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Simple Heaven

Heaven to me is purely this 
After a long and stressful day 
Deep bubble bath, oh such pure bliss 
Just need to melt my cares away 
In foaming oils I love to lay 
Scent of lavender will arise 
Ease my tension and tired sore eyes 
Wrap in a warm fluffy towel 
Simple pleasures will be my prize
Drift to sleep, not be a night owl 


01~31~15
Contest Dizain Me – Dr Ram Mehta
How many syllables used  - each line is 8 syllables
~awarded 3rd place~

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Skat A Date: 2/15/2015 10:41:00 AM Jan ~ Congratulations on the win. It's an honor to read every poem In Dr Ram's DAZAIN ME contest. *Skat LOVE* Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/15/2015 10:57:00 AM Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan x

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/6/2015 10:51:00 PM So glad he scored you high for your unique theme, Jan. BIG congrats to you in this contest. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/7/2015 2:19:00 AM Thanks Andrea :-) Hugs Jan xx

Grace Mutindi Date: 2/5/2015 5:42:00 AM A fun way of presenting Heaven Jan, congrats! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/5/2015 9:35:00 AM Thanks so much Grace:-) Hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 2/3/2015 2:55:00 PM Hi Jan, stopping back to congratulate your on your nice win! Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 2:57:00 PM Thanks so much Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Barbara Gorelick Date: 2/3/2015 1:58:00 PM Ahhh, serene and I enjoy the experience as you do..congrats. BG Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 2:11:00 PM I should be living in the bath Barbara - I need to chill as much as possible at the moment :-( hugs Jan xx

Earl Schumacker Date: 2/3/2015 10:26:00 AM Hi Jan, Very nice accomplishment. Great job. Very tranquil and relaxing. Congratulations on your win. Here is something that rhymes with heaven....A 7. You and the poem deserve that designated rating. Have a wonderful day. Earl Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 10:35:00 AM Thanks so much Earl I do appreciate your support:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May Date: 2/3/2015 10:22:00 AM Congrats on your win Jan... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 10:34:00 AM Thanks for your support Joseph:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper Date: 2/3/2015 8:47:00 AM Congratulations on your winning poem, Jan, beautiful write a 7. I miss my resttime in the bath tub. xoxox Eve Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 10:34:00 AM I could live there at the moment Eve - wash all my troubles away:-( Hugs Jan xx

Mohan Chutani Date: 2/3/2015 8:40:00 AM simple heaven that melts all cares away. congrats Jan. Mohan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 10:33:00 AM You have hit the nail on the head Mohan:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper Date: 2/3/2015 7:55:00 AM Hi Jan, congrats on the win. It is a great poem. love Shane Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 10:32:00 AM Thanks Shane I need to live in my bath then my bed at the moment:-( Hugs jan xx

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty Date: 2/3/2015 7:36:00 AM Congrats on your win Jan>God bless>rajat Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 10:32:00 AM Thanks Rajat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poesy Relish Date: 2/3/2015 7:18:00 AM dropping by with congrats on your win Jan.. lov, nad! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 10:31:00 AM Thanks so much Nadiya:-) hugs jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 2/3/2015 5:26:00 AM Thanks for participating in my contest and congrats on the win, Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/3/2015 6:26:00 AM Thank you Dr Mehta:-) Hugs Jan x

Liam Mcdaid Date: 2/2/2015 5:50:00 AM sure is bliss jan nice to like back soaking excellent pen dear pal Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/2/2015 7:59:00 AM Thanks Liam:-) hugs Jan x Liam Mcdaid Date: 2/2/2015 5:52:00 AM meant lay back not like sorry for typo

James Fraser Date: 2/1/2015 3:16:00 PM Beautiful bliss Jan, nothing beats a good soak, hugs, James xx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/1/2015 3:21:00 PM Oh I agree James with the stress I've been under i should never get out of it lol:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Shadow Hamilton Date: 2/1/2015 1:14:00 AM ah yes pure bliss as you say Jan excellent pen gl in contest hugs 7 fav Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 2/1/2015 5:08:00 AM Thanks so much Shadow:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus Date: 1/31/2015 4:57:00 PM I like the way you altered your previous write, Jan; you lost none of the blissful hot bubble bath effect in the process! hugs // paul Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:53:00 PM Thanks Paul I prefer the original poem but it didn't fit the form so thought I would rewrite it to fit the form - that was a real challenge! Hugs jan xxxx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 1/31/2015 3:13:00 AM wow cozy refreshing and totally relaxing.. :)! indeed there are pieces of heaven here on earth.. :)! --olive eloisa and all hugs for you!. :) Happy weekend.. :)! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:24:00 AM Thanks so much Olive:-) Hugs Jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders Date: 1/30/2015 9:52:00 PM A heavenly write, Jan!! I love a bubble bath. Add a 1 hour full massage...it doesn't get much better...this is wonderful for the Heaven contest and would work for the indulgence contest, too...have a blessed weekend. Hugs, Rhonda Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:23:00 AM My hour aromatherapy sessions I have via hospice are absolutely amazing - if I could then have a bubble bath and great straight into bed and sleep - would be absolute heaven - I may suggest it to them lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/30/2015 9:00:00 PM this is REALLY good, JAn, how you fit it to that rhyme scheme. I know you were saying not that great but I disagree!! it is a great one you did for his contest. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:22:00 AM Thanks Andrea I did find the rhyme scheme difficult but gave it my best shot:-) Hugs Jan x

Shane Cooper Date: 1/30/2015 8:19:00 PM My gentle friend You have produced a great poem. I see that this form of poetry suits you. To be able to produce a poem and then write it in totally different forms of poetry with each being a wonderful poem shows true artistic talent. Love Shane xxx Login to Reply Shane Cooper Date: 1/31/2015 5:37:00 AM I withdrew my poem from the comp and have just finished a new attempt that is actually a disain and have deleted it accidentally just not meant to be I suppose Do not believe that for a moment that you struggled. Your poems flow from the heart which means they can encompass the world. Love Shane xxx Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:21:00 AM I struggled with this one Shane - need to live in my bath forever at the moment:-( Hugs Jan x

Debbie Guzzi Date: 1/30/2015 7:44:00 PM You are very lucky to find heaven in the things around you, how wise! Light & Love Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:20:00 AM May as well enjoy heaven on earth too Debbie:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight Date: 1/30/2015 7:14:00 PM Sounds wonderful to me too! Nicely written with lots of heavenly relaxation imaged. Best wishes in the contest! Hugs, Sandra Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:20:00 AM Thanks Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian Date: 1/30/2015 6:51:00 PM Sheer bliss! :) You go, girl!!! Soak away! Loved this, hon. Hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/31/2015 5:19:00 AM I should live in my bath at the moment Eileen lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Barbara Gorelick Date: 1/30/2015 6:43:00 PM Pure heaven it is...one of my favorite things. Enjoyed your poem ....BG Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 1/30/2015 7:07:00 PM I re-wrote 'my idea of heaven' poem for the contest - not sure it will place but i can only hope for the best:-) Hugs jan xxx

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