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written for the imagism contest sponsored by Constance La France 

“Some stars are frozen within the shades of shifting seasons, yet the grief of love, etched in acrylic gold, whirls through the sunlight, dressed in grim mists, echoing endless memories of a timeless romance” Quote By Poet
I feel the frozen sigh of an aching sunset, as the warm mustard dews of moving mists~ softly stroke the sapphire fringes of silent seas, singing somber songs into the rain-kissed skyline, heavy with onyx tears of angst, like a withering black rose, mourning within a mahogany casket, locked away with sorrowful memories, embalmed in hues of hurling hailstorms. Perhaps somewhere between splitting gusts and gales of grief, sullen sunflowers remain trapped, as souvenirs dusted with greying greens of a broken September. For every autumn holds a narrative, lost between the dusky views of drizzling leaves, and I will forever bloom from an opaque mirage, listening to the fading forests~ whisper woeful odes to the wistful wind.

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Date: 10/1/2024 6:36:00 AM
Ink, congratulations on your win in my Imagism contest, beautifully penned, I love the quote, Constance
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Date: 9/28/2024 10:30:00 AM
IE, you make September sound exciting and windy. There's plenty to observe in nature if we take time to study it. It seems as though you have looked at it carefully and have presented your findings with beautiful words. Smiles!!
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Date: 9/28/2024 8:54:00 AM
This is so gorgeous. How did I miss it. Big congrats on your win. Miss you!
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Date: 9/27/2024 4:41:00 PM
Gorgeous, very tragical writing. I loved the part about "drizzling leaves" <3
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Date: 9/22/2024 3:14:00 AM
Beautiful poetry Ink, you have such a way with words, enjoyed the read… Beryl
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Date: 9/22/2024 1:26:00 AM
I find this piece deeply evocative, especially the line "embalmed in hues of hurling hailstorms," which sets an intense tone. The imagery of "sullen sunflowers" as souvenirs of a "broken September" resonates with me, reflecting the weight of grief. The phrase "every autumn holds a narrative" captures how each season carries its own stories. I’m also drawn to the conclusion, where the narrator listens to "fading forests whisper woeful odes to the wistful wind," evoking both sadness and hope.
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Date: 9/21/2024 1:49:00 PM
Dearest Empress, is it even possible to actually come alive inside a poem that is filled with alliterations, metaphors, images that are crystal? Yes, yes and yes! In other words I just did. How I love this line “ softly stroke the sapphire fringes of silent seas, singing somber songs into the rain-kissed skyline”. So elegant and full of life a life with a FAV! - Blessings, My Dear Empress, Daniel
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Date: 9/21/2024 6:52:00 AM
frozen sigh of an aching sunset, Mmm the damn imagery ,.,absolutely stunning!! moving mists softly stroke the sapphire fringes of silent seas, singing somber songs into the rain-kissed skyline,.. mourning within a mahogany casket,.. ooo alliteration papi!! Ooo that ending is gorgeous will forever bloom from an opaque mirage, listening to the fading forests whisper woeful odes to the wistful wind…. Absolutely brilliant piece
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Date: 9/20/2024 9:29:00 PM
For every subject and poetic form, you have a unique way of rendering your thoughts. Your poems have deeper roots stretching beyond the surface. How beautifully you have referred to the September sky as as 'the rain-kissed skyline, heavy with onyx tears of angst,'What all poetic techniques you prodigiously employ to make your poems stand out. Your alliterations are so striking... "softly stroke the sapphire fringes of silent seas, singing somber songs " I can only exclaim--- Wow!
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Date: 9/20/2024 4:13:00 PM
This is so real. You describe a drizzly autumn with true accuracy. I like it. I am now waiting for the first rain.
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Date: 9/20/2024 12:07:00 PM
Dear Ink, your poem explores themes of loss, nostalgia, and the passage of time. It reflects on the emotional weight of memories and the melancholy beauty found in nature, suggesting that even amidst grief, there is a lingering hope for renewal and understanding. The imagery conjures a sense of longing and sorrow, drawing parallels between the natural world and human emotions. The use of metaphors like "withering black rose" and "mahogany casket" evokes a profound sense of mourning and remembrance, while the mention of "autumn" and "sunflowers" symbolizes the cycle of life and the persistence of beauty even in decay.
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Date: 9/20/2024 11:53:00 AM
So beautifully said . Love it .
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Date: 9/20/2024 11:21:00 AM
mellow strokes of wordpaint color this piece with autumnal images...a fine offering from you, ink!
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Date: 9/20/2024 11:17:00 AM
Always very emotional writing Ink. "Splitting gusts and gales of grief," a very painful line I can feel in my core. "Souvenirs dusted with greying greens of a broken September", very vivid imagery. Grief comes in seasons. As days get shorter and nights longer, grief can settle into bones like a cool autumn breeze. As always beautifully painful.
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Date: 9/20/2024 11:22:00 AM
Yes i hate Septembers, yeay! Haha! Im so glad you feel my words. Thank you another comment! From you! Definitely need to call DHL now to send some chocolates lol

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