She

SHE


                                 gray clouds
                                       and black crows
                    the way she looked clear through me


                                    penny
                    how she walked on tip toes
                                              mixed feelings


                             her long black hair
                           that wonderful aroma
                               all about the room


                           everything stopped
                                               that instant
                                      she smiled


                             bridge to nowhere
                                      we walked on
                                             nothing under our feet


                                    five foot six?
                                            maybe              but
                            standing on her toes      we bond 


                                      Dave Austin

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Judy Ball

Date: 5/26/2016 3:25:00 PM

Lovely. Lots of emotion here. I can see her standing next to him. No one exists for the moment but the two of them. Great job. \Really good imagery. God Bless, JB Sorry Daver When did you post your Wild Bill poem.

Daver Austin
Date: 5/27/2016 11:13:00 AM

I never did - here it is...Deadwood S.D. built between two mountain sides seated at cards in that valley of death wild bill

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/21/2016 2:44:00 PM

incredible; the very though of this makes me quiver, dave.. huggs

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/19/2016 12:41:00 AM

More poems more poems!!!

Daver Austin
Date: 5/21/2016 1:43:00 PM

I tried to post Constellations, but for some reason soup wouldn't accept. I put it on PFT though. Love, daver

Elaine George

Date: 5/18/2016 8:59:00 AM

Beautiful expression here in this sensational Haiku my dear Dave. Your forever friend, Elaine

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/15/2016 8:39:00 PM

I am enjoying the beautiful response you got from Connie here. That was so cool how you moved her with this poetry

Daver Austin
Date: 5/17/2016 11:00:00 AM

Hi. I'm taking a rest from commenting - doing some writing, kind of experimental. Love, daver

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/15/2016 1:00:00 PM

Daver, from the first line I can tell when a poem is going to move me, and this poem caused tears to well up in my eyes, (which makes me happy I haven't put on any make-up yet) because I so enjoy reading a poem that can touch me the way this one has. I love where it took me, to the floating on air feelings of when I fell in love with my husband. I am faving this beauty! Thank you for making my day! #7 ; )

Daver Austin
Date: 5/17/2016 11:01:00 AM

So glad these communicated. Pleasing you pleases me immensely. Love, daver

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/13/2016 8:56:00 PM

these are precious, Daver. I especially liked the one about "nothing under our feet"

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/9/2016 4:07:00 PM

these are amazing!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/5/2016 9:05:00 PM

I found this poem to be so romantic Daver. This flows marvelously

Daver Austin
Date: 5/6/2016 11:03:00 AM

One of those times when I wrote about the first subject came into my head. I thought of Penny, my first love, and the funny way she walked. Love, daver

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 5/5/2016 2:55:00 PM

Daver, were you 'standing on her toes'? Okay, I haven't lost my dummy joking side.:) And Happy Easter! I do love this write; the metaphor, the imagery, and just being able to read your work! Stay well! Love, Mikki

Daver Austin
Date: 5/6/2016 10:58:00 AM

No. I was walking beside her, watching her bob up and down. My first love - never have seen anyone walk like her before or after. Love, daver