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She Walks In Beauty

cool waves
crest golden sands
white spume tickles naked
toes, as I stroll in silence by 
the shore



precious
memories of
family holidays
children flown the nest, now I walk
alone

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2023

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Speaks Volumes Date: 10/17/2023 5:43:00 AM This is really lovely. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/19/2023 11:06:00 AM thank you

Ink Empress Date: 10/17/2023 5:35:00 AM Dear Jan, I really love not just the imagery in this but also the emotions flowing throughout this, i think many can resonate with this poignant write. Your opening cinquain really stood out for me as you wrote “ crest golden sands” beautiful words to describe the beach, “ children flown nest” “ now i walk alone” is soul stirring, i can feel the depth of those words. Thank you for writing. Congratulations on winning Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/19/2023 11:06:00 AM Thanks so much for my placement in the contest Ink Empress my son arrives home tomorrow after 2 months away in Taiwan:-) hugs Jan xx

Deb M Date: 10/16/2023 9:50:00 PM Oh Jan beautifully sad…..a lovely poem! Debx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/17/2023 3:27:00 AM thanks Deb one of my rare moments of serious 'real' poetry lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 10/16/2023 10:21:00 AM - Wonderful memories ... with music of the waves, Jan :) - hugs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/17/2023 3:27:00 AM thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/16/2023 9:56:00 AM Really wonderful writing, my friend. You did two. I guess it's ok then. hope you win big. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/16/2023 1:52:00 PM I've seen as many as 6 so it will be interesting to see what the sponsor does, but place or no place I am delighted i wrote it:-) hugs Jan xx

James Peranteau Date: 10/16/2023 9:39:00 AM thannnk ya Jan for mine new muse! u know i wouldn't say it's so if it ain't...i'm floating in thought because uv your awesome write; so serine dear poet ;) have a pleasant day...much love, jame Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/16/2023 1:51:00 PM Thanks so much James i loved your tribute to Carolyn i wish more poets would read it:-) hugs Jan xx

Victor Buhagiar Date: 10/16/2023 5:38:00 AM You surpassed yourself with this delicate and gentle poem. Such imagery is worth a great deal. Hugs and blessings. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/16/2023 1:51:00 PM aww Victor you comment is like gold dust tor me thank you so much:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Gentile Date: 10/16/2023 4:29:00 AM Jan, the beauty of your words touches a melancholy chord within me! Lovely imagery and thoughts to hold! happy Monday xxoo Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/16/2023 1:50:00 PM Thanks so much Mike:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless Date: 10/15/2023 7:31:00 PM and there is a subtle beauty in the peace of a moment of reflection....and the presence of an unseen sand castle. Nice one Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/16/2023 1:50:00 PM Thanks so much John that's a super comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 10/15/2023 5:49:00 PM There is great beauty to be seen the second time around Jan, especially when the children have flown, then you can retrace your steps in silence and get to see it all through new appreciative eyes, love your poetry and your poetic soul too :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/16/2023 1:49:00 PM Thanks so much Vie:-) hugs Jan xx

Joe Dimino Date: 10/15/2023 2:02:00 PM Indeed, graceful and beautiful! Never alone...just by one's self -- a long earned, overdue welcomed break from nurturing duties.... Enjoy your restful interlude. Blessings. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/15/2023 2:07:00 PM Thanks Joe, pure fiction well son is away in Taiwan but I'm not a great fan of the beach but we walk near the sea most days:-) hugs Jan xx

Mark Hughes Date: 10/15/2023 10:48:00 AM Tranquil, peaceful, so perfect! From a Star in our bowl of Soup's Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/15/2023 10:51:00 AM a fallen star I think lol:-) hugs jan xx

Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/15/2023 9:31:00 AM So peaceful. Thanks. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/15/2023 10:05:00 AM Thanks Hilda I walk most days by the beach but on the promenade not on the sand:-) hugs Jan xx