Sliced Truth

cutting  ice
kissed in darkness
as sun falls
into the horizon

the light
melts down
into darkness
light of my world
slowly vanished

no longer warm
in the sun
when you smile
i take one's head
outside it's shell

looking at a world
in the reality
of it all
in clouds
whispers out softly

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 9/14/2013 1:15:00 AM
The sad realities keep us protected inside a shell..but so beautiful it is when one slowly overcomes darkness and come out of that shell as a knight in shining armor winning his battle..whisperin in new chapters.I could feel each sentiment lingering
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 9/14/2013 6:23:00 AM
MY EYES HAVE BEEN DRAWN BEAUTY IS OUT THERE WHISPERING IN THE NEW CHAPTERS I WILL WRITE ONE ESPECIALLY ON THAT SUBJECT WONDERFUL COMMENT HEARTFELT APPRECIATED
Date: 9/13/2013 2:18:00 PM
I really liked the line, "the light melts down into darkness". That gave me a great visual as I was reading this poem. I know from personal experience how hard it can be to come out of one's shell. It is scary to emerge from hiding, when the world seems so dark and threatening...Excellent writing on this poem, Liam, I really enjoyed it!...Thank you for the kind comments!
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 9/13/2013 2:36:00 PM
AS ALWAYS THE KINDNESS IS IN YOUR COMMENT VERY BEAUTIFUL I THANK YOU DEARLY DEEPLY APPRECIATED
Date: 9/13/2013 6:18:00 AM
judging by this, you are obviously a good writer of modernistic free verse; pleased to make your acquaintance and thanks for commenting on my summer's end poem :)
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Liam Mcdaid
Date: 9/13/2013 7:14:00 AM
it was a pleasure to read thank you for the very beautiful comment deeply appreciated
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