Shadows In Hiding - Collaboration With Jake Ponce

Written by: David William Breidenthal and Jake Ponce 

D: Blessed breeze sweeps over us 
J: Whenever I leave the door ajar at night, 
J: I felt myself grow pale from the humid howls 
D: Gravity pulls us down to the ground 
J: Shadows in hiding have been found 
J: Shadows in hiding have been found

J: There were irises staring into mine 
D: The twinkle in your eyes were like stars that shine 
D: When I forgot to lock the gate behind me, 
D: I felt this sensation of indignation 
D: I felt guilt overflow in me contritely...woefully... 
J: My fists trembled and I could see the roses 
J: Split from their vines, out my flesh and into your cells 
J & D: Shadows in hiding have been exposed

J: Now I stand in front of the mirror, perplexed 
J: At the man that I thought has ceased 
D: The man that lingers in my dreams 
J: The man I know I no longer could be 

D: The Earth is slowly breaking at the seams 
J: Dividing me into sheets of empty sins 
D: But he soon vanished from sight 
J: Shadows in hiding have been found 
D: And blended with the pale, cruel moonlight 

J: Clouds then rise to whisper 
J: That all this and I are done… 
J & D: Shadows in hiding are skipping to and fro
J & D: Shadows in hiding are sinking exceedingly low
D: The doubts possess me…hope lost its shine and good luck lost its fortune 

D: The moon begins to reflect my sorrow-whelmed face 
D: Like a two-sided mirror, revealing to me my flaws and wrinkles 
J: As I implore the forces to grant me borrowed life 
J: And with a grin, I'll paint tomorrow's sky 
J & D: Shadows in hiding coil and let out a cry
J & D: Shadows in hiding reach from on high 

D: The sun is wearing a mask of disdain and I'm not done with this race 
J: There is an ache holding me captive…
J: There is a force keeping me in place 
D: I’m trying so desperately to keep pace
D: I'm trying to keep a steady pace with my heartbeats, sending me tingles 
D: Down my spine...down my spine… 
J & D: Shadows in hiding are serpentine, moving through me
J & D: Shadows in hiding was crawling down my spine, never leaving me be
D: Set me free, set me free 

D: Feeling these Goosebumps – I’ve lost track of time 
D: The church bells peacefully chime
J: And I can hear the advances of the clocks 
J: On pale green horses, saying they'll meet me at the docks 
D: Feeling like I'm honestly living in the dumps 
J: With my chest hacked open like a cellar 
J: And I'm left alone with my last glass of the finest wine 
J & D: These shadows in hiding – I refuse to claim it as mine
J: Yet, the shadows in hiding have been found

D: Open up the cage and let me take flight, I won't heat up in rage 
D: I'm just adjusting to this difficult stage 
D: Are you on the same page? 
D & J: Soon, we’ll unveil the shadows in hiding 
D: It will graze in the maze of mystifying wonders…It might take days
J: Perhaps I should get going 
J: To see the northern lights down the forest haze

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 5/25/2014 10:52:00 AM
I love this write from two young and talented poets! Awesome write my friends.. Bravo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Date: 5/17/2014 7:29:00 AM
Much thanks again from both of us to everyone who took the time to read our first collab. We hope you enjoyed it as much as we enjoyed putting it together and we certainly appreciate the really kind comments. :D
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Date: 5/11/2014 9:08:00 PM
This is a very well done piece. I like the way you repeat the shadows in hiding... The words are woven well and your imagination takes the realm. Well done David and Jake... Verlena
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J.W. Earnings
Date: 5/12/2014 11:53:00 AM
Yay! Thank you tremendously, Verlena! Have a good week! The repetition injected in this piece was meant to be exaggeratedish. Glad you liked that part. :) It adds spice to the verse, doesn't it? I like how you described both of our writings combined. It wows me and makes me feel content and positive. Thanks again!
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Jake Ponce
Date: 5/11/2014 10:37:00 PM
Thanks, Verlena!
Date: 5/10/2014 2:16:00 PM
I love this write superb all the way!!!! Great imagery great words wow!!!, olive eloisa
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J.W. Earnings
Date: 5/12/2014 11:58:00 AM
Thank you, Olive. Very much appreciated by both of us. *nudge nudge* if it wasn't for Jake's skills, this would;ve came out horrid. hahah your skills are better, man! ahhaa Anyways, you have superb poems too, gurl! The imagery on here weighs tons and I'm so glad you handled it well, carrying all that weight! :) Have a delightful week! Ta-ta!
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Jake Ponce
Date: 5/11/2014 7:02:00 PM
Thanks, Olive. It would have been impossible if not for David's skills. He did most of the editing which means my usual mess is not on here. LMFAO
Date: 5/8/2014 6:35:00 PM
LOL David I'm amazed at how you totally bypassed the character count for poem submissions. I had one heck of a great time writing this one with you. I'm very happy how it all came together really fast. :)
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Date: 5/8/2014 9:01:00 PM
Super sweet too - the poem and all
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J.W. Earnings
Date: 5/8/2014 8:41:00 PM
Yeah, so am I, my friend. Ahh, same here...I know right! It was super fast! Woooow!
Date: 5/8/2014 1:00:00 PM
WOW what a pairing of minds with you two awesome guys - I LOVE IT!!!! hugs to you both Jan xxxxx
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Jake Ponce
Date: 5/8/2014 6:36:00 PM
Hi, Jan! Glad you loved our crazy collab. Thank you! We enjoy your work too!
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Jan Allison
Date: 5/8/2014 2:49:00 PM
Thanks David i always try and keep an eye out on both of your works. Hugs my lovely friend Jan xx
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J.W. Earnings
Date: 5/8/2014 2:14:00 PM
We both send our thanks to you, beloved poetess! You're awesome too! Love your writings! Have a blessed rest of the year. xoxo DWB
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