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She Opened a Gate

  Sponsor : Constance Le France 
submitted : 6/7/25
Placed : Third
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lovingly she opened a tungsten gate to his Heart quantum lasers sharp, her ordained healing art
penetrated a GOSSAMER of silver spider-webs
drew slightly aback to allow patu marplesi to ebb

GHOSTLY armoured soldiers wandered within
from Constantinople fields to Berlin yields spin
filling spirant space with unearthly eerie sound
mighty rainbow light had much to gently unbound 

GRAVE were crested captains and kempt kings
strategically planned to destroy men with rings
ages of teary traumas they marched to destroy 
humanity’s bounties, dear heavenly bows of joy

GODFORSAKEN armies toyed with swords
guns, grenades, rifles until nuclear bomb boards
angelic realms sang in fear, egos refused to hear 
dismal throughout these ages of little heart cheer

GRIEF-STRICKEN mothers could not calm
wilful warlords of wasteful weathering charm
programmed to flex muscle in massacre ways
mind had to practice  Arts of Dark in many bays

GROANING has to end so instructed Divine Light
time to unloop cycles wretched, rampant might
clear Heart Spaces with conscious awareness 
melt gates of tungsten or gold, nothing careless  


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Copyright © | Year Posted 2025




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Date: 7/24/2025 4:50:00 PM
Ghairo, this poem really hits hard—so much truth about the pain and chaos of war. I love how you mix history with hope for healing. Powerful stuff, thanks for sharing!
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Ghairo Daniels
Date: 7/24/2025 11:42:00 PM
ThkU for your Time, Attentive reading & warmth. Warmth to your kind Soul, Rowena. X.
Date: 7/19/2025 12:17:00 AM
This is a powerful and deeply moving poem. The imagery of the "tungsten gate" and "quantum lasers" immediately sets a tone of intense, almost surgical, precision in healing. I particularly appreciate how you've woven historical conflicts ("Constantinople fields to Berlin yields") into the broader narrative of inherited trauma, making the "ghostly armoured soldiers" truly impactful. The progression from conflict and "grief-stricken mothers" to the "Divine Light" and the need to "unloop cycles wretched" is beautifully articulated. It offers a clear journey from profound suffering to the hope of conscious healing. The repeated 'G' sound at the beginning of each stanza really anchors the poem, giving it a strong, resonant rhythm. It's a very thought-provoking piece that speaks to the deep work of releasing past burdens. Well done!
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Ghairo Daniels
Date: 7/19/2025 7:03:00 AM
I truly appreciate your detailed reading & feedback. ThkU for your time & attention. High frequency light your way, Sweets. X.
Date: 7/18/2025 6:21:00 AM
This is a well crafted poem creatively making use of the word prompts. Congratulations.
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Ghairo Daniels
Date: 7/18/2025 7:21:00 AM
ThkU for pop-in & comment, Sir. Blessings from SA to Nigeria. X.
Date: 7/12/2025 9:11:00 AM
Congratulations Ghairo! I enjoyed your take on use of the required words. Good job! :)
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Date: 7/11/2025 5:03:00 AM
- Congratulations on your great win in the contest, Ghairo :) - hugs
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Ghairo Daniels
Date: 7/11/2025 9:02:00 AM
THANKYOU for pop-in & read, Anne-Lise. Blessings from South Africa to Norway. X.

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