Premiere Contest WinnerSilhouettes

Like dancers,
the elms lift their arms
skyward.
The oaks clutch the air
with gnarled fingers,
bony branches 
etched into the pastel evening.

It is time
to step forward, 
uncloaked,
my naked shadow
dancing
on the canvas of the world.

1/22/2017
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Roper Avatar
February 8, 2018 at 11:21 PM
Congratulations on your win, Agnes! Great choice for the contest. Hugs Eve ~`*
Gauthier Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 8:38 PM
A beautiful charmer of a poem. Congrats on your win, Agnes.
Ashley Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 7:25 PM
So poetically and artistically creative and beautiful Agnes. Superb imagery and personification. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes ~Susan
One Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 3:47 PM
This is a great choice for your best poem, full of great lines Agnes.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest, I am happy you entered and the poem will be showcased..
Krampe Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 5:50 PM
Thank you for my placement, Silent One. This poem is dear to my heart, and I am glad you liked it.
Dietrich Avatar
May 10, 2017 at 6:48 PM
Checking out your best poems list and found one of my five favorites of yours is about fifth on the list. THIS beauty. (my skeleton tree in Brian's recent contest is kind of like this!). I was happy to see that all the others of yours I had faved are on your BEST list!
Krampe Avatar
May 10, 2017 at 7:01 PM
Aww, thanks so much. I actually think this is one of my best poems. Maybe I need to commit to free verse and ditch the rhyme (except for the light, humorous poems)
Michaels Avatar
May 1, 2017 at 11:31 AM
Such a lovely piece, Agnes. Evocative language and wonderful imagery. A well-deserved First Place! Regards, John.
Krampe Avatar
May 10, 2017 at 7:01 PM
Thank you so much, John.
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 3, 2017 at 8:16 AM
Oh I really love this Agnes. I see why it came in first place! Congratulations! A Fave from me! 7 ; )
Krampe Avatar
April 3, 2017 at 10:44 AM
Thank you so much, Connie.
Medders Tobechi Avatar
April 2, 2017 at 2:32 PM
Very good write. Congratulation on your trophy win.
Krampe Avatar
April 2, 2017 at 2:46 PM
Thank you, Janis.
Dietrich Avatar
February 16, 2017 at 6:54 PM
So glad she chose you on her winners' list One of your poems that I just adore! If I did not fave this one yet, it's faved now. Congrats on your win.
Krampe Avatar
February 16, 2017 at 7:17 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea - this means a lot to me.
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February 15, 2017 at 9:31 PM
Beautiful and creative imagery, Agnes...I love the line, "bony branches etched into the pastel evening". Just wonderful...congrats and hugs, Rhonda
Krampe Avatar
February 16, 2017 at 7:17 PM
Thank you for visiting, Rhonda, and for your kind comments.
Scars Avatar
February 15, 2017 at 9:33 AM
beauty at it's best Agnes!!! so much depth..."uncloaked, my naked shadow dancing on the canvas of the world." Loved that last line- thank you and congrats :)-luloo
Krampe Avatar
February 15, 2017 at 10:30 AM
Thank you very much, luloo - I am so glad you liked my poem.
Martin Avatar
February 12, 2017 at 12:50 PM
Love free verse myself, but still find it difficult. This is excellent. Congratulations Agnes! :-)
La France Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 7:56 PM
Agnes congratulations on your win in my contest with this lovely write ~
White Avatar
February 11, 2017 at 4:26 AM
Coming back to you with congratulations :)
Daniel Avatar
February 10, 2017 at 1:15 AM
This is a deep write, Agnes and powerful too, some are good at rhyme and some at free verse, you are excellent with free verse:) so keep them coming :)
Carmack Avatar
February 8, 2017 at 3:44 AM
Agnes - congrats on your win. About Frost's comment 'playing tennis without a net', my counter to that is: 'how boring when missionary is the only position'. Remember, Frost was only a man with opinions.
Dietrich Avatar
January 26, 2017 at 8:48 PM
oh my goodness. You are REALLy good with free verse, Agnes. Another one just as wonderful as the one I read yesterday.
Krampe Avatar
January 26, 2017 at 9:35 PM
Thank you so much, Andrea. I am still not entirely sure how I feel about free verse; Robert Frost's comment about it being like "playing tennis without net" is in the back of my mind and I keep wondering every now and then whether it's a cop-out because I can't manage to get rhyme and meter to work. But then, some things just come out in free verse by themselves and resist being forced into a metered form...
White Avatar
January 24, 2017 at 1:25 PM
Agnes, this is so beautiful... I will not add to the discussion itself other than to say yes, we are worried.
Krampe Avatar
January 24, 2017 at 3:56 PM
Thanks for stopping by and commenting. I can understand that you would be worried, and quite likely more than I am.
Gupta Avatar
January 23, 2017 at 9:16 AM
THE poem of the time ... Great work ...
Krampe Avatar
January 23, 2017 at 2:25 PM
Thank you, Probir.
Turner Avatar
January 23, 2017 at 8:52 AM
I love the poem. Mrs Agnes. Reading the conversation below, we can not worry about tomorrow, as it will change nothing. We must try to stay in the moment/today.
Turner Avatar
January 23, 2017 at 2:39 PM
Mrs Agnes, tomorrow never comes. Do what you can today:)
Krampe Avatar
January 23, 2017 at 2:25 PM
Daniel, thank you for stopping by with your comment. I respectfully disagree - while living in the moment, we must worry about tomorrow, because only that can bring about action that may possibly lead to change. I have grown up in a totalitarian system and am cherishing this country for its liberties and civil rights - and I am concerned.
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 5:00 PM
what amazing personification Agnes the imagery of the silhouettes is super:-) hugs Jan xx
Allison Avatar
January 22, 2017 at 5:31 PM
So good to have you back Agnes ... it is a worrying time for us all with 'President' Trump and Brexit - I think both decisions have stunned many and we all now have to live with the consequences:-( hugs jan xx
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January 22, 2017 at 5:12 PM
Thank you, Jan. I have not written anything in a while, my mind has been too much on the political developments, and I felt very out of equilibrium. Gotta get back in the game.
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