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Shadows

Shadowed veils of night are falling, as I hear the darkness calling,
all around me time is stalling, but my mind I cannot cure.
As I stoke the embers dying, tears inside me gently crying,
gentle tears from eyes are sighing, yet this sadness I endure.

Shadows sway in twilight's leaving, as my thoughts leave me grieving,
bleakness stains the world around me, painting wall and sill and floor.
Ebon silence now is creeping, through the cracks I see it seeping,
in my mind the cracks are weeping, whence it comes I can't be sure.

Shadow in my head still growing, rampant visions ever flowing
lying nightmares never slowing, while I pace from door to door.
Creatures lay there always waiting, in the dark forever hating,
ever dark and irritating, never knowing what's in store.

Shadows dance in candles' flicking, cursed demon always tricking
endless night yet clock's still ticking, please release me from your gore.
Cryptic shade in substance fleeting, from within you're always eating,
eating soul and heart yet beating, as the veil is slowly lowered... lost am I
                                                                                            ...evermore.


12/28/15

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Line Gauthier January 28, 2021 at 5:20 PM Back for another read of this awesome poem ~ so glad it was published in the 2020 PS Anthology ~ James Inman January 31, 2021 at 2:26 PM Thank you Line for both of your lovely comments.

Andrea Dietrich June 21, 2020 at 2:37 PM Going through your ten poems list and seeing this is one I already saw, so that makes four now I am sure of! It's not ridiculous to try to see the ten poems that define you. I bet I have seen most of them anyway. by the way this is dark poetry done VERY well! James Inman June 21, 2020 at 2:58 PM Thank you Andrea, wish I could wish you a happy Father's day, have a happy day anyway.

Line Gauthier April 21, 2020 at 9:41 AM Bravo ~ artfully penned . James Inman April 21, 2020 at 11:44 AM Thank you Line. This one was originally posted and the last stanza revised for better flow.

Robert Lindley January 17, 2016 at 11:06 AM Great to have found this awesome poem today. Today I am blessed at finding such jewels. You did one helluva job in composing this gem!!! A top 7 from me and a fav.... James Inman January 17, 2016 at 2:12 PM Thank you Robert. You made my day.

Poet Destroyer A January 16, 2016 at 7:08 PM thank you for the reply on my comment

Poet Destroyer A January 15, 2016 at 10:11 PM JAMES, congratulations on your win!!! XOX ~LINDA~ James Inman January 16, 2016 at 7:45 AM Thanks for the visit, PD.

Teddy Kimathi January 9, 2016 at 3:26 AM Congrats James, for your placement in the contest! ;-) Thank you for commenting on my poem "Inner Monster". James Inman January 16, 2016 at 7:44 AM Thank you Teddy.

Skat A January 8, 2016 at 7:32 PM James, Congratulations on your Deep and Dark win. **SKAT** James Inman January 16, 2016 at 7:43 AM Thanks SKAT

Lin Lane January 8, 2016 at 3:55 AM I LOVED this one, James. Yes, you captured deep and dark very Poeishly. I thought it one of the best for this contest. Internal rhyme is difficult, but not for you. Lin Lane January 8, 2016 at 10:57 AM I can't honestly say I remembered the way it was before, but I find absolutely no fault with your new ending. If "Masked shade, substance fleeting, from within you're always eating," is a change, I think it's a great change. If I missed sending you a gift with this one earlier, I am now. Thanks for asking my opinion. ;) James Inman January 8, 2016 at 10:52 AM Thanks Lin, revised the last stanza for better flow. If by chance you read it again, please let me know what you think.

Eve Roper January 7, 2016 at 9:46 PM James, congratulations on your win! James Inman January 8, 2016 at 10:52 AM Thank you Eve.

Andrea Dietrich January 3, 2016 at 5:12 PM wow, my friend. You really went to town with THIS one. What a gem. Has she not judged this contest yet? I sure want to see it on the winners' list. The first half is VERY well metered too. let me soupmail you something about the ending part. James Inman January 3, 2016 at 8:53 PM Thanks Andrea, got your mail and appreciate it. Don't think she's finished yet.

CayCay Godwin January 1, 2016 at 5:16 PM James, every now and then, a poem EXTRA moves and resounds and gives, and this is an every now and then moment. A fav and 7. The rhyme and flow and contents were such that I decided you should win after finishing the 1st stanza alone. An amazing write, should be POTD, POTW, and POTYear! CayCay James Inman January 8, 2016 at 9:07 AM CayCay, I wrote a response to your comment on my poem some time ago, but after reflecting on what I was saying and knowing that I would be revising the poem I did not send it. First let me say this must be one of the nicest things anyone has said about one of my poems, Thank You! I feel somewhat guilty about the revision but it is something I felt was necessary. I hope that it has not detracted from the poem for you and would love to hear your thoughts on the revision. Thank you again CayCay.

Anne-Lise Andresen December 30, 2015 at 2:21 PM - A wonderful write, James - Luck in contest - Happy New Year! - hugs // Anne-Lise :) James Inman December 30, 2015 at 2:25 PM Thank you Anne Lise, and I hope you have the best of new years.

Poet Destroyer A December 30, 2015 at 1:15 PM the ending just had me sinking with thoughts, this is an awesome entry, good luck... Happy New Years... Always ~LINDA~ James Inman December 30, 2015 at 2:15 PM Happy New Year to you as well, PD. I appreciate the great comment.

Suzanne Delaney December 28, 2015 at 7:06 PM Hi James: This flows so well and the internal rhymes are amazing for keeping the flow of thought going like a relentless river. Good Luck in the contest. SuZ James Inman December 28, 2015 at 7:40 PM Thanks for the great comment Suzanne.

DM Babbit December 28, 2015 at 10:46 AM There is a hidden darkness in each of us but never relayed so well. Beautifully sad. DMB James Inman December 28, 2015 at 12:59 PM DM, a wonderful comment, thank you for the nice visit.

Lin Lane December 28, 2015 at 10:21 AM WONDERFUL ~ in your rhymes and consistency of your meaning. But I wanted to jump in and save you at the end ~ LOL. I really really like what you've done with this, James. James Inman December 28, 2015 at 12:51 PM Thank you so much Lin. I appreciate your concern, but it wouldn't have the same effect with an upbeat ending. By the way, you did save me, I'm sitting here smiling, thank you.