Silent One Poet Haiku

Sins of the Mind

thorns are helpless - premature petals wither in scents of petrichor 
greed dictates logic - nature suffers in silence - climate confusion

Silent One
28 December 2019

This is an example for my new contest called ku duet
In reality it is two monokus'. both with 17 syllables.
However, the second one is more like a haiku.  With 5/7/5 syllable count, but displayed on one line like a monoku.
I have used 'haiku' as a form, but monoku is ok too. In regards to posting the poem.

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David William Breidenthal May 31, 2020 at 2:48 PM :) wonderful job! I absolutely liked this one in particular!

Old Buck February 29, 2020 at 2:05 PM Too much talent oft makes it hard for those that haven't any too enjoy. I tried. thanks for sharing. oldbuck

Kai Michael Neumann February 24, 2020 at 8:32 AM I like that one. Scents of petrichor, wow.

Sunita U.D Palawon February 14, 2020 at 9:31 AM Powerful write. :) Sunita UPD

Lonna Blodgett January 25, 2020 at 8:56 PM Genius and a metaphoric punch of wisdom. Love it. Lonna

M. L. Kiser January 22, 2020 at 4:02 PM I like this, wise.

Caren Krutsinger January 13, 2020 at 5:53 PM I am impressed.

Funom Makama January 10, 2020 at 11:09 AM Delicious lines, your imagery and creativity are royal sisters. Nice reading from the pen of your mind. Happy 2020.

Verlecia Fields January 9, 2020 at 9:33 PM makes me think of the world and how we're losing

Heidi Sands January 5, 2020 at 6:01 PM Great one SO. You write so well :)

Pratap Roy January 5, 2020 at 4:26 AM Excellent write. God bless you.

Jennifer Proxenos January 4, 2020 at 9:24 AM Planet Earth revealed with exact imagery. excellent write! Blessings, Jennifer.

Phyllis Babcock January 3, 2020 at 10:09 PM So much meaning in these few words. Excellent. love phyl

Ann Foster January 2, 2020 at 9:32 PM Powerful... solemn... and you made me read it twice... then I had to go back to fav.. excellence... top form... Ann

Mystic Rose Rose January 2, 2020 at 6:54 PM Happy New Year to you too dear friend.

Joseph P. DiMino January 1, 2020 at 11:23 AM From the dust of petals, roses return fresh--though their laurels are yet thorns. Oops! I forgot to count the syllables. Have a very Happy New Year, Si; blessing to you and yours. Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:05 PM Thank you Joe... Happy new year my friend..

Regina Mcintosh January 1, 2020 at 10:38 AM Intriguing poem, SO.... Love everything you post. You're a talented writer. Love to you, Gina Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:06 PM Thank you for your kind words, but i am just an average writer....

Paul Callus January 1, 2020 at 8:23 AM Sins of the mind...sins of mankind...and Nature caught in a tug-of-war. We're heading towards the inevitable! Regards // paul Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:06 PM Indeed we are... Thank you Paul..

Alkas Poetry January 1, 2020 at 5:14 AM Nature suffers in silence due greed of men... Logic od metal language dictates confusion and disorder everywhere, great waits my friend, have a nice year @ salute alkas Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:08 PM Thank you Alkas... Happy new year.

FJ Thomas December 31, 2019 at 11:31 PM You never disappoint S1. When I need a mental jab you always come through :) I do not know where to even begin... so I'll just exhale and smile. Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:08 PM Thank you my friend, nice to see you..

Richard Lamoureux December 31, 2019 at 10:39 AM Blessings for 2020 my friend. Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:08 PM Have a great 2020 my friend...

Charles Messina December 31, 2019 at 9:27 AM Stopping by again SO, to wish you a very Healthy and Happy New Year. All the best my friend...and many more. ~CM Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:09 PM Thank you Charlie.. all the best for 2020..

Jc Hawkens December 31, 2019 at 8:36 AM Thank you for this wonderful example. It is a thought-provoking poem. And I certainly enjoyed the conversation between you and Suzette. An eye opener for sure. Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:10 PM Thank you JC.. Any questions, feel free to ask. Jc Hawkens December 31, 2019 at 2:47 PM I am new to poetry so I found the conversation educational.

Ann Foster December 30, 2019 at 4:02 PM This was wonderful. Confusion, yes... solemnly so... I watch as part of the world is drowning, others have no water at all. Crazy... Excellent imagery and use of every word, wrung for all it's worth, by an expert. Ann Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:10 PM Thank you Ann, a great compliment from you.. but you are the xpert... i am just a mere word weaver...

Alexis Y. December 30, 2019 at 10:15 AM Hi Silent, This is such a good example for your contest. I think I will give it a go. Have a fantastic day my friend:-) Alexis Silent One January 2, 2020 at 2:11 PM Thank you Alexis..

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