Self-Reproach

An offensive mirror
produces my face,
and ears listen to a
hackneyed heart beat

The stench of stagnant 
breath confirms my 
identity and smoker’s 
status. Sixty a day

The cold floor held
by blood drained feet,
a razor held in hand
at mannequin angle

The bile in my throat and
the fur on my tongue
congealed with the sickly
sweet syrup of life dripping out

The door behind falls open on
its own axis of gravity and the
mirror reveals an empty room
effused with a pall of used smoke,

Like grey mists rising on a moor,
seeking fresh lungs to enbalm.
I am as alone as an unnamed star
travelling the furthest reaches of space

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 12/8/2015 5:43:00 PM
There's an aspect of blame attached to self-reproach, a feeling of responsibility for wrongdoing... the character here feels this very strongly. In any event he's certainly taking all the blame here! '...as alone as an unnamed star travelling the furthest reaches of space.' A lonely man with NO friends. '...the stench of stagnant breath,' '...the bile in my throat and the fur on my tongue.' WOW! No one would want to get close to this guy! BRILLIANT, as always... Keith
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/9/2015 8:06:00 AM
I have written several autobiographical poems myself... not for the better! Keith
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Terry Robinson
Date: 12/9/2015 3:58:00 AM
Keith, ax always you are perceptive. I am this man. For various reasons I reproach myself for various acts throughout my life. Not least of which my actions during the various conflicts I fought in and the changes they made in me. Not for the better
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