Nick Trim Poet Rhyme

Set Me Free

You are always anxious that I'm incapable,
I feel you watching over my shoulder,
it makes me nervous and less able,
never changing as I've grown older.

Forcing things on me when I'm not ready,
so I'm unprepared and lack composure,
and therefore I'm somewhat unsteady,
the pressure then makes me feel unsure.

If I was left alone to do things free
without you hovering all over me,
while supervising every activity,
you wouldn't transfer worry on to me.

It has to be done your way,
or I've failed perspectively,
note I say perspectively,
as it is seen subjectively.

You explain that what doesn't need explaining,
in-depth check ups follow while my energy drains,
the obvious revisited while my brain's straining,
you must be absolutely sure I have no brains. 

It eats away my enthusiasm and determination,
because the control is never mine,
I hope we can change the system and expectation,
and you show belief that I'll do just fine.

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Mystic Rose Rose December 18, 2018 at 11:10 PM This is very well written . I have enjoyed it.

Emile Pinet July 18, 2018 at 9:30 AM You have painted a picture with words that inspire, educate, sadden and captivate the reader. Your descriptive use of the English language and your suburb imagery are second to none. Instead of directing the reader with your words you describe your emotions and make us feel how they effect you and we are sobered by the experience. Emile. Nick Trim July 18, 2018 at 12:49 PM Thank you Emile, I didn't think about it at the time but it really was written out of pure emotion, I'm glad you think I captured it well, it's also nice to hear praise from someone that's as good at writing poetry as yourself :)