Shattered

My head quite often clattered
       The thought of her never ceases
       Now looking so old and tattered
        Seems my hearts left in creases

       Once again brused and battered
        By the female of the species
        Though hardly am l flattered
        Every breath she squeezes

         But guess never really mattered
         As her doing whatever she pleases
         Though now l feel like l'm shattered
          And into a thousand and one peaces


        Old peace taken from poem called broken trying to be abstract here written 2002

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Judy Ball

Date: 6/10/2021 3:12:00 PM

Well done David. The female of the species often gets the same treatment. A lot of guys like to woo them and lose them too. Good job with great rhythm and rhyme. God Bless, JB

David Scott
Date: 6/10/2021 5:17:00 PM

I agree this was two lines taken from poem broken tryed ti exstend on thise lines and pattern just an exstension of other writes gone ,you,worlds apart all about love and lossxx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 6/8/2021 9:51:00 AM

Very effective rhymes, and that last line so poignant-

David Scott
Date: 6/9/2021 9:43:00 PM

Thank for your kind words was unsure of word species if rhymes?