Sleeplessness

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Looming ... The possibility of crisis Life-as-you-now-know-it-ending crisis From a crystal azure sky, shining ... The ominously dark anvil of disgrace and horror Like the knurled hand of karma Crashing through a sunny window And washing you pale and empty with oily blackness A diabolical knot in the stomach ... That has no ease or definition or finality Riding you like the horsemen into hellish oblivion A cold finger on blue steel, squeezing Bound for naught but ruin ... And the spalted spattering of gray matter Vitality and brilliance and talent of a rare ilk Turned to stains and puddles and clots By their own ... inane ... Ignorance. ~ 6th Place ~ in the "Contest Number 440 Any Form" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor.

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John Hamilton

Date: 5/21/2018 9:34:00 AM

Yeah Greg, I find it hard to believe, but I think...you are actually getting better, I thought it not possible but your deep writes are exceptionally good...no... great! Congrats on a fine placement...I would have placed this higher! My faves of yours are piling up sky high...waiting for the book!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/29/2018 5:38:00 AM

Ah, a book - would that be nice? Someday, perhaps ... many thanks and blessings, John! I'm trying to improve constantly, but sometimes it feels like rowing against the tide, lol. :-)

Susan Gentry

Date: 5/20/2018 2:24:00 PM

Congratulations on your placement with this one. Totally lost me... lol I do recognize it might be awesome. Nightmarish at the very least.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/29/2018 5:37:00 AM

Thank you so much, Susan ... I think, lol. Blessings, friend! :-) <3

P.M. Richter

Date: 5/20/2018 9:50:00 AM

Brilliant.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/29/2018 5:36:00 AM

Many thanks, PM! :-)

Line Gauthier

Date: 5/20/2018 6:24:00 AM

Great imagery, Gregory.. Congrats on your win.

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/29/2018 5:36:00 AM

Thank you so much, Line.

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/17/2018 11:02:00 AM

This one is DEEP, Greg. I do love reading your stuff:)

Daniel Turner
Date: 5/19/2018 11:01:00 PM

Greg, you could write the phone book and i would read it. You are a exceptional writer:)

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/19/2018 7:50:00 PM

You are very kind, Daniel, and you have uniquely discerning taste, as I haven't received much response on this one ... I love writing this genre, but I don't get a lot of traffic on them, sadly ... I guess it's an acquired taste, but I have found much beauty in the dark. Blessings, My Friend! :-)