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Sins of the Mind

thorns are helpless - premature petals wither in scents of petrichor greed dictates logic - nature suffers in silence - climate confusion Silent One 28 December 2019 This is an example for my new contest called ku duet In reality it is two monokus'. both with 17 syllables. However, the second one is more like a haiku. With 5/7/5 syllable count, but displayed on one line like a monoku. I have used 'haiku' as a form, but monoku is ok too. In regards to posting the poem.

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J.W. Earnings

Date: 5/31/2020 2:48:00 PM

:) wonderful job! I absolutely liked this one in particular!

Old Buck

Date: 2/29/2020 2:05:00 PM

Too much talent oft makes it hard for those that haven't any too enjoy. I tried. thanks for sharing. oldbuck

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 2/24/2020 8:32:00 AM

I like that one. Scents of petrichor, wow.

Sunita U.D Palawon

Date: 2/14/2020 9:31:00 AM

Powerful write. :) Sunita UPD

Lonna Blodgett

Date: 1/25/2020 8:56:00 PM

Genius and a metaphoric punch of wisdom. Love it. Lonna

M. L. Kiser

Date: 1/22/2020 4:02:00 PM

I like this, wise.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 1/13/2020 5:53:00 PM

I am impressed.

Funom Makama

Date: 1/10/2020 11:09:00 AM

Delicious lines, your imagery and creativity are royal sisters. Nice reading from the pen of your mind. Happy 2020.

Verlecia Fields

Date: 1/9/2020 9:33:00 PM

makes me think of the world and how we're losing

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/5/2020 6:01:00 PM

Great one SO. You write so well :)

Pratap Roy

Date: 1/5/2020 4:26:00 AM

Excellent write. God bless you.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/4/2020 9:24:00 AM

Planet Earth revealed with exact imagery. excellent write! Blessings, Jennifer.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 1/3/2020 10:09:00 PM

So much meaning in these few words. Excellent. love phyl

Ann Foster

Date: 1/2/2020 9:32:00 PM

Powerful... solemn... and you made me read it twice... then I had to go back to fav.. excellence... top form... Ann

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 1/2/2020 6:54:00 PM

Happy New Year to you too dear friend.

Joe Dimino

Date: 1/1/2020 11:23:00 AM

From the dust of petals, roses return fresh--though their laurels are yet thorns. Oops! I forgot to count the syllables. Have a very Happy New Year, Si; blessing to you and yours.

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:05:00 PM

Thank you Joe... Happy new year my friend..

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 1/1/2020 10:38:00 AM

Intriguing poem, SO.... Love everything you post. You're a talented writer. Love to you, Gina

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:06:00 PM

Thank you for your kind words, but i am just an average writer....

Paul Callus

Date: 1/1/2020 8:23:00 AM

Sins of the mind...sins of mankind...and Nature caught in a tug-of-war. We're heading towards the inevitable! Regards // paul

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:06:00 PM

Indeed we are... Thank you Paul..

Alkas Poetry

Date: 1/1/2020 5:14:00 AM

Nature suffers in silence due greed of men... Logic od metal language dictates confusion and disorder everywhere, great waits my friend, have a nice year @ salute alkas

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:08:00 PM

Thank you Alkas... Happy new year.

FJ Thomas

Date: 12/31/2019 11:31:00 PM

You never disappoint S1. When I need a mental jab you always come through :) I do not know where to even begin... so I'll just exhale and smile.

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:08:00 PM

Thank you my friend, nice to see you..

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/31/2019 10:39:00 AM

Blessings for 2020 my friend.

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:08:00 PM

Have a great 2020 my friend...

Charles Messina

Date: 12/31/2019 9:27:00 AM

Stopping by again SO, to wish you a very Healthy and Happy New Year. All the best my friend...and many more. ~CM

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:09:00 PM

Thank you Charlie.. all the best for 2020..

Jc Hawkens

Date: 12/31/2019 8:36:00 AM

Thank you for this wonderful example. It is a thought-provoking poem. And I certainly enjoyed the conversation between you and Suzette. An eye opener for sure.

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:10:00 PM

Thank you JC.. Any questions, feel free to ask.

Jc Hawkens
Date: 12/31/2019 2:47:00 PM

I am new to poetry so I found the conversation educational.

Ann Foster

Date: 12/30/2019 4:02:00 PM

This was wonderful. Confusion, yes... solemnly so... I watch as part of the world is drowning, others have no water at all. Crazy... Excellent imagery and use of every word, wrung for all it's worth, by an expert. Ann

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:10:00 PM

Thank you Ann, a great compliment from you.. but you are the xpert... i am just a mere word weaver...

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/30/2019 10:15:00 AM

Hi Silent, This is such a good example for your contest. I think I will give it a go. Have a fantastic day my friend:-) Alexis

Silent One
Date: 1/2/2020 2:11:00 PM

Thank you Alexis..