Jan Allison Poet Dizain

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Simple Heaven

Heaven to me is purely this 
After a long and stressful day 
Deep bubble bath, oh such pure bliss 
Just need to melt my cares away 
In foaming oils I love to lay 
Scent of lavender will arise 
Ease my tension and tired sore eyes 
Wrap in a warm fluffy towel 
Simple pleasures will be my prize
Drift to sleep, not be a night owl 


01~31~15
Contest Dizain Me – Dr Ram Mehta
How many syllables used  - each line is 8 syllables
~awarded 3rd place~

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Skat A February 15, 2015 at 10:41 AM Jan ~ Congratulations on the win. It's an honor to read every poem In Dr Ram's DAZAIN ME contest. *Skat LOVE* Jan Allison February 15, 2015 at 10:57 AM Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan x

Andrea Dietrich February 6, 2015 at 10:51 PM So glad he scored you high for your unique theme, Jan. BIG congrats to you in this contest. Jan Allison February 7, 2015 at 2:19 AM Thanks Andrea :-) Hugs Jan xx

Grace Mutindi February 5, 2015 at 5:42 AM A fun way of presenting Heaven Jan, congrats! Jan Allison February 5, 2015 at 9:35 AM Thanks so much Grace:-) Hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight February 3, 2015 at 2:55 PM Hi Jan, stopping back to congratulate your on your nice win! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 2:57 PM Thanks so much Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Barbara Gorelick February 3, 2015 at 1:58 PM Ahhh, serene and I enjoy the experience as you do..congrats. BG Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 2:11 PM I should be living in the bath Barbara - I need to chill as much as possible at the moment :-( hugs Jan xx

Earl Schumacker February 3, 2015 at 10:26 AM Hi Jan, Very nice accomplishment. Great job. Very tranquil and relaxing. Congratulations on your win. Here is something that rhymes with heaven....A 7. You and the poem deserve that designated rating. Have a wonderful day. Earl Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 10:35 AM Thanks so much Earl I do appreciate your support:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May February 3, 2015 at 10:22 AM Congrats on your win Jan... Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 10:34 AM Thanks for your support Joseph:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper February 3, 2015 at 8:47 AM Congratulations on your winning poem, Jan, beautiful write a 7. I miss my resttime in the bath tub. xoxox Eve Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 10:34 AM I could live there at the moment Eve - wash all my troubles away:-( Hugs Jan xx

Mohan Chutani February 3, 2015 at 8:40 AM simple heaven that melts all cares away. congrats Jan. Mohan Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 10:33 AM You have hit the nail on the head Mohan:-) Hugs Jan xx

Shane Cooper February 3, 2015 at 7:55 AM Hi Jan, congrats on the win. It is a great poem. love Shane Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 10:32 AM Thanks Shane I need to live in my bath then my bed at the moment:-( Hugs jan xx

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty February 3, 2015 at 7:36 AM Congrats on your win Jan>God bless>rajat Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 10:32 AM Thanks Rajat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poesy Relish February 3, 2015 at 7:18 AM dropping by with congrats on your win Jan.. lov, nad! Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 10:31 AM Thanks so much Nadiya:-) hugs jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta February 3, 2015 at 5:26 AM Thanks for participating in my contest and congrats on the win, Jan Jan Allison February 3, 2015 at 6:26 AM Thank you Dr Mehta:-) Hugs Jan x

Liam Mcdaid February 2, 2015 at 5:50 AM sure is bliss jan nice to like back soaking excellent pen dear pal Jan Allison February 2, 2015 at 7:59 AM Thanks Liam:-) hugs Jan x Liam Mcdaid February 2, 2015 at 5:52 AM meant lay back not like sorry for typo

James Fraser February 1, 2015 at 3:16 PM Beautiful bliss Jan, nothing beats a good soak, hugs, James xx Jan Allison February 1, 2015 at 3:21 PM Oh I agree James with the stress I've been under i should never get out of it lol:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Shadow Hamilton February 1, 2015 at 1:14 AM ah yes pure bliss as you say Jan excellent pen gl in contest hugs 7 fav Jan Allison February 1, 2015 at 5:08 AM Thanks so much Shadow:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus January 31, 2015 at 4:57 PM I like the way you altered your previous write, Jan; you lost none of the blissful hot bubble bath effect in the process! hugs // paul Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:53 PM Thanks Paul I prefer the original poem but it didn't fit the form so thought I would rewrite it to fit the form - that was a real challenge! Hugs jan xxxx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser January 31, 2015 at 3:13 AM wow cozy refreshing and totally relaxing.. :)! indeed there are pieces of heaven here on earth.. :)! --olive eloisa and all hugs for you!. :) Happy weekend.. :)! Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:24 AM Thanks so much Olive:-) Hugs Jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders January 30, 2015 at 9:52 PM A heavenly write, Jan!! I love a bubble bath. Add a 1 hour full massage...it doesn't get much better...this is wonderful for the Heaven contest and would work for the indulgence contest, too...have a blessed weekend. Hugs, Rhonda Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:23 AM My hour aromatherapy sessions I have via hospice are absolutely amazing - if I could then have a bubble bath and great straight into bed and sleep - would be absolute heaven - I may suggest it to them lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich January 30, 2015 at 9:00 PM this is REALLY good, JAn, how you fit it to that rhyme scheme. I know you were saying not that great but I disagree!! it is a great one you did for his contest. Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:22 AM Thanks Andrea I did find the rhyme scheme difficult but gave it my best shot:-) Hugs Jan x

Shane Cooper January 30, 2015 at 8:19 PM My gentle friend You have produced a great poem. I see that this form of poetry suits you. To be able to produce a poem and then write it in totally different forms of poetry with each being a wonderful poem shows true artistic talent. Love Shane xxx Shane Cooper January 31, 2015 at 5:37 AM I withdrew my poem from the comp and have just finished a new attempt that is actually a disain and have deleted it accidentally just not meant to be I suppose Do not believe that for a moment that you struggled. Your poems flow from the heart which means they can encompass the world. Love Shane xxx Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:21 AM I struggled with this one Shane - need to live in my bath forever at the moment:-( Hugs Jan x

Debbie Guzzi January 30, 2015 at 7:44 PM You are very lucky to find heaven in the things around you, how wise! Light & Love Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:20 AM May as well enjoy heaven on earth too Debbie:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight January 30, 2015 at 7:14 PM Sounds wonderful to me too! Nicely written with lots of heavenly relaxation imaged. Best wishes in the contest! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:20 AM Thanks Sandra:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian January 30, 2015 at 6:51 PM Sheer bliss! :) You go, girl!!! Soak away! Loved this, hon. Hugs Jan Allison January 31, 2015 at 5:19 AM I should live in my bath at the moment Eileen lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Barbara Gorelick January 30, 2015 at 6:43 PM Pure heaven it is...one of my favorite things. Enjoyed your poem ....BG Jan Allison January 30, 2015 at 7:07 PM I re-wrote 'my idea of heaven' poem for the contest - not sure it will place but i can only hope for the best:-) Hugs jan xxx

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