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Setting Sail

Long ago, there were the halcyon days 
we once knew when we were young -
gone like dollar matinees
when from tree branches we swung. 

I remembered the dire words of song,
that said changes in the weather
are often known to come on strong,
as I watched the dark clouds gather.

You tell me that this storm has passed,
but should this howling wind prevail, 
a martyr, I won't be miscast - 
watch a battered heart set sail.
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Godwin Avatar
April 10, 2025 at 4:32 PM
Nodded my head yes, yes, yes during 1st stanza, wasn't braced for emotional impact of 2nd one - you got me, I was poetically vulnerable ... CayCay
Crandall Avatar
April 10, 2025 at 6:16 PM
Haha, yes, I wrote the second stanza first, and felt I might want to set the stage and so I put in the first stanza. Then, when I was done, I had a feeling that the two stanzas mismatched, that the transition was too sudden. It's almost like there should be a middle stanza that isn't there...hmm.
Allison Avatar
April 9, 2025 at 2:10 PM
what an emotional piece David - like ships that have passed in the night:-( hugs Jan xx
Crandall Avatar
April 9, 2025 at 3:26 PM
Hi Jan - thanks! yep, looks like one of them is "hitting the road" by ship - :-))
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