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Sleepwalking Dreams

In my sleep, I walk, unseen
With ghosts, through times before
Like mist, I slip in between
Moonlight and the phantom shore

With ghosts, through times before
I am sensed only inside
Moonlight and the phantom shore
Too brief a heaven to reside

I am sensed only inside
As memory's fragile reflection
Too brief a heaven to reside
Losing upon waking's deflection

As memory's fragile reflection
Like mist, I slip in between
Losing upon waking's deflection
In my sleep, I walk, unseen.

7/19/2018
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Rodrigues Avatar
August 31, 2022 at 4:02 AM
Love this, Michelle, its dreamy subject and feel. Love the wording: Losing upon waking's deflection. Also has a touch of gloom and you become the ghost unseen in this haunting world. Congratulations, Michelle!
May Avatar
August 28, 2022 at 9:49 AM
Congrats on your win Michelle, Wonderful write
Reese Avatar
August 17, 2018 at 11:22 AM
Very well done. You've done this style really well and the imagery is quite vivid. The creativity is awesome. Pantoums are my favorite style to write in.
Faulkner Avatar
August 19, 2018 at 2:16 PM
Thank you so much, Charles!
Carber Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 8:34 AM
Congrats Michelle, on your win in Brian's contest- you caught that twilight feeling between sleep and being awake so well.
Faulkner Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 4:23 PM
Thank you L.J. for your kind words!
Gentry Avatar
August 3, 2018 at 12:45 AM
Back again to congratulate you again on your win again, #1 win! :)
Faulkner Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 4:23 PM
Thanks again, Susan, appreciate it!
Gauthier Avatar
August 2, 2018 at 9:16 AM
A lovely haunting piece, Michelle. Congrats on your gold medal win.
Faulkner Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 4:24 PM
Thank you for your wonderful comment, Line!
Wolf Avatar
August 2, 2018 at 8:27 AM
So dreamy, misty, and sensorily fragile, if you will. Wonderful visual and tactile effect. Really like this one ... And congrats on your win!! :) gw
Faulkner Avatar
August 5, 2018 at 4:25 PM
Thanks, I was trying to create the circular feeling of dreaming and felt a pantoum would work well, glad you enjoyed it!
Gentry Avatar
August 1, 2018 at 8:23 PM
Congratulations on your win. This is a great pantoum! Well done! I like the 'With ghosts, through times before'. Enjoyed.
Faulkner Avatar
August 1, 2018 at 11:01 PM
Thank you so much, Susan!
Hamilton Avatar
July 31, 2018 at 9:53 AM
Congrats Michelle!
Faulkner Avatar
July 31, 2018 at 2:45 PM
Thank you for placing me in your contest, John!
Krutsinger Avatar
July 21, 2018 at 9:00 PM
I really like the cadence of this, especially the line "moonlight and the phantom shore". I am going to look up pantoum right now. Thank you for teaching me a new way.
Faulkner Avatar
July 25, 2018 at 1:19 PM
Thank you Caren, your visits always inspire me!
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