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Serenity Waltz

I dreamed a dance without one step
no rhythm and no melody
no time to keep, no need for feet
wherein lay every remedy...

For broken hearts and beaten souls
and bodies begging for repair
as each does pay a hefty toll
along this journey we all share.

It was in silence wrapped in gold
we found no urgency for words
no need for rhyme; we knew this time
each thought would never go unheard.

And though some may not understand
the beauty that lay in the still
It brings to us eternity...
Renewed in strength, restored in will.


very slight editing 3/19/23

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Vijay Pandit Date: 9/19/2019 12:38:00 PM But there is so much melody in this dance you wrote, HT. Lovely rhythm and flow to your poem..I enjoyed the read and saved it into my FAVEs. Login to Reply Hello There Date: 9/19/2019 10:06:00 PM Ah, thank you so much, Vijay, for hearing a melody and seeing a dance that only existed in the mind's eye ~ and thank you for honoring it all with a FAVE :)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/6/2019 7:08:00 AM I can see why. ;0) Login to Reply Hello There Date: 9/6/2019 6:28:00 PM :)

Phil Capitano Date: 9/6/2019 4:22:00 AM You are a dancer with words, HT, and two-stepped your way into my heart with this piece. Great job and welcome to the soup. Login to Reply Hello There Date: 9/6/2019 6:27:00 PM Thank you very much, Phil ~ I really appreciate your sweet comment and welcome <3

Richard Lamoureux Date: 9/5/2019 9:19:00 AM We use to be a able to rate a piece but poetry soup disabled the feature. I would have given this a 7. Now before you think that is not a good score, it was their highest number. For a few months I had wondered why none of my pieces rated above a seven. Login to Reply Hello There Date: 9/5/2019 10:30:00 AM LOL. Thank you so much!! I'm so glad you liked this one. It's special to me.

Pat Adams Date: 9/1/2019 2:02:00 PM A fine figurative pirouette! Very well rhymed and perfect cadence! Well done!.....80)....pat Login to Reply Hello There Date: 9/1/2019 9:53:00 PM Thank you, pat, for your kind words. So happy you appreciate rhythm and rhyme... It's a little like dancing with words, don't you think?

Chris Green Date: 8/30/2019 1:34:00 PM This was absolutely fantastic. I am so thrilled you wrote this and posted it, I was hoping you would based on the reply you left to my comment on your other poem, if I am correct in my assumption. The second verse really spoke to me. Really nicely done. The meter was smooth and the rhymes spot on. Login to Reply Hello There Date: 8/30/2019 2:40:00 PM Thank you, Chris ~ I'm glad you were able to connect with parts of this. This was written previously, but I thought I'd present it here today to show that a dance can come in many forms, even when it seems impractical or impossible. Thank you, again!