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Slinky and Highway Truth

I woke in the backseat ‘cause sleeping is what I did - - I hid when we had a many state, family vacation drive. Daddy said that this time, we would drive straight thru five. I recall Mama’s hair back was flat, Sis leaned on her lap and I could tell for sure they were sleeping like that. Brother was pressing his back window with his face, his nose smearing glass, his amusement surely in place. Dad was focused on a radio baseball game. Seeing all was good, I found my travel toy case for safe car play. In no time, pretending took me away. Then crazy-bad action attacked and blurred. “WHAT IN THE WORLD!”, I several times heard, many horns HONKED with urge, then cars CRASHED, SWERVED, two BANG converged, others went BOOM, BUMP up a curb. Sirens blared, well-lit, brakes were hit, Dad cussed a fit, Mama and sis stirred. Mama murmured something like ‘absurd’, before Dad let loose the worst of his really bad words. Quickly, I let go of the toy I was holding out my window. Who knew Slinkys at eighty miles per hour weren’t simple? Then, without uttering a single concern, I faked sleep as though I’d never emerged. For hours my parents could be heard wondering what had caused traffic to be so disturbed and thanking God their sweet kids weren’t hurt.
... CayCay Jennings March 8, 2017

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Date: 4/22/2017 11:40:00 PM
The descriptions are simply brilliant. Its such a rypical depiction of things we do on a ling car journey and more.. i dont like the title though but thats just pimples. What a ride..and where the hell are you? Ive written a thousand letters
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Date: 3/19/2017 2:53:00 PM
Well penned. Congratulations.....
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Date: 3/19/2017 2:29:00 PM
Great piece of writing CayCay, congratulations on your win, Roy, :)
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Date: 3/19/2017 8:49:00 AM
Back to congratulate you CayCay...
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Date: 3/19/2017 3:13:00 AM
very descriptive write CayCay love it congrats on placing hugs
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Date: 3/11/2017 7:31:00 PM
Hi CayCay, I enjoyed this!
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Date: 3/8/2017 3:42:00 PM
Wow, did this really happen, CayCay? You described the story so well, I was really drawn in to it! Excellent poem :)
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 3/8/2017 4:29:00 PM
Maybe so, yes, perhaps it happened to someone, well, no - it happened to me - all true except no one crashed! So glad you enjoyed my Noise response, really enjoyed reading your comments. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Date: 3/8/2017 3:37:00 PM
I felt like I was on that trip with you CayCay, great job. I had a slinky, such fun on the steps...
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 3/8/2017 4:31:00 PM
Maybe you were there, maybe you were one of the 'honkers!' I was never brave enough to ask for a replacement slinky ... but, yes they were a lot of fun - just as I shared. Enjoyed your comments - Thank You! All the best ... CayCay
Date: 3/8/2017 12:11:00 PM
Haha great...my daughter just told me there is a strange noise coming from the back of her car. Hope it's only a slinky :)
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 3/8/2017 12:24:00 PM
Well, Tim - there's your poem idea, right there in your comment. Good idea, too - what's in the trunk? So glad you enjoyed. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Date: 3/8/2017 11:07:00 AM
Such vivid imagery CayCay and I love the thought of the slinky going out of the window:-) Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Caycay Jennings
Date: 3/8/2017 11:29:00 AM
Oh, good - you just confirmed for me that the toy, Slinky, is known across the ocean. Phew! Glad you enjoyed my Noisy Write, Jan. Hugs ... CayCay
Date: 3/8/2017 11:02:00 AM
I remember those family vacations in the back seat with my sister, often being awakened by sudden stops and loud complaining. This was well described CayCay and a great entry to the contest...very noisy indeed.
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Date: 3/8/2017 11:33:00 AM
True story, though no one crashed. The slinky stretched out behind us, 6 cars almost behind us. To this day that story ends with, " and can you believe CayCay slept thru the whole thing?" I just grin. Glad you enjoyed my tale! Hugs ... CayCay

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