Setting Sail

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Long ago, there were the halcyon days we once knew when we were young - gone like dollar matinees when from tree branches we swung. I remembered the dire words of song, that said changes in the weather are often known to come on strong, as I watched the dark clouds gather. You tell me that this storm has passed, but should this howling wind prevail, a martyr, I won't be miscast - watch a battered heart set sail.

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CayCay Jennings

Date: 4/10/2025 4:32:00 PM

Nodded my head yes, yes, yes during 1st stanza, wasn't braced for emotional impact of 2nd one - you got me, I was poetically vulnerable ... CayCay

David Crandall
Date: 4/10/2025 6:16:00 PM

Haha, yes, I wrote the second stanza first, and felt I might want to set the stage and so I put in the first stanza. Then, when I was done, I had a feeling that the two stanzas mismatched, that the transition was too sudden. It's almost like there should be a middle stanza that isn't there...hmm.

Jan Allison

Date: 4/9/2025 2:10:00 PM

what an emotional piece David - like ships that have passed in the night:-( hugs Jan xx

David Crandall
Date: 4/9/2025 3:26:00 PM

Hi Jan - thanks! yep, looks like one of them is "hitting the road" by ship - :-))