September Song (Triple Tanka)

like a lover’s sigh
she tiptoes forth    looking back
those warm memories
birds    still singing    cross over
and sad sunshine stills the wind

now September sings
a sympathetic tune silvers
promises late gold –
the change will be gradual
promises sleep    painless sleep

mysterious calm
Llke a magic caesura
bated by surprise
in mind it’s ever the same
such gentle looking forward
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Dietrich Avatar
April 18, 2010 at 3:03 AM
OH, wow, DAver, I found an incredible one HERE. this is for favs. it reminds me somewhat of my poem September Born. I was a Labor day child,haha. and I wrote about ASters of september and it was a bit like this one!! Luv, andrea ps. I think i had a few naked poems but not like YOURS EEEKS
Toran Avatar
November 10, 2009 at 3:27 PM
Smooth and eloquent! Very picturesque and filled with imagery. Great choice of words. It's actually relaxing. Milt
Kendrick Avatar
September 29, 2009 at 1:07 PM
This is a very descriptive Tanka. I really like the last line. Keep writing. Sara
Curcio Avatar
September 22, 2009 at 4:10 PM
Dearest Daver! Wonderful to read this poem again. It's beautiful! I'm glad you like "Werewoman of Brooklyn" - It's fun, isn't it. I have music which I hope to finish recording tonight. I've been writing songs and poems - Hope you are doing well. I was thinking about you the other day. :-) Hugs back to you Corinne
Mason Avatar
September 19, 2009 at 10:07 AM
Seems we're on the same page ... smile ... you with this beautiful write, me with my Blog and the air with September's Song ... beautiful write here, Daver. Nice to see your work again. There are too many folks at the Soup to keep up with ... by the way, did I ever get your day/month of your birthday to add to my calendar? Don't need the year to have a birthday song ... smile ...
Curcio Avatar
September 18, 2009 at 5:06 PM
This is gorgeous Daver. It conjures up soothing feelings in me, even though it sings September, and all that could mean.
Golden Avatar
September 18, 2009 at 11:58 AM
This is lovely, Daver. You create a tranquil, magical mood with this piece. Blessings, Donna
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September 14, 2009 at 12:20 PM
There is so much depth in this poem for the reader to ponder about. I like the creative format. Nice use of imagery. Keep up the good writing. Karen
George   Avatar
September 11, 2009 at 8:08 AM
A beautiful melody - evoking such beautiful visions. Your writing is like fine wine - it just get better with age. Thank you for your kind comments, Dave. They mean so much to me. I just couldn't stay away any longer. Love, Lainie
Richards Avatar
September 9, 2009 at 12:32 PM
This speaks so gently that it almost seems too fragile for words....."beautiful" is not enough to say about this poem. It puts me into a dreamlike state...wow...
Brown Avatar
September 9, 2009 at 9:55 AM
Thank you Daver for this wonderful piece of September. Love, Carol
Gorelick Avatar
September 9, 2009 at 8:47 AM
This is outstanding. One of the best poems I've ever read. This needs to be published! Love, BG
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September 9, 2009 at 7:39 AM
A masterpiece, Daver! I love the way you give life to September and the way the gradual change brings "painless sleep." I can feel the numbness of bitter winter and sense the "mysterious calm" that accompanies a new snowfall. Gee, how I miss winter. I have moved in at Ormond and am waiting for phone and internet installation -- tapping a local wifi on a laptop now. Auditioning for Blithe Spirit this weekend. Love your beautiful poem and admire your talent! Carolyn
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September 9, 2009 at 6:48 AM
Your poetry has such a lull to it my friend,..and how on target you are with its persipitation !!! Great write,..into my fav's for inspiring my september,..I'll be reading this again ! TY james
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