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Sliced Truth

cutting ice kissed in darkness as sun falls into the horizon the light melts down into darkness light of my world slowly vanished no longer warm in the sun when you smile i take one's head outside it's shell looking at a world in the reality of it all in clouds whispers out softly

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Charmaine Chircop

Date: 9/14/2013 1:15:00 AM

The sad realities keep us protected inside a shell..but so beautiful it is when one slowly overcomes darkness and come out of that shell as a knight in shining armor winning his battle..whisperin in new chapters.I could feel each sentiment lingering

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 9/14/2013 6:23:00 AM

MY EYES HAVE BEEN DRAWN BEAUTY IS OUT THERE WHISPERING IN THE NEW CHAPTERS I WILL WRITE ONE ESPECIALLY ON THAT SUBJECT WONDERFUL COMMENT HEARTFELT APPRECIATED

Kelly Deschler

Date: 9/13/2013 2:18:00 PM

I really liked the line, "the light melts down into darkness". That gave me a great visual as I was reading this poem. I know from personal experience how hard it can be to come out of one's shell. It is scary to emerge from hiding, when the world seems so dark and threatening...Excellent writing on this poem, Liam, I really enjoyed it!...Thank you for the kind comments!

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 9/13/2013 2:36:00 PM

AS ALWAYS THE KINDNESS IS IN YOUR COMMENT VERY BEAUTIFUL I THANK YOU DEARLY DEEPLY APPRECIATED

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 9/13/2013 6:18:00 AM

judging by this, you are obviously a good writer of modernistic free verse; pleased to make your acquaintance and thanks for commenting on my summer's end poem :)

Liam Mcdaid
Date: 9/13/2013 7:14:00 AM

it was a pleasure to read thank you for the very beautiful comment deeply appreciated