Shattered

My head quite often clattered The thought of her never ceases Now looking so old and tattered Seems my hearts left in creases Once again brused and battered By the female of the species Though hardly am l flattered Every breath she squeezes But guess never really mattered As her doing whatever she pleases Though now l feel like l'm shattered And into a thousand and one peaces Old peace taken from poem called broken trying to be abstract here written 2002

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Judy Ball

Date: 6/10/2021 3:12:00 PM

Well done David. The female of the species often gets the same treatment. A lot of guys like to woo them and lose them too. Good job with great rhythm and rhyme. God Bless, JB

David Scott
Date: 6/10/2021 5:17:00 PM

I agree this was two lines taken from poem broken tryed ti exstend on thise lines and pattern just an exstension of other writes gone ,you,worlds apart all about love and lossxx

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 6/8/2021 9:51:00 AM

Very effective rhymes, and that last line so poignant-

David Scott
Date: 6/9/2021 9:43:00 PM

Thank for your kind words was unsure of word species if rhymes?