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She Opened a Gate

Sponsor : Constance Le France submitted : 6/7/25 Placed : Third ——————————- lovingly she opened a tungsten gate to his Heart quantum lasers sharp, her ordained healing art penetrated a GOSSAMER of silver spider-webs drew slightly aback to allow patu marplesi to ebb GHOSTLY armoured soldiers wandered within from Constantinople fields to Berlin yields spin filling spirant space with unearthly eerie sound mighty rainbow light had much to gently unbound GRAVE were crested captains and kempt kings strategically planned to destroy men with rings ages of teary traumas they marched to destroy humanity’s bounties, dear heavenly bows of joy GODFORSAKEN armies toyed with swords guns, grenades, rifles until nuclear bomb boards angelic realms sang in fear, egos refused to hear dismal throughout these ages of little heart cheer GRIEF-STRICKEN mothers could not calm wilful warlords of wasteful weathering charm programmed to flex muscle in massacre ways mind had to practice Arts of Dark in many bays GROANING has to end so instructed Divine Light time to unloop cycles wretched, rampant might clear Heart Spaces with conscious awareness melt gates of tungsten or gold, nothing careless ~~~~~~~~~~~<<<<<~~<<<~~~~~~~~~~

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Rowena Velasco

Date: 7/24/2025 4:50:00 PM

Ghairo, this poem really hits hard—so much truth about the pain and chaos of war. I love how you mix history with hope for healing. Powerful stuff, thanks for sharing!

Ghairo Daniels
Date: 7/24/2025 11:42:00 PM

ThkU for your Time, Attentive reading & warmth. Warmth to your kind Soul, Rowena. X.

Gabrielle Munslow

Date: 7/19/2025 12:17:00 AM

This is a powerful and deeply moving poem. The imagery of the "tungsten gate" and "quantum lasers" immediately sets a tone of intense, almost surgical, precision in healing. I particularly appreciate how you've woven historical conflicts ("Constantinople fields to Berlin yields") into the broader narrative of inherited trauma, making the "ghostly armoured soldiers" truly impactful. The progression from conflict and "grief-stricken mothers" to the "Divine Light" and the need to "unloop cycles wretched" is beautifully articulated. It offers a clear journey from profound suffering to the hope of conscious healing. The repeated 'G' sound at the beginning of each stanza really anchors the poem, giving it a strong, resonant rhythm. It's a very thought-provoking piece that speaks to the deep work of releasing past burdens. Well done!

Ghairo Daniels
Date: 7/19/2025 7:03:00 AM

I truly appreciate your detailed reading & feedback. ThkU for your time & attention. High frequency light your way, Sweets. X.

Maclawrence Famuyiwa

Date: 7/18/2025 6:21:00 AM

This is a well crafted poem creatively making use of the word prompts. Congratulations.

Ghairo Daniels
Date: 7/18/2025 7:21:00 AM

ThkU for pop-in & comment, Sir. Blessings from SA to Nigeria. X.

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 7/12/2025 9:11:00 AM

Congratulations Ghairo! I enjoyed your take on use of the required words. Good job! :)

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/11/2025 5:03:00 AM

- Congratulations on your great win in the contest, Ghairo :) - hugs

Ghairo Daniels
Date: 7/11/2025 9:02:00 AM

THANKYOU for pop-in & read, Anne-Lise. Blessings from South Africa to Norway. X.