018 at 7:41 PM I'm very grateful for placing among all the great poems submitted for your contest. Thank you so much. It was a brilliant contest. I enjoyed writing this entry. My best. Deb

Mark Elam November 5, 2018 at 6:24 PM Such a clear yet succinct definition of a sloth. Especially like the last two lines. Deb Radke November 5, 2018 at 8:15 PM Thank you, Mark. Yes, it is always the knowing...

Vladislav Raven November 3, 2018 at 8:24 AM Hi Deb, such a wonderful, creative write on the deadly sin of sloth. You have described sloth so well in this little gem. You give the feelings life, with your clever words. I wish you well in the contest. Have a wonderful Saturday. hugs....Mike. XX Deb Radke November 5, 2018 at 8:14 PM You’ve given me high praise in your critique. It is very much appreciated.

Vijay Pandit November 1, 2018 at 7:05 AM Attributes of sloth..hidden and obvious..you captured them in your wonderful poem..Best for a win, Deb. Deb Radke November 5, 2018 at 8:11 PM Thank you, Vijay. As always, I welcome your warm words of support.

Wendy Watson October 31, 2018 at 4:42 PM This is such a cleverly worded poem, Deb . An excellent description and I love the 'preening and purring' reference. Best wishes Wendy Deb Radke November 5, 2018 at 8:10 PM Thank you, Wendy. I’m glad you liked this poem. I did rather picture sloth as having some feline characteristics.