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She Remembers

mystic clouds at night
beneath an amber sun
casts a lovely glow..

her face illuminated
as tears freely fall
she trembles..

~as she remembers~

a sky of twinkling stars
which once guided her way
now dull, broken shards..

she falls to her knees
as the tide edges closer
cold and unforgiving..

his soft words
once a safe cocoon
now strife with contempt

~she sadly remembers~

she hugs herself tightly
rocking and wondering
where it all went wrong..

her heart is hurt
his loving friendship
touched her like no other..

~she tearfully remembers~

she opened herself up
with his gentle guidance
as best as she knew how..

his kindness moved her
with truth and with faith
for happiness she felt..

~she fondly remembers~

she knows her truth
as he feels his
the gift of his friendship..

~she will always remember~

Copyright © | Year Posted 2006




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Date: 5/7/2017 6:35:00 PM
The crush of heartbreak is so apparent in this emotive piece Lynn. I love the repetitive lines slightly changing, impractical. Wonderfully composed! 7 ; )
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Connie Marcum Wong
Date: 5/7/2017 6:37:00 PM
Impactful.... . Not impractical....Kindle always changes my words and it is so annoying. Sorry.
Date: 4/22/2017 8:15:00 PM
You always bare your soul in your writing or make us at least feel like the person in the poem. That is the power of your poetry, dear.
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Date: 4/20/2017 10:55:00 AM
Oh Lynn. Good Morning. I have no words for this. This is more than marvelous. Such expression. The emotive factor is present. Everything is poetically right within this entry. Honestly. I so enjoyed reading it. It was an honor. Have a wonderful day. Well done in its entirety. PS you so appropriately utilized the repetition. Well executed
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Date: 3/20/2017 11:29:00 AM
Hi Lynn, this is a truly wonderful write.The emotions are real and therefore this reader feels the pain in the words. Your poetry is a journey through emotions. Memories, the home of sorrow and joy. I do love the way you write Lynn. This is a seven and has to go into my faves. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 3/14/2017 9:05:00 AM
I think this is one of your best. A well deserved 7. Bravo!
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Date: 3/12/2017 8:17:00 AM
Such a lovely and heartfelt poem, Lynn. Memories such as these are there for keeps; they are too strong and emotional to fade away. I like how you broke up the poem into progressive sections. #7+ Warm regards // paul
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Date: 9/7/2016 11:38:00 AM
Very well written Lynn, a touching write. I like the use of title lines that sets off each section. The emotions are tactile, I can feel them, makes me wonder what happened between them.
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Date: 8/30/2016 6:51:00 PM
Oh wow Lynn I am so glad I stumbled on this gem of yours. It is truly a breath of fresh air on a stale night. You should repost this so everyone can admire it...going straight to my favorites...have a great evening
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