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Simulacrum

Upon my museum walls, pastiche you are, Pseudo piece of art dredging old memories; Where I hang now, a fine authentic painting— Love of my sweet dreams. You claim I once bloomed your ardent reveries Yet, I recall your dreamworld quite illusive When you pulsed my heart in your glory within Phantasm of deceit. There I was with you in your place of conceit Where you waltzed in my life sparkling like gemstone But soon you were unmasked as spurious clone-- An unwanted stone. Don't come now, pretending it was real love, When you still are, frowning face of frippery; You've no place in temple of divine worship Where my goddess lives. June 22, 2020 Pick-A-Title, Vol 19 - 4 Sapphic Stanzas – Poetry Contest Sponsor: Edward Ibeh Title chosen: Simulacrum Each stanza: 11,11,11,5 (howmanysyllables.com)

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Date: 7/27/2020 11:40:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your win dear friend :)
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Date: 7/22/2020 7:42:00 PM
Poignant piece, Vijay, wonderfully expressed and my compliments on your win -- Aloha~@William
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Date: 7/22/2020 5:51:00 PM
Pastiche, love your use of that word, Vijay and how you've related it her being a clone. Very nice.
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Date: 7/22/2020 4:40:00 PM
beautiful in its sadness, many congrats on your win Vijay:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/22/2020 10:35:00 AM
Beautifully rendered poem, Vijay:-) Loved it. Congratulations on your 2nd place win in my contest!
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Date: 6/26/2020 5:39:00 PM
Such a beautiful, sad piece, Vijay, a vivid blend of figurative and literal language conveying the message that what wasn't real can't be revived. Janice
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/27/2020 11:10:00 AM
Thank you Janice--much appreciate.
Date: 6/26/2020 2:31:00 PM
Lovely my friend...You've stated your case clearly here...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/26/2020 4:32:00 PM
Thank you Arturo--much appreciate.
Date: 6/23/2020 4:09:00 PM
A beautiful piece, Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/24/2020 12:27:00 PM
Thank you Kim--much appreciate the kind remarks.
Date: 6/23/2020 3:46:00 PM
Wow... Love this, because it's like a poem I would write...I agree, don't come when you had a chance and messed it up...Too late now....
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/24/2020 12:26:00 PM
Thank you, SO--much appreciate, my friend.
Date: 6/23/2020 12:27:00 PM
Well done Vijay. Once we have been through a bad experience if we are wise we learn to appreciate the real thing. Great job. God Bless, JB
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/23/2020 2:56:00 PM
Much appreciate Judy--many thanks.
Date: 6/23/2020 8:40:00 AM
Your muse is a masterpiece in this form. Heartwarming, engaging and adorned with beautiful imagery and emotions. Absolutely gorgeous Vijay! Best wishes and blessings :) Keep writing and inspiring :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/23/2020 12:14:00 PM
That is so nice to hear--especially from a talented poetess. Much appreciate, Aditi--many thanks.
Date: 6/23/2020 4:34:00 AM
My dearest friend, Vijay, this is an old, old story that all of us, I guess, have been through! Although a painful experience still is an experience that helped you find your " authentic painting " which you appreciate so much! Fantastic writing: True, powerful, moving! I think all of us readers felt your anguish and your election! Excellent!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/23/2020 12:13:00 PM
So very kind of you my dear friend--much appreciate your valued feedback, Demetrios--many thanks.
Date: 6/23/2020 1:57:00 AM
frowning face of frippery..dredging old memories..Wonderful poetic expressions.. Interesting write and a great entry in the contest Vijay.. Good luck..
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/23/2020 12:11:00 PM
Glad you liked the line--much appreciate, Jenish--many thanks.
Date: 6/22/2020 10:59:00 PM
I love how complex and layered this is, you describe the disillusionment of losing love so vividly, excellent entry for the contest!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/23/2020 12:10:00 PM
So very kind of you Michelle--much appreciate your visit and comments--many thanks.
Date: 6/22/2020 8:47:00 PM
You've no place in temple of divine worship, where my goddess lives" Deep sigh. Such words tug at my heart. Many emotions linger within. This is beautiful, yet sad at the same time. ~ Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/23/2020 12:10:00 PM
Always happy to read your comments--much appreciate Brandy--many thanks.
Date: 6/22/2020 3:57:00 PM
A powerful poem Vijay . I can feel this, as I read it and with such strength too. Great one :) I hope you have a nice evening :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/23/2020 12:09:00 PM
Appreciate the kind feedback Heidi--many thanks, as always.
Date: 6/22/2020 3:35:00 PM
We've all been taken in at some point in our lives, and things are often not what we thought they were, but we learn from our mistakes. Interesting write Vijay. Good luck in the contest. Tom
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/23/2020 12:08:00 PM
Much appreciate Tom--many thanks.