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         skating upon saturn’s rings 

             endless ice cold arcs
     innards of past moons shattered
            blades reopen wounds
        in my wake scars and chaos
       proof ~ that I was never here

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Sara Jama

Date: 2/25/2025 10:52:00 AM

Thank you for writing for my contest. I am glad you could find inspiration in the prompt. "innards of past moons shattered," is such a deep and profound line. I love how you merged science with such depth and existentialism. Congratulations on your win.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/27/2025 2:24:00 AM

Heya Sara, I am delighted you appreciated the existential approach I took here, in your thought provoking contest , and even more delighted to have placed with such a short piece, to my own detriment perhaps I tend to visit existentialism upon almost everything I write!, thanks again! Cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 2/25/2025 10:12:00 AM

Congratulations David! Dramatic, well deserved!

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/25/2025 10:39:00 AM

Thank’s Anaya, I am delighted this one went down so well, cheers David

Ink Empress

Date: 2/25/2025 7:56:00 AM

Dear david, altho this is short youv written something that shows your knowledge on saturn too in a subtle manner and also i love how you’ve mentioned “ past moons “ “b l a des reopen wounds and the last line! Its such a touching and a moving poem! And one worthy of definitely a top placement! And i see this was featured as potd too! Congratulations!! Pleasure reading this! Sending you light always

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/25/2025 8:31:00 AM

Heya Ink! This one is indeed pretty short, yet hopefully says something existentially deep, shattered moons are the most likely cause of Saturn’s ring system, it’s pretty unlikely they have always been there, maybe one hundred million years old, which is quite young by universal standards, but they are quite magnificent, much thanks for stopping by, and leaving some light, cheers David

thriveni c mysore

Date: 2/23/2025 12:22:00 AM

it is sure chaos out there dear poet. congratulations on POTD. Cheers!!!

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/23/2025 2:24:00 AM

Thank you Thriveni, chaos organised by chaos, and us humans left to try figure it all out, are we even here at all lol! Cheers David

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/19/2025 5:14:00 AM

interesting write, dear David! proof that I was never there…such a great line…and blades reopen wounds…emotive write. Congrats on POTD!

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/19/2025 6:42:00 AM

Heya Kim, I think this is one of those written on a existential dreamscape level, but somehow resonates on a conscious plane, thanks so much for stopping by, cheers David

Paige Hind

Date: 2/18/2025 8:59:00 PM

I really like this, a fav for me. :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/19/2025 12:48:00 AM

Your fave has just made my day even better Paige, I really enjoyed putting this piece together, and I am delighted yo really like my poem, thank you so much, cheers David

Paige Hind

Date: 2/18/2025 8:59:00 PM

Oh, and congrats on POTD!

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/19/2025 12:48:00 AM

Deb M

Date: 2/18/2025 8:45:00 PM

Congratulations David on POTD….Debx

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/19/2025 12:45:00 AM

Thank you Deb, I’m delighted with the honour, cheers David

Brandy Nicole

Date: 2/18/2025 8:09:00 PM

I must say, you were never there, because you are here. :) Sharing a silly thought. On a more serious note: You would never make it to the rings of Saturn. They're made of ice and rock and the outermost ring moves at 37,000 mph. Ouch ! Very dangerous, indeed. Your thought about reopening wounds, yes, that happens a lot. Congratulations David, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/19/2025 12:43:00 AM

Heya Brandy, in our own subconscious universe we can be everywhere and nowhere all at once ;) I agree those gravitationally bound rings are very dangerous for us mere mortals to visit at the moment, probably best to observe them with our machines, old wounds I think most of us poets have a few, thanks so much for popping by with engaging comments, cheers David

Benjamin Bartley

Date: 2/18/2025 7:31:00 PM

Congrats on your POTD! That's some serious skating ... way out there! Thanks for sharing.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/19/2025 12:35:00 AM

Heya Benjamin, yes existential skating, really is (way out there) thanks so much for stopping by, cheers David

Arlo Parker

Date: 2/18/2025 5:47:00 PM

POTD: mystical, haunting, evocative piece, DK. Well earned. +;o)

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/19/2025 12:32:00 AM

Thank you Arlo, you express all the qualities I tried to portray in my Monoku, cheers David

Tania Kitchin

Date: 2/18/2025 12:13:00 PM

David, congratulations on POTD, a well penned creative poem.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 12:21:00 PM

Thanks so much Tania, maybe there is a little piece of me on those rings after all :) cheers David

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 2/18/2025 11:07:00 AM

Hello David, i thought I would walk around the Saturn Ring. Congrts on the POTD. enjoy your special day. /Darlene/

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 2/19/2025 12:31:00 PM

Hello David, Oh what a lovely thought. enjoy your day my friend. /Darlene/

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 11:55:00 AM

Heya Darlene, who knows someday in another lifetime, we will all be doing laps around Saturn’s rings, thank you so much for stopping by, hope you’re keeping well! Cheers David

Sally Eslinger

Date: 2/18/2025 10:03:00 AM

Thank you for this one, David! I’ve thought of jogging round those rings, but forgot i’d quickly slip off wearing gym shoes. 8-). Bravo from a SCI channel & galaxy fan

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 10:54:00 AM

Ha you would need more than gym shoes Sally; the chances are anyone on the rings would just fall right through them, they are incredibly tenuous, thanks so much for stopping by with fun comment, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 2/18/2025 7:43:00 AM

Tearing up with a bitesize gem, moment. Scars are signs of healing, way to go. Hey Saturn is in Pieces! whatever that means ;) It's really nice to celebrate the honor of POTD with you on this winter's day! Cheers and congratulations!

I Am Anaya
Date: 2/18/2025 4:08:00 PM

Pisces! sorry

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 8:53:00 AM

Heya Anaya! So many ways to interpret scars, physical ones usually are part of the healing process, psychological ones are possibly the opposite, the ones in my tanka have bits of both, I think you may well be right about Saturn being in pieces, I don’t know what it means either lol! Thanks so much for stopping by and that little tear, cheers David

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 2/18/2025 7:40:00 AM

Hey David - Congratulations on an excellent and well deserved POTD - i Loved it and have faved it my friend. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 8:39:00 AM

Ah Jennifer good to hear from you, I’m delighted my little Tanka got POTD, and even more delighted with your fave, thank you so much, cheers David

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/18/2025 7:16:00 AM

Congratulations on your wonderful POTD win. I enjoyed reading this one. Do not skate off the side. Hahaha!!! Have a fun day writing away...................

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 8:37:00 AM

What you mean Paula I only ever skate on the side lol! Thanks so much for fun comment and congrats, cheers David

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 2/18/2025 5:15:00 AM

I’m twirling in celebration, my favourite little poem, Happy POTD! xomo

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 8:35:00 AM

Thank you Super Mo, My tanka’s designation as your little favourite poem, means a lot :) cheers David

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/18/2025 5:13:00 AM

Hello David, I am not a good skater. Lol! As I read I thought how vast and intimate, cosmic yet achingly human. POTD well deserved. You cut like those blades, leaving something undeniable behind. Yes, keep skating those rings. Winter Blessings, My Friend, Daniel

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 8:33:00 AM

(Achingly human) feels about right Daniel, it’s all the proof I need right now, there is something undeniable about that fact, I believe you get the gist of my Tanka, thanks so much for stopping by, cheers David

Tom Woody

Date: 2/18/2025 5:10:00 AM

Dilly gave you a woo hoo, I'll give you a yip yip. Enjoy your day

Tom Woody
Date: 2/18/2025 1:20:00 PM

I've seen that interpretation for yip yip. Thinking not it

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 12:06:00 PM

Xiànzài ni shuo de shì wo de yuyán

Tom Woody
Date: 2/18/2025 8:35:00 AM

Multiple meanings. The more ambiguous the better

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 8:26:00 AM

Seeing we’re spaced out and all that, I’ve run that yip yip through the universal translator, but it’s taking longer than usual and giving off some sparks lol, cheers David

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 2/18/2025 5:08:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD win, with this beautifully crafted piece, David. Well deserved. Have a wonderful day, fellow poet.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 8:18:00 AM

Heya Zyrool, sometimes they come together just right, I’m delighted to meet you, and with your comment, cheers David

Joseph May

Date: 2/18/2025 4:45:00 AM

Congrats on POTD, Nicely done

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 8:15:00 AM

Thank you Joseph, I’m truly delighted with this one, cheers David

Karen Jones

Date: 2/18/2025 4:11:00 AM

Love this creative write! Congratulations on potd and you’ll do well in the contest!

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 4:32:00 AM

Heya Karen, thanks so much for stopping by with kind comments and congratulations, it’s early days in the contest, so will just put one skate in front of the other for now, and enjoy POTD! Cheers David

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 2/18/2025 1:53:00 AM

An intriguing Tanka, David, leaves us pondering. Congratulations on POTD

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/18/2025 2:31:00 AM

Well to get the great Seeker intrigued is always a good sign, ponder away but do keep in mind the subconscious, (well you always do) thanks for stopping by, cheers David