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1st in Self Love Contest (Sponsor: Karen Jones)

Judged: March 23rd, 2025

Self Love

Where was I?
unusual.
behind 
the dizzying looking glass,
cement block,
panelled windows,
noonish saloons 
sipping my loathing 
like mosquitoes 
milking stone veins 

constipated.
contemplating pretty suspects and their banditry of spotlight and shadows; cute fashions with their dreamboat accessories.
Snatched away!
Who was I? a deserted quotient. All of me, crumbs sucking thumbs, snorting baby powder, perfumed by heaven's hope, resisting hunger and decomposing inside career mascot attire - long-sleeves and layered layers buttoning down body shame. Where were we? Ten-and-less aisle, bargain corner debates. Okay, maybe unquestioned. Neither taken, nor given as a suggestion, no soft eyes pursuing my pepper coarse afro edges, rising bust, diffusive thighs and stooped shoulders. Hominim deflated, experiencing overqualified non-affection as a ruminant beast, between ungovernable lioness and resigned kitten. I was left holding a pen, multiplying stereotypes around fatherless girls without an agreeable image of self who fell for blank pages to redraw the stages that had failed hearts. Flesh.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025


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Date: 3/10/2025 1:35:00 PM
Congratulations on your win for your artistic flair of raw energy and self awareness! I especially admired the strength it takes to persevere with pen despite dilemma of being fatherless! Thanks for sharing and supporting my contest!
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/10/2025 4:10:00 PM
Thank you so much, Karen. I felt like I could be raw with this one. It's all a part of my personal growth and healing.
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