Serenity's Last Serenade

*A small lake named Serenity am I,
well hidden here among the fragrant pines;
reflecting the **cerulean of sky
till Sun behind the distant peak reclines.

***Now humming bugs crepuscular emerge
to greet the twilight’s creeping.  Next a fawn
has soundlessly appeared upon my verge.
A lapping in the stillness. . . then she’s gone.

*Dawn arrives.  I’m longing to be painted
**once again by sun, the color azure.
Jubilant that I remain untainted, 
***I croon to nature, rippling my rapture.

New creatures on two legs disrupt my peace!
Who comes here? Must my serenade now cease?


(For the Designed by Devise Poetry Contest of Debbie Guzzi)
NOTES:
* Stanza one: Personification & metaphor of the lake
**Alliteration of S in line one
The alliteration continues with the words small/serenity/cerulean/sky/Sun/diStant
*** Stanza two:  Assonance of the sound U as in “cup” with humming and bugs
Also the assonance of the ee sound in greet/creeping/soundlessLY/appeared/shE’s
*  In Stanza three: Dawn is added to the personification. The lake continues to be
Personified in the entire stanza. 
**Also there is Assonance throughout with the U sound
again: Once/ sUn/ cOlor/ jubilAnt as well as the long A sound of line 3’s remain & untainted plus line 4’s nAture.  
***Alliteration of R/P sounds line 4:croon/rippling/rapture.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 11/26/2014 1:28:00 AM
A delicious poem. Crafted with perfection. An easy 7 for this Romantic poem!
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Date: 10/6/2014 2:14:00 AM
First, beautiful write, truly. Second, several times now I have been compared to Poe. To me this is the ultimate compliment. Many, many thanks. Third, please submit whatever you wish. I enjoy anapest and would like to see what others come up with...even if it's only used in one line. God bless and good write! :)
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Date: 10/5/2014 9:23:00 PM
Big conrats on this thoughtfully written jewel Andrea...the two legged creatures have disrupted my peace many times as well :)
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Date: 10/5/2014 4:10:00 PM
Congrad's on your win please do enter my next contest. Light & Love
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Date: 10/5/2014 1:35:00 PM
Did not enter the contest but this win is no shock as the poem is awesome , truly an awesome write. All of it....
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Date: 10/5/2014 12:15:00 PM
Captivating imagery, Andrea. Beautiful in total content...lovely serenade. Congrats on your win. // paul
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Date: 10/5/2014 11:31:00 AM
love the feel of this poem Andie.. :) wagain, you made me feel like Im in a ballet show.. :D!
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Date: 10/4/2014 7:04:00 PM
Congratulations on your win Andrea. This is so beautiful. I love it.
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Date: 10/4/2014 6:19:00 PM
By disrupting the piece the melody of the poem is disrupted, very well written, well done and congrats on your win... HSK AlKendi
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Date: 10/4/2014 5:52:00 PM
This is beautiful lady plus it had a lot of work in it..Definitely serene ..Ow my.till.those creatures came into the scene. It seems human.steal nature's peace many a time,and the small lske waited till they would patiently leave : ).Lovely!!!
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Date: 10/4/2014 11:50:00 AM
Dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/4/2014 10:41:00 AM
Amazing write Andrea! How cool u r while u do such splendid n tough works! Congrats on big win dear!
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Date: 10/4/2014 10:15:00 AM
Using so many devices in Deb's poem.....it flows so well, that one wouldn't notice, had you not pointed them out to us! Beautiful descriptions, as always, Andrea! You are always top-notch!
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Date: 10/4/2014 9:48:00 AM
Congratulations on the win, Andrea
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Date: 10/4/2014 9:10:00 AM
!!!!CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR WIN!!!!
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Date: 10/4/2014 8:44:00 AM
Once again I am amazed at your talent with a pen, and the way you embrace rules and form and turn them into something magical.
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Date: 10/2/2014 9:19:00 PM
A beautiful metaphor.
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Date: 10/1/2014 2:52:00 PM
this is very beautifully painted andrea excellent pen
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Date: 10/1/2014 12:18:00 AM
This was a difficult contest - at least it would have been for me. You've made it seem easy. All my best for your winning. God bless you and love and prayers, Gina
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Date: 9/30/2014 8:55:00 PM
I wish I was this clever and knew how to do this.Good luck with Your entry because this is a wonderful piece.I just favorite You because I love Your writings...God Bless Friend,Hugs.Love Char
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Date: 9/30/2014 7:46:00 PM
Those pesky humans seem to get in the way of everything! Well constructed poem - good luck in the contest! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Date: 9/30/2014 7:33:00 PM
I am not touching that contest with a ten foot pole. I would try it but I don't want to break my brain. Excellent write, I have seen other entries so the asterisks were easy enough to ignore. I think Debbie is going to love this one. I wonder how many wins she is awarding.
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Date: 9/30/2014 6:43:00 PM
I was wondering what all the * were for! haha after reading it again and ignoring the dots, it was beautiful, well done! ! It is sure to be a winner girl, as always you rock ;)
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Date: 9/30/2014 6:52:00 PM
Yeah, I hated having to use those astericks, Casarah, but it's what the contest called for.
Date: 9/30/2014 11:19:00 AM
Amazing imagery Andrea you painted a brilliant picture. Good luck in the contest - you included everything Debbie asked for ... and more! :-) hugs jan xxx
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