Shadowed Soul

A quiet place where silence begins and anger stops. Tombed in a clever little spot 
where only we can enter. A barrier between life and a huge hostile world. a place 
where pleasant memories linger and faces stay the same. Colors are much brighter 
and hearts are warm and kind. A shadowed soul is a rapid beat of many heartbeats. 
Pounding in rhythm one beat at a time. We can hear each heartbeat patter if we are 
silent. The beats are wonderful with amazing chime and windfall flight.
Continuos patterns as if we are glued in space to a tranquil barrier. A dimension of 
our minds unblock the scissors that can cut us apart if we let them. But no we will 
not let them. I protect you with my life and catch you if you slip on the outer bounds 
of illness. I gaze at you with glory and a living soul through the eyes of hundreds.
Let us stay shadowed as it is to protect you and keepsake your memory in a solemn 
vow that is mine and yours throughout the harmony of our souls.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 4/13/2011 9:07:00 AM
1 st word, second sentence I think you want Entombed/put something in deep place: to put something in a place that is hidden or very deep. You did just what I always do too, I can seem to consistantly spell //continuous!// Gah! [beginning line 7] For your form I think narrative would be better. What you discribe is an amazing interpersonal experience if it came to you though a shamanic faith please list it on the bottom of the verse. I hope to read lots more of your work! Light & Love
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Date: 4/12/2011 1:42:00 PM
i have read all 3 of your poems now, you need to write some more and i will read them. this one was a great one, just write about how you feel, a memory, and your pen will start to flow like the river below, hey a ryhme, good luck.
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