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Serenity Waltz

I dreamed a dance without one step no rhythm and no melody no time to keep, no need for feet wherein lay every remedy... For broken hearts and beaten souls and bodies begging for repair as each does pay a hefty toll along this journey we all share. It was in silence wrapped in gold we found no urgency for words no need for rhyme; we knew this time each thought would never go unheard. And though some may not understand the beauty that lay in the still It brings to us eternity... Renewed in strength, restored in will. very slight editing 3/19/23

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Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/19/2019 12:38:00 PM

But there is so much melody in this dance you wrote, HT. Lovely rhythm and flow to your poem..I enjoyed the read and saved it into my FAVEs.

Hello There
Date: 9/19/2019 10:06:00 PM

Ah, thank you so much, Vijay, for hearing a melody and seeing a dance that only existed in the mind's eye ~ and thank you for honoring it all with a FAVE :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/6/2019 7:08:00 AM

I can see why. ;0)

Hello There
Date: 9/6/2019 6:28:00 PM

Phil Capitano

Date: 9/6/2019 4:22:00 AM

You are a dancer with words, HT, and two-stepped your way into my heart with this piece. Great job and welcome to the soup.

Hello There
Date: 9/6/2019 6:27:00 PM

Thank you very much, Phil ~ I really appreciate your sweet comment and welcome <3

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/5/2019 9:19:00 AM

We use to be a able to rate a piece but poetry soup disabled the feature. I would have given this a 7. Now before you think that is not a good score, it was their highest number. For a few months I had wondered why none of my pieces rated above a seven.

Hello There
Date: 9/5/2019 10:30:00 AM

LOL. Thank you so much!! I'm so glad you liked this one. It's special to me.

Pat Adams

Date: 9/1/2019 2:02:00 PM

A fine figurative pirouette! Very well rhymed and perfect cadence! Well done!.....80)....pat

Hello There
Date: 9/1/2019 9:53:00 PM

Thank you, pat, for your kind words. So happy you appreciate rhythm and rhyme... It's a little like dancing with words, don't you think?

Chris Green

Date: 8/30/2019 1:34:00 PM

This was absolutely fantastic. I am so thrilled you wrote this and posted it, I was hoping you would based on the reply you left to my comment on your other poem, if I am correct in my assumption. The second verse really spoke to me. Really nicely done. The meter was smooth and the rhymes spot on.

Hello There
Date: 8/30/2019 2:40:00 PM

Thank you, Chris ~ I'm glad you were able to connect with parts of this. This was written previously, but I thought I'd present it here today to show that a dance can come in many forms, even when it seems impractical or impossible. Thank you, again!