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checked with how many syllables 10/15/23

 

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She Walks In Beauty

cool waves crest golden sands white spume tickles naked toes, as I stroll in silence by the shore precious memories of family holidays children flown the nest, now I walk alone
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Volumes Avatar
October 17, 2023 at 5:43 AM
This is really lovely.
Allison Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:06 AM
thank you
Empress Avatar
October 17, 2023 at 5:35 AM
Dear Jan, I really love not just the imagery in this but also the emotions flowing throughout this, i think many can resonate with this poignant write. Your opening cinquain really stood out for me as you wrote “ crest golden sands” beautiful words to describe the beach, “ children flown nest” “ now i walk alone” is soul stirring, i can feel the depth of those words. Thank you for writing. Congratulations on winning
Allison Avatar
October 19, 2023 at 11:06 AM
Thanks so much for my placement in the contest Ink Empress my son arrives home tomorrow after 2 months away in Taiwan:-) hugs Jan xx
M  Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 9:50 PM
Oh Jan beautifully sad…..a lovely poem! Debx
Allison Avatar
October 17, 2023 at 3:27 AM
thanks Deb one of my rare moments of serious 'real' poetry lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Andresen Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 10:21 AM
- Wonderful memories ... with music of the waves, Jan :) - hugs
Allison Avatar
October 17, 2023 at 3:27 AM
thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 9:56 AM
Really wonderful writing, my friend. You did two. I guess it's ok then. hope you win big.
Allison Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 1:52 PM
I've seen as many as 6 so it will be interesting to see what the sponsor does, but place or no place I am delighted i wrote it:-) hugs Jan xx
Peranteau Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 9:39 AM
thannnk ya Jan for mine new muse! u know i wouldn't say it's so if it ain't...i'm floating in thought because uv your awesome write; so serine dear poet ;) have a pleasant day...much love, jame
Allison Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 1:51 PM
Thanks so much James i loved your tribute to Carolyn i wish more poets would read it:-) hugs Jan xx
Buhagiar Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 5:38 AM
You surpassed yourself with this delicate and gentle poem. Such imagery is worth a great deal. Hugs and blessings.
Allison Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 1:51 PM
aww Victor you comment is like gold dust tor me thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xx
Gentile Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 4:29 AM
Jan, the beauty of your words touches a melancholy chord within me! Lovely imagery and thoughts to hold! happy Monday xxoo
Allison Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 1:50 PM
Thanks so much Mike:-) hugs Jan xx
Lawless Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 7:31 PM
and there is a subtle beauty in the peace of a moment of reflection....and the presence of an unseen sand castle. Nice one Jan
Allison Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 1:50 PM
Thanks so much John that's a super comment:-) hugs Jan xx
Rose  Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 5:49 PM
There is great beauty to be seen the second time around Jan, especially when the children have flown, then you can retrace your steps in silence and get to see it all through new appreciative eyes, love your poetry and your poetic soul too :)
Allison Avatar
October 16, 2023 at 1:49 PM
Thanks so much Vie:-) hugs Jan xx
DiMino Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 2:02 PM
Indeed, graceful and beautiful! Never alone...just by one's self -- a long earned, overdue welcomed break from nurturing duties.... Enjoy your restful interlude. Blessings.
Allison Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 2:07 PM
Thanks Joe, pure fiction well son is away in Taiwan but I'm not a great fan of the beach but we walk near the sea most days:-) hugs Jan xx
Hughes Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 10:48 AM
Tranquil, peaceful, so perfect! From a Star in our bowl of Soup's
Allison Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 10:51 AM
a fallen star I think lol:-) hugs jan xx
Greenhough Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 9:31 AM
So peaceful. Thanks.
Allison Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 10:05 AM
Thanks Hilda I walk most days by the beach but on the promenade not on the sand:-) hugs Jan xx
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