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Sheer Voices - Cinquain - Cinqku

water
his undertow
where seagulls still cry for
his touch on the stiffening mast
sails gone

sea swept — 
his shipwreck
staging her oars 
whispers in the water
she screams

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Susan Ashley

Date: 6/1/2025 7:21:00 PM

Dear Paige, your amazing artistry shines in this potent and poignant poem. A short form full of turmoil and passion; a dark, intriguing piece. Warmest wishes, my inspiring poet friend.. ~Susan

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 5/28/2025 4:36:00 AM

another quality rendering of form from you..intriguing and unsettling..

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/27/2025 4:23:00 PM

This is truly wonderful and beautifully worded. Your cinquains spoke a lot in some lines, and it sounds like the water itself crying in solitude and shattering—so sparse.

Silent One

Date: 5/25/2025 10:15:00 AM

You did the form really well Paige... nice imagery also..

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/24/2025 10:56:00 AM

- A tragedy ... a sorrowful poem, Paige - hugs

Alesia Leach

Date: 5/23/2025 4:53:00 PM

This reads like the sea itself mourning in silence and shatter--so spare, yet drenched in emotion. The shift from "whispers in the water" to "she screams" is devastatingly powerful. A shipwreck of a poem in the best way.

Ink Empress

Date: 5/23/2025 1:02:00 PM

Gosh this is so beautiful and so creatively written! I love this for. Your cinqkus delivered so much in few syllables! You do that always so well while also playing around with words in such eloquence! Pleasure reading you today! Sending you light always

CayCay Jennings

Date: 5/23/2025 11:14:00 AM

Sometimes, when you do "profound" using only metaphors, I feel stupid cause I don't get it. THIS I GOT AND LOVE HAVING, it is perfect, it delivers, and both my head and emotions feel it. So happy for my head and emotions, as awoken today, by you. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/23/2025 7:57:00 AM

A tragic tale artistically rendered, Paige

Yann Rolland

Date: 5/23/2025 5:12:00 AM

loved the subtlety of scenery and images, great art my friend, have a nice week end

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/22/2025 1:43:00 AM

You write about emotions. That is good. Very much to the point.

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 5/21/2025 6:48:00 PM

A whispered scream. Sad. Powerfully written Paige.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/21/2025 6:13:00 PM

Frightening end!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/21/2025 5:43:00 PM

powerful cinquain with mysterious subtexts, paige...i likey!

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/21/2025 5:36:00 PM

Dear Paige Your wonderful verse explores sorrow, desire, and the lingering remembrance of a broken romance. The shipwreck and sea metaphor indicates grieving for something lost or altered.