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Senryu - When Jealousy Looms

complimenting her
on the stylish new haircut-
his wife looks daggers


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Haiku - Senryu Writing Challenge ~ Oct 2018
Sponsored by Dear Heart a.k.a. Broken Wings  
Placed 2nd

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Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 12/11/2018 9:52:00 PM

beauty searching daggers! beauty as destroyer here! --- lovely senryu

Paul Callus
Date: 12/12/2018 9:31:00 AM

Thank you for reading and liking, Mahtab. Regards // paul

Judy Ball

Date: 11/18/2018 4:41:00 PM

Ooooops! Better think of something fast to smooth those ruffled feathers. A fun read that made me smile. Congrats my friend. God Bless, JB

Paul Callus
Date: 11/19/2018 2:46:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed it, Judy. Some feathers, once ruffled, take a lot of preening to get them back in place:) Regards & blessings // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/2/2018 10:35:00 PM

Hmm, sounds like someone might be spending the night on the sofa.. I hope he's comfy :)) A stirring senryu of the dark side of love. Congratulations on your wonderful win as well, Paul. Warmest wishes and hugs always, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 11/7/2018 11:06:00 AM

Sorry for the late reply, but I will not use being away on holiday and having received no notification from Soup as an excuse :) Thank you for another lovely, pleasant visit! ~ Warm regards & hugs // paul

Carole Duet

Date: 10/30/2018 8:11:00 PM

A lot said with a few words...perfectly. Congrats on your placement in the contest too.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/31/2018 6:05:00 AM

Thank you lots, Carole. Pleased to have you stopping by. Hope all is fine on your side of the fence:) Regards // paul

Constance La France

Date: 10/30/2018 3:07:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your win in my contest ~

Paul Callus
Date: 10/30/2018 3:16:00 PM

Thank you, Constance. I was pleased with my placement, considering that you had many entries worthy of mention. Best regards // paul

Pashang Salehi

Date: 10/29/2018 4:09:00 PM

Are you talking about me Paul...lol. cute.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/30/2018 4:35:00 AM

Thank you, Pashang:) Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/29/2018 1:41:00 PM

Just stopping back with congratulations on your well-deserved win, my friend. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 10/30/2018 4:33:00 AM

Thank you Carolyn. Double visits are doubly appreciated. Take care. Love // paul

Charles Messina

Date: 10/28/2018 9:47:00 AM

Some of the new styles of hair these days make me scratch my head, thankfully I still have some hair atop...lol Love your great Senryu, Paul Congratulations on your win. Regards // Charlie

Paul Callus
Date: 10/28/2018 10:01:00 AM

Enjoyed your pleasant visit and comments, Charles...thank you. Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 10/28/2018 6:39:00 AM

Excellent and well penned. Congrats on your great Senryu win my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/28/2018 9:03:00 AM

Thank you for the complimentary remarks and congrats, Ravi. Hope you are keeping well. Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

Date: 10/28/2018 4:44:00 AM

Ha ha... Lovely senru and congratulations for your well deserved win ...

Paul Callus
Date: 10/28/2018 9:01:00 AM

Thank you for the lovely comments and congrats, Supraja:) Best regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/27/2018 5:35:00 PM

ha!! jealousy. Congrats on your win and sorry I am so behind here this week, Paul!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 5:39:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. You are excused...no need to be sorry...after all you have to go to work, while I'm happily retired:) Regards // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/27/2018 5:00:00 PM

I wonder if you write from experience..anyhow, brilliant, and congratulation..

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 5:22:00 PM

I am very diplomatic, Harry...I do my best to keep out of trouble:) Thank you for a pleasant visit. Regards // paul

Tania Kitchin

Date: 10/27/2018 3:23:00 PM

Nicely done, congratulations on your win in the contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 5:20:00 PM

Glad you like it, Tania. Thank you! Regards // paul

Tom Cunningham

Date: 10/27/2018 3:21:00 PM

Back with congratulations Paul. Tom.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 5:19:00 PM

Thank you, Tom; you too merit congrats on your win! Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/27/2018 3:18:00 PM

- Congratulations on your great Senryu win, Paul :) - Best wishes for a lovely weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 5:19:00 PM

Many thanks, Anne-Lise:) May you also have a lovely weekend:) Hugs // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 10/27/2018 1:34:00 PM

Hi Paul, Your three lines say it all "Jealousy is the root of all evil". However, I'm certain that a debating society would enjoy such a topic and I'm sure the outcome would be a quite a surprise! Jealousy is inevitably one of humanity's emotions. Best Wishes, Jennifer.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 5:18:00 PM

I agree with you, Jennifer...this topic is worthy of a much more wide debate, surpassing my humble three-liner! Thank you for your input. Warm regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/27/2018 8:15:00 AM

Ah, men must be careful when they have wives who may get jealous. Such a comment wouldn't have bothered me because I was secure in my relationship with John, but I do know women who would shoot "daggers" at a husband who complimented another lady. Awesome senryu, Paul! Best wishes in Dear Heart's contest. Love, Carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 8:51:00 AM

A 'secure relationship' says it all, Carolyn. Jealousy is often the product of insecurity. Thank you for your pleasant comments, my friend. Have a lovely weekend ~ love // paul

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/27/2018 2:07:00 AM

Hi Paul, gotta watch when that jealousy springs forth. You capture the emotion precisely in this wonderful Senryu Paul. Beware the right cross that comes after. Another excellent write from your pen my friend. Have a wonderful Saturday. Your friend always....Mike.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 8:21:00 AM

Thank you, Mike. Pleased that you enjoyed. Best regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 10/27/2018 12:52:00 AM

Hahaha wonderful :-)

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 8:36:00 AM

So glad you enjoyed, Eve:) Lovely to hear you laughing! Hugs // paul

Pashang Salehi

Date: 10/26/2018 6:26:00 PM

Wow... Jealousy is the love and hates together...

Paul Callus
Date: 10/27/2018 8:35:00 AM

Jealousy is a double-edged sword, Pashang! Thank you for your visit. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/26/2018 1:59:00 PM

- Jealousy and suspicion - the backside of love ? :) - Excellent written, Paul - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2018 2:53:00 PM

Jealousy and suspicion are definitely a huge drawback, Anne-Lise; love will find it hard to stay steady on such poor foundations! Have a lovely weekend. Hugs // paul

John Lawless

Date: 10/26/2018 10:42:00 AM

OH YEAH!!!! BIG NO-NO....

Paul Callus
Date: 10/26/2018 2:50:00 PM

Ahh...the men seem to be on the same wavelength:)) Best regards, John // paul