Susan Gentry Poet Rhyme

Since You Abandoned Me

Rarely do I glimpse your shadow
Or wonder how you had the gall
I hardly think of you at all

Rarely wish it'll be your hello
Time has allowed me to believe
I'm fine since you abandoned me

Rarely am I sad or morose
I'm not sorry you're missing out
I do wonder if you have doubt

Rarely say your name even low
I've decided I will forgive
If this is how I'll have to live

To ignore me is cruel though
You've never said why you are through
I rarely ever think of you

Rarely do I glimpse your shadow
Rarely wish it'll be your hello
Rarely am I sad or morose
Rarely say your name even low
To ignore me is cruel though


July 16, 2018

July 25, 2018 - Abandon 2 Contest By Brenda Chiri
Form - Constanza
Third Place


The Constanza created by Connie Marcum Wong consists of five or more 3-line stanzas. Each line eight syllables. All the first lines of all the stanzas form an independent poem as the rest of the poem expresses a deeper meaning. The first lines are in mono-rhyme while the second and third lines of each stanza rhyme together. Rhyme scheme: a/b/b a/c/c a/d/d a/e/e a/f/f........etc. And the end verse is made up of the first lines of all the previous verses combined.

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Paul Murray October 30, 2020 at 11:57 AM I feel the same

Roy Pett July 29, 2018 at 7:15 AM Please accept my belated congratulations Susan for your well deserved win with this well written constanza. :)) Susan Gentry July 29, 2018 at 8:51 PM Why thank you so much! :)

Eve Roper July 27, 2018 at 6:54 PM Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading this well written poem with great imagery. Hugs Eve Susan Gentry July 28, 2018 at 12:10 AM Thanks so much, Eve.

Greg Gaul July 26, 2018 at 3:08 PM Here all along I think you rarely think of me at all but you mention me in the second line! What can I say? Seriously though, fine intricate work, terrific rhyme pattern in a disciplined and thoughtful verse. Congrats on your deserved win. Susan Gentry July 27, 2018 at 6:30 PM Thank you, Greg. :) maybe convincing herself? Appreciate you reading and commenting.

Richard Lamoureux July 26, 2018 at 8:48 AM You do well to forgive. Congrats on your win. This is well expressed. Susan Gentry July 27, 2018 at 6:29 PM Thank you, Richard. Appreciate your input.

Sandra Haight July 25, 2018 at 6:58 PM Sad but healed feelings of abandonment powerfully conveyed in your skilled use of the Constanza form, Susan. Congratulations on your podium win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra Susan Gentry July 25, 2018 at 10:13 PM Thank you, Sandra. Means a lot from you.

Harry Horsman July 18, 2018 at 8:02 AM Love the depth of feeling, you have created, here in this wonderful poem. Susan Gentry July 22, 2018 at 5:12 AM Thank you, Harry!

Charles Messina July 18, 2018 at 7:33 AM It's certainly sad when a relationship ends...I know, I've been there too. But things happen for a reason. Usually for the better :) Well written, Susan. Good luck in the contest and if this is about you...chin up my dear friend...Charlie Susan Gentry July 22, 2018 at 5:11 AM Thank you.

Timothy Mcguire July 17, 2018 at 11:02 PM If that person had experienced the talent in this poem there is no way they could ignore you! Susan Gentry July 22, 2018 at 5:11 AM Ahhh :)

Michelle Faulkner July 17, 2018 at 3:13 PM So stirring and sad, good luck in the contest! Susan Gentry July 17, 2018 at 8:29 PM Thank you!

Barry Stebbings July 17, 2018 at 1:45 PM Sincerely written, Susan, I am not sure if this is true or fiction. Good luck in the contest. // Barry. Susan Gentry July 17, 2018 at 8:21 PM Thank you!

Charlie Smith July 17, 2018 at 10:28 AM Sometimes time doesn't heal all wounds, well done Susan... Susan Gentry July 17, 2018 at 11:00 AM Thank you. So true. :)

Lyric Man July 17, 2018 at 4:51 AM Susan, I can feel the angst and pain of not knowing why a relationship ended. It's maddening and you want to forget, but can you really? Susan Gentry July 17, 2018 at 7:02 AM No, not forget. Learn to live with it though. Faith helps too. Thank you for your comments.

Janice Canerdy July 17, 2018 at 12:33 AM Methinks the speaker doth protest too much!" Lovely poem, Susan! Janice Susan Gentry July 17, 2018 at 7:00 AM You may be right. :)

Caren Krutsinger July 16, 2018 at 11:36 PM "Rarely do I think of your voice Time has allowed me to believe I'm fine since you abandoned me" speaks to the reader, reminiding us that abandonment takes time to get over. The last line ties in nicely with the theme too. Nicely built. Good luck in the contest, Susan. Susan Gentry July 17, 2018 at 6:56 AM Thanks Caren. Appreciate your comment. :)

Anisha Dutta July 16, 2018 at 9:39 PM Good Rhyme. Rhythmic flow.

Andrea Dietrich July 16, 2018 at 5:53 PM Susan, maybe I forgot the form, but are the lines supposed to rhyme on the bottom?I will go remind myself. If not for that, this was a really great poem!! Susan Gentry July 16, 2018 at 6:11 PM Yes, you are right! I forgot that part. I'll have to figure that out. Until then will make it a rhyme only. Thank you!

Arturo Michael July 16, 2018 at 4:47 PM Interesting...I like the way you delivered the message..."Ignoring me is cruel to do" All the best Susan Susan Gentry July 16, 2018 at 5:40 PM Thanks so much.

Tom Cunningham July 16, 2018 at 11:08 AM Mental bullying is sometimes worse than physical bullying, you heal but it takes time. Susan Gentry July 16, 2018 at 5:40 PM Yes it is and the scars are not obvious. Time and good support has helped me. The worst part is no knowing why... it was a close relative.