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Pick a line and like a hooked fish run with it

contest by John Lawless

She Took the Bait

I was having a beer at the bar then she walked in
It was more of a strut with the sway of her hips.
Her ruby red lips were made for kissing

In the mirror behind the bar 
I caught her looking at me and raised my glass.
She waited a while before she sat beside me. 

She ordered whiskey, neat
Smelled like lavender and honey and I'd bet money 
she'd talk to me before I'd say a word to her.
I thought - 'which of us is using the best bait.'

I got a nibble when she asked what I was drinking.
I turned my head but all I said was, 'a cold one.'
Her great big gorgeous green eyes
would've caught me if I was a fish.

"Don't talk much, do you? Or maybe you have 'issues."
She questioned my "manhood."
I stood to adjust my pants and her eyes bit my fly.

I told her, "My eyes are up here."
She smiled as I reeled her in.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2024

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Lawless Avatar
August 18, 2024 at 9:08 AM
Mark, this is an hilarious take on that line. An "adult" version of the sand box "I'll show you mine if you show me yours"
Kitchin Avatar
May 9, 2024 at 4:04 PM
Mark, wonderfully entertaining, love the ending!
Koplin Avatar
May 21, 2024 at 5:11 AM
lol Thanks Tania.
Vaso Avatar
May 8, 2024 at 9:46 AM
haha love your sense of humor Mark!!!
Koplin Avatar
May 21, 2024 at 5:11 AM
Thank you Arthur.
Lane Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 5:30 PM
Mark, your humor has been sorely missed. I've no doubt this is a guy's point of view. If she hadn't spoken first, would you have given in? If that puts you on the spot...I'm not sorry ;-)
Koplin Avatar
May 8, 2024 at 7:12 AM
I have to say no so you won't tell my wife. lol Lin Thanks
Allison Avatar
May 7, 2024 at 4:21 PM
ha ha ha you reeled me in with your story and i'm hooked on the humour here Mark! hugs jan xx
Koplin Avatar
May 8, 2024 at 7:12 AM
ha you're not a fish. Thanks Jan
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