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She Holds Her Breath

Intruding fingers Linger at the hollow of her back. Heart fluttering in anticipation She holds her breath. ------------------------------------ The Great ITTY BITTY Poetry Contest Sponsor: Andrea Dietrich Placing: 1st

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/20/2020 1:18:00 PM

I see I've visited this one before, but oh my...

Paul Callus
Date: 3/20/2020 4:05:00 PM

Third time round, Eileen!! I'm honoured! Have a lovely, peaceful weekend. Hugs // paul

Debbie Duncan

Date: 8/23/2018 8:42:00 PM

Yes, I see your verse and my Dawn OF Time are intertwined :) very nice write!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/24/2018 1:08:00 PM

Many thanks Debbie for taking the time to look up my poem...and for liking:) Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/17/2017 7:06:00 PM

Wow! Paul, such a breathtaking write. Very evocative and emotive.., but really, let's dispense of the poetic formality lol, this is one helluva sexy, sensuous, steamy and sumptuous write! A feast of imagery for the senses and enticingly written. Excellent and such a joy to read! Congratulations on a well deserved 1st place win!!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/18/2017 9:57:00 AM

I'm reading these comments with a big smile on my face, Susan:) Did I say before that you make a great critic!! I'm so glad that what I had in mind came across vividly to you. Thank you for enjoying my humble offering. Warm regards // paul

Lynn Marie

Date: 3/12/2017 10:40:00 PM

Breathtaking. Tantalizing imagery, brilliantly penned.:-) Excellent writing, a pleasure to read. blessings, lynn

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2017 9:53:00 AM

Thank you very much, Lynn...now I'm growing wings:) So pleased that you found these few lines a pleasure to read. Regards // paul

Daver Austin

Date: 12/14/2016 11:30:00 AM

Short, sweet and sexy. Like it. Congrats on the selection. LOve, daver

Paul Callus
Date: 3/13/2017 9:49:00 AM

Excuse the very late reply, Dave! Can't imagine how this skipped my attention! Thank you for stopping by and pressing the 'like' button:) Regards // paul

Agnes Krampe

Date: 12/11/2016 8:34:00 AM

Impressed how much you can say with so few words. Simpy beautiful, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 12/11/2016 2:46:00 PM

Many thanks, Agnes; your lovely comments are truly appreciated. Regards // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 11/12/2016 2:14:00 PM

Well written and expertly penned, Paul. The vivid imagery is most outstanding. Love your work as always. Joy and peace and love to you.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/12/2016 3:52:00 PM

Thank you for the encouragement and support, Freddie; much appreciated. ~ Regards // paul

Cynthia Jones

Date: 3/23/2015 4:39:00 PM

Paul, ohhh. Wonderfully penned my friend. Congrats on the placement. Well done. :O) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us. We all truly appreciate it. A 7 from m e. *S* Cynthia

Paul Callus
Date: 3/24/2015 3:57:00 PM

Hi Cynthia! Your visit is full of positive comments and encouragement. Much appreciated:) Thank you! // paul

James Fraser

Date: 3/23/2015 3:01:00 PM

Such human art and touch to make her hold her breath. Delightful images Paul, and a winner I see deservedly // James..

Paul Callus
Date: 3/24/2015 3:54:00 PM

Thank you James for the lovely comments...much appreciated. // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/25/2014 3:56:00 PM

OH? Sensual, are we? WOW!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/25/2014 4:08:00 PM

Sensual?:) It's a whiff of Eileen's magic dust that escaped and fell on my pen! Thank you Eileen....I love your comments! // paul

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/26/2014 9:10:00 AM

It only takes a few of just the right words to move one, as just the right touch.. Bravo! My friend.. Hugs.. Arlene

Paul Callus
Date: 7/26/2014 9:19:00 AM

Thank you Arlene! Your visit and encouraging words are much appreciated. Glad you enjoyed. // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/5/2014 3:17:00 PM

Excellent, love this one Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/5/2014 3:24:00 PM

Glad you do, Arthur! Thanks for stopping by. cu // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/2/2014 11:47:00 PM

Revisiting this glorious beauty because I think I may be all caught up with all your poems!! (well, not the quatern. I can't see that one yet!!)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/3/2014 8:13:00 AM

Hi Andrea, having you revisiting is encouraging in itself; I very much appreciate the fact that you take the time and interest to stop by; you're an angel :) // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/13/2014 10:43:00 PM

A little gem with a Big win, and so deserved Paul. Congratulations!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/14/2014 4:48:00 AM

Hi Connie! I'm ashamed to say that this is the first time I've made contact with you! Thank you for stopping by and leaving such lovely comments.// I popped in to see your posts and commented on a couple of them; but will be back for more :) cu // paul

Donna Jones

Date: 4/6/2014 7:29:00 AM

Yes Paul.....this makes one hold her breath! Congratulations on your fine win....

Paul Callus
Date: 4/6/2014 8:44:00 AM

Glad to see you here Donna, and thank you for all the nice comments. // paul

Roger Horsch

Date: 4/6/2014 7:13:00 AM

Congrats on your well deserved win Paul.........Roger

Paul Callus
Date: 4/6/2014 8:42:00 AM

Thank you Roger for stopping by; appreciate the visit and comments. // paul

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/6/2014 6:08:00 AM

Congratulations on a fine win. I enjoyed the poem, Paul

Paul Callus
Date: 4/6/2014 8:33:00 AM

Thank you Dr; glad you enjoyed it. // paul

Abdulhafeez Oyewole

Date: 4/6/2014 5:20:00 AM

A great write to have made it to the top of Andrea's contest! Very brilliantly written!! Big congrats to you on your fine win!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/6/2014 8:26:00 AM

Hi my Nigerian friend, we meet again! Thank you for congrats and lovely remarks. be seeing you. // paul

Kim Merryman

Date: 4/5/2014 8:21:00 PM

Great short poem, Paul. Congrats on your wonderful 1st place win! Love, Kim

Paul Callus
Date: 4/6/2014 8:23:00 AM

Many thanks Kim; your comments too are much appreciated. :) // paul

John Lawless

Date: 4/4/2014 9:43:00 PM

nice job an affair in for lines.

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2014 6:25:00 AM

Thank you John for stopping by; hope to see you around more often :) // paul

Skat A

Date: 4/4/2014 9:08:00 PM

Sweet win Paul, :) SKAT

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2014 6:09:00 AM

Thanks a lot Skat; sweet of you to visit. :) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 4/4/2014 6:39:00 PM

hahahaha seeee Paul.. :D I know it when I first saw this contest I know You will bring home the bacon.. :D!!!! YOU MY BET!!!! :D!!! much much much CONGRATULATIONS dear.. :) ======== olive_eloi with CLAPS!!!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2014 6:23:00 AM

Good day Olive_eloi :) Thank you for having so much faith in me :) I appreciate all your congrats...and the claps; pity you're so far away...we could have shared the bacon!!!:):) ...:) // paul

David Mohn

Date: 4/4/2014 6:04:00 PM

Rightly placed....great!

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2014 6:10:00 AM

Thank you David for appreciating it and leaving your comment here. // paul

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/4/2014 5:27:00 PM

Hi Paul, wow! I'm sensing a moment of truth. Very intense. Congratulations..... Thank you for the fluttery memory.... xox~ Lind

Paul Callus
Date: 4/5/2014 6:04:00 AM

Linda, thank you; your comments are much appreciated; hope the fluttering memory will linger on :) // paul

Theresa Stephens

Date: 4/4/2014 3:57:00 PM

Hi Paul, Congrats on your 1st place. Intimate and intriguing write. Well done. Regards Theresa xx

Paul Callus
Date: 4/4/2014 4:08:00 PM

Thank you Theresa; like your lovely comments; txs also for congrats.:) /x/ paul