She Done Me Wrong

Every time I turn the radio on I hear a feller's plaintive song,
About his achin' heart and how his woman done him wrong!
How they once held each other close beneath the harvest moon;
Now, he sits alone caressin' a beer at Cudahey's Diner and Saloon!

He found his woman hangin' out in honky-tonks at the edge of town,
Consortin' with the local rabble tossin' whiskey sours down!
Never mind that she caught him with Hildebrun at Clyde's Greasy Spoon!
Now, he sits alone caressin' a beer at Cudahey's Diner and Saloon!

His woman tells him to stop his gamblin' at the Pot O' Gold Casino,
And if he doesn't stop and toe the line, she's headin' for a split in Reno!
He wonders where his charm has gone that once made her swoon.
Now, he sits alone caressin' a beer at Cudahey's Diner and Saloon!

He feels a pang of guilt for not providin' the kids with decent shoes,
And blowin' the grocery money on the horses, cigarettes and booze!
But can't a feller have a little fun without her ragin' like a typhoon?
Now, he sits alone caressin' a beer at Cudahey's Diner and Saloon!

He stops at Cudahey's after work and drinks until they douse the light.
He cries on Bubba the barkeep's shoulder unloadin' on him every night.
He feels as if his woman thrust through his heart a very sharp harpoon!
Now, he sits alone caressin' a beer at Cudahey's Diner and Saloon!

Robert L. Hinshaw, CMSgt, USAF, Retired
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Placed No. 3 in Paula Swanson's "Play Me A Cheatin' Song" Contest - May 2011
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011


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Date: 5/25/2011 3:55:00 AM
Let's put it to Music, Rob! Like the names of the eatin' and drinkin' establishments. congratulations on your win here.
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Date: 5/25/2011 1:38:00 AM
Congrats on your big win!
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Date: 5/23/2011 5:39:00 PM
Good job Bob don't know how you did it can't see YOU doing any of this LOL YOU are an honorable man! Congrad's on your win! Light & Love
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Date: 5/23/2011 2:21:00 PM
No achin' heart for Robert Hinshaw tonite!!! ha ha. So proud of your accomplished write!! Gwendolen-u bring the rhyme out of me!!
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Date: 5/23/2011 2:00:00 PM
congratulations on the third place win in the contest, Bob
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Date: 5/23/2011 1:18:00 PM
Congratulations on your bg win Bob. Hopwe to see it set to music. Love, Joyce
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Date: 5/23/2011 1:08:00 PM
Congrats Bob on a super spectacular win in Paula's contest with this amazing creative write my friend.. enjoy your well deserved top spot with luv..
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Date: 5/23/2011 11:45:00 AM
You are always a wonderful story teller!! Another fine example, Robert!! Congratulations!
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Date: 5/23/2011 11:15:00 AM
Congrats on the win. Is Cudahey's a real place? It sounds like a good old fashioned place to be.
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Date: 5/23/2011 10:45:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Sarge. Great piece. Nice going. You guys have a great week. Everything is fine here. Best regards. Una/Ralphie
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Date: 5/23/2011 10:36:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Paula's contest Bob. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/23/2011 10:03:00 AM
ouchie yet a beauty, robert.... my speaicl KUDOS to you for raking high! :) huggs
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Date: 5/23/2011 9:34:00 AM
Knew this would place high, Bob. Congratulations! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/20/2011 9:17:00 AM
Pour me a cold glass of lemonade while I reread this intoxicating piece...ha ha..Will You Write Another Song Poem for Me called HE DONE ME WRONG TOO!!?? ha ha. This will sit very well with Paula's cheatin song spectacular. She have to pour a stiff one to read em all. ha ha. Appropriately long... Obama can ride a bike and THEN I may take him more seriously-Cap and Trade that! ha ha Gwendolen
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Date: 5/17/2011 5:35:00 PM
Outstanding entry, my friend. Excellent piece. Think you got a winner. Good luck. Thanks for your comments on my recent postings. Best to both of you. Ralphie.
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Date: 5/17/2011 7:22:00 AM
Well dear poet, since I've never heard your voice, I imagin ol' Willie pipe'n out this tune ! What a great entry Robert ! I really like this one, be'n the country song lover that I is ;) Have a wonderful week my friend ! Let me go check in on another one of your writes, it's always a pleasure !...much love, james
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Date: 5/16/2011 1:32:00 PM
Enjoyed the very very creative piece and good luck in the contest, Bob
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Date: 5/16/2011 1:07:00 PM
Isn't it funny how so many country songs have the same theme? You did a great job on your entry for Paula's contest. Poor Bubba will probably quit his job at Cudahey if this "feller" keeps "unloadin'" on him. I'll be waiting to hear this one on the local country station. Best wishes in the contest, dear friend. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/16/2011 10:23:00 AM
loved this one, cracked up me up. thank you for commenting on Pine Cone Kissing Needles.
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Date: 5/16/2011 5:58:00 AM
thankxx Bob for all your sweet comments and help luv.. appreciate ... just posted a poem on my family and the meaningfulness of them in my life luv.. hope u enjoy..
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Date: 5/16/2011 12:29:00 AM
VERY good song material there. I have one too, but no time to even type it up and post it yet. This song is RIGHT up your ALLEY. You would make a great songwriter!
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Date: 5/15/2011 11:34:00 PM
Mr. HInshaw, Sir. Are these the names of the places you hang out writing poetry? ha ha ha. The more u drink the better the poetry? lol. No, seriously...I get a sense u r not this type however, got some great honkytonk lines in this saloon write. Your poem should have been the example of how to write for this contest. It is a peachy blast! Versatile, versatile, versatile, dear poet! Enjoyed much. Gwendolen
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Date: 5/15/2011 6:31:00 PM
Meet you at Dudaheys at sundown...! what a hoot...you are just to clever. BG
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Date: 5/15/2011 6:28:00 PM
a wonderful write Bob full of cheaters laments and woes ...good luck in the contest luv.. I added my refrain finally at the end of each line rather than redoing the entire piece... I like it ..see if u do please..thankxx luv..appreciate that eagle eye ...
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