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Sins of the Mind

thorns are helpless - premature petals wither in scents of petrichor 
greed dictates logic - nature suffers in silence - climate confusion

Silent One
28 December 2019

This is an example for my new contest called ku duet
In reality it is two monokus'. both with 17 syllables.
However, the second one is more like a haiku.  With 5/7/5 syllable count, but displayed on one line like a monoku.
I have used 'haiku' as a form, but monoku is ok too. In regards to posting the poem.

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J.W. Earnings Date: 5/31/2020 2:48:00 PM :) wonderful job! I absolutely liked this one in particular! Login to Reply

Old Buck Date: 2/29/2020 2:05:00 PM Too much talent oft makes it hard for those that haven't any too enjoy. I tried. thanks for sharing. oldbuck Login to Reply

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 2/24/2020 8:32:00 AM I like that one. Scents of petrichor, wow. Login to Reply

Sunita U.D Palawon Date: 2/14/2020 9:31:00 AM Powerful write. :) Sunita UPD Login to Reply

Lonna Blodgett Date: 1/25/2020 8:56:00 PM Genius and a metaphoric punch of wisdom. Love it. Lonna Login to Reply

M. L. Kiser Date: 1/22/2020 4:02:00 PM I like this, wise. Login to Reply

Caren Krutsinger Date: 1/13/2020 5:53:00 PM I am impressed. Login to Reply

Funom Makama Date: 1/10/2020 11:09:00 AM Delicious lines, your imagery and creativity are royal sisters. Nice reading from the pen of your mind. Happy 2020. Login to Reply

Verlecia Fields Date: 1/9/2020 9:33:00 PM makes me think of the world and how we're losing Login to Reply

Heidi Sands Date: 1/5/2020 6:01:00 PM Great one SO. You write so well :) Login to Reply

Pratap Roy Date: 1/5/2020 4:26:00 AM Excellent write. God bless you. Login to Reply

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 1/4/2020 9:24:00 AM Planet Earth revealed with exact imagery. excellent write! Blessings, Jennifer. Login to Reply

Phyllis Babcock Date: 1/3/2020 10:09:00 PM So much meaning in these few words. Excellent. love phyl Login to Reply

Ann Foster Date: 1/2/2020 9:32:00 PM Powerful... solemn... and you made me read it twice... then I had to go back to fav.. excellence... top form... Ann Login to Reply

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 1/2/2020 6:54:00 PM Happy New Year to you too dear friend. Login to Reply

Joe Dimino Date: 1/1/2020 11:23:00 AM From the dust of petals, roses return fresh--though their laurels are yet thorns. Oops! I forgot to count the syllables. Have a very Happy New Year, Si; blessing to you and yours. Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:05:00 PM Thank you Joe... Happy new year my friend..

Regina Mcintosh Date: 1/1/2020 10:38:00 AM Intriguing poem, SO.... Love everything you post. You're a talented writer. Love to you, Gina Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:06:00 PM Thank you for your kind words, but i am just an average writer....

Paul Callus Date: 1/1/2020 8:23:00 AM Sins of the mind...sins of mankind...and Nature caught in a tug-of-war. We're heading towards the inevitable! Regards // paul Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:06:00 PM Indeed we are... Thank you Paul..

Alkas Poetry Date: 1/1/2020 5:14:00 AM Nature suffers in silence due greed of men... Logic od metal language dictates confusion and disorder everywhere, great waits my friend, have a nice year @ salute alkas Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:08:00 PM Thank you Alkas... Happy new year.

FJ Thomas Date: 12/31/2019 11:31:00 PM You never disappoint S1. When I need a mental jab you always come through :) I do not know where to even begin... so I'll just exhale and smile. Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:08:00 PM Thank you my friend, nice to see you..

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/31/2019 10:39:00 AM Blessings for 2020 my friend. Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:08:00 PM Have a great 2020 my friend...

Charles Messina Date: 12/31/2019 9:27:00 AM Stopping by again SO, to wish you a very Healthy and Happy New Year. All the best my friend...and many more. ~CM Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:09:00 PM Thank you Charlie.. all the best for 2020..

Jc Hawkens Date: 12/31/2019 8:36:00 AM Thank you for this wonderful example. It is a thought-provoking poem. And I certainly enjoyed the conversation between you and Suzette. An eye opener for sure. Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:10:00 PM Thank you JC.. Any questions, feel free to ask. Jc Hawkens Date: 12/31/2019 2:47:00 PM I am new to poetry so I found the conversation educational.

Ann Foster Date: 12/30/2019 4:02:00 PM This was wonderful. Confusion, yes... solemnly so... I watch as part of the world is drowning, others have no water at all. Crazy... Excellent imagery and use of every word, wrung for all it's worth, by an expert. Ann Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:10:00 PM Thank you Ann, a great compliment from you.. but you are the xpert... i am just a mere word weaver...

Alexis Y. Date: 12/30/2019 10:15:00 AM Hi Silent, This is such a good example for your contest. I think I will give it a go. Have a fantastic day my friend:-) Alexis Login to Reply Silent One Date: 1/2/2020 2:11:00 PM Thank you Alexis..

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