Sotto Poet Poet Free verse

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Serenade

 
Written: February 05, 2024
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On twilit roads as dusk falls,
from rivers to towers and walls,
when lilting rhythms call,
a gleaming steed sailed.
on pearl-grey pinions, and held,
as the aroma of willow draws.
tumble toward the ground.
through warm beams.
and anodyne smell.
 
Under the mast of a rusting ship,
over a dazzling web of water and light,
I'm excited to charter out of the bay,
In a silver chariot,
on chrysolite mirrors and carried,
where cinnabar vapor entices,
float gently to the ground,
with cheerful smiles,
and sensual breath,
bright polish—sun fell,
busters grab and break boards.

And tempests rumble and thunder,
In an iron chariot, ferried,
on clods of lava, and carried,
where cinnabar vapor beguiles,
swinging unpretentious,
with savage smiles,
and smoldering breath.

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Anne-Lise Andresen February 6, 2024 at 10:59 AM - A sensuous reflection poem in a beautiful and ambiguous design, Las :) - An impressive Serenade ... wooow :) - hugs

Victor Buhagiar February 6, 2024 at 9:08 AM When I read your poems I prepare myself to understand your wonderful use of diction. Not easy for me a foreigner.

Ink Empress February 6, 2024 at 1:51 AM This is beyond impeccable! I absolutely loved reading your creative wordplay throughout dr sotto! So clever and profound and i must quote especially “ In a silver chariot, on chrysolite mirrors and carried, where cinnabar vapor entices, float gently to the ground,” the way you phrase things is always awe inspiring and so captivating leaving readers appreciating every word you weave! The flow of your words too is seamless! I especially loved the ending too. Your use of alliterations on point!

Valsa George February 5, 2024 at 8:37 PM What use of words ! Some usages I am seeing for the first time like 'chrysolite mirrors', 'cinnabar vapors'. You are indeed a wordsmith.... ! "when lilting rhythms call, a gleaming steed sailed. on pearl-grey pinions, and held, as the aroma of willow draws. tumble toward the ground."..... Wow....You take your readers through a mystical journey. Beautiful poem, dear Lasaad.

Hilda Greenhough February 5, 2024 at 7:45 PM The ocean, forbidding and charming, takes us through unknown waves to foreign shore. This poem was delightful. I liked the colorful descriptions.

Shadow Hamilton February 5, 2024 at 5:27 PM hi Sotto again you transport us on the sea where all kinds of things take our breath away like creaking sails puffing and billowing s they catch then lose the breeze flapping as we change tack beautiful memories of past weekends which fed us, ty for the memories hugs Shadow

Bill Baker February 5, 2024 at 5:26 PM This will sound like an echo after you read Sara's comment. We do seem to see many of the same things in poems, having been an English teacher, she just has a stronger vocabulary than me. "Under the mast of a rusting ship, over a dazzling web of water and light, I'm excited to charter out of the bay", was the highlight of the poem for me. Your descriptive words are enjoyable to read. Write On, my dear friend! Bill

Daniel Henry Rodgers February 5, 2024 at 2:42 PM Dear Sotto, Your poem is an enchanting journey through imagery and emotion. The way you blend words together creates wonderful scenes that transport the reader to mystical realms. Each stanza unfolds like a story, filled with shimmering details. Your talent shines brightly, illuminating the path for others to follow. - Blessings, Daniel