Andrea Dietrich Poet Sonnet

Seeking New Mobility

As setting sun trails off behind a peak,
I lie in utter lone tranquility
here tethered to my earthly home.  I seek
a sundering. . .  A new mobility.

I focus on the hidden, inner me,
forgetting awkward limbs and hands and toes.
My body must entirely flaccid be,
so placidly I keep a still repose
that soul might elsewhere go past mountain tops.

Then suddenly, I feel my spirit pitch.
It spins; I’m on the brink. . . and then it stops!
I think this failure’s more than just a glitch.
I open up my eyes and see afar,
now twinkling with amusement, night’s first star.

(true story about my one attempt long ago for an OBE.)

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John Watt November 6, 2020 at 6:05 PM You have had a very interesting life! I liked the proximity of flaccid and placid.

Richard D Seal May 13, 2013 at 7:24 PM I've had a couple of what I believe to have been obe's, they came unexpectedly though, it's true if you try to force it, you get to the brink, something seems to halt it.. Excellent poem on this subect Andrea I must say. Take care, Richard

Vince Suzadail Jr. February 7, 2013 at 3:41 PM Mine are OME. Good write.

Kash Poet May 12, 2012 at 10:03 AM Yeah Andrea,may be senryu:)

Robert Johnson April 22, 2012 at 3:33 PM Back in the 60's, they liked to go. On trips like this where the mind would flow. Out to the nth degree of thought. Always hoping to never get caught. Ilicit stimuli and such, now no one seems to want that crutch.

Prince Ekpemandu April 21, 2012 at 3:04 PM nice one dear

Phyllis Babcock April 20, 2012 at 3:54 PM Wonderful write Andrea. I have one more of yours to read and that's it for today. Been on the computer for 5 hours today trying to catch up on lots of reading. Would help if i typed faster. love phyl

Daver Austin April 20, 2012 at 1:46 PM Great meditation. "and then it stops." I've had the experience and seen "afar." Love, daver

Gwendolen Song April 20, 2012 at 6:01 AM Harry cracked me up with his witty comments below...you ARE WORTH HIS LIBRARY FEE and more,,,you became night's first star?....WOW, how amazing...it's bc of the very blessed imagination that you have that God allowed you to take a peak into this realm...you wrote of it beautifully. Love, Gwendolen

Harry Horsman April 19, 2012 at 4:01 AM my favourite form of poetry, and again from you, a wonderful example of its flowing grace, and sincerity. worth my library fee just to read this. Oh! as for obe, the nearest i came to it is via google earth. harry

Jack Horne April 18, 2012 at 12:47 PM lol, i've never tried, but i doubt if i would get far either, andrea. many congrats on your wins

Joe Maverick April 18, 2012 at 11:53 AM Glad to see your write on this experience Andrea, i think you are outside the normal anyway without leaving the earth; take care Joe.)

Bl Devnath April 18, 2012 at 7:38 AM Fantastic one just read. Sometimes past becomes present in memory with a fickle of seconds. Loved always, bl

Sara Kendrick April 18, 2012 at 7:20 AM Interesting work..Soup me and explain more about it..Enjoyed reading it..Sara...Thank you for taking time to stop by and review my work and comment..

Chittaranjan Dey April 18, 2012 at 2:48 AM Nice read dear poetess.

Joseph May April 17, 2012 at 10:53 PM you are in the bliss of solitude Andrea..,.great poem...Thanks for visiting and sharing ... love...Joseph

Tim B April 17, 2012 at 7:17 PM Stellar, A very descriptive write about a spiritual journey Andrea. I love the last two lines, they capture the essence of the theme in succinct fashion. An enjoyable read, thanks for sharing.

David Williams April 17, 2012 at 2:32 PM Andrea they say that to have an OBE (outer body experience, for Michelle) you either have to be near death or completely naked, as to have nothing that can link you to the present moment, I have not tried either...YET...David

Nette Onclaud April 17, 2012 at 2:26 PM simply out-of- this- world experience, andie... wonderful visuals done in good form!... whoooty!..:) huggs

Michelle Mac Donald April 17, 2012 at 10:43 AM Oh, thank you for your kind comments, Andrea.:) I'm even more happy, cause it prompts me to come and read more of your outstanding writes!:)) This piece is so deep and vibrant. Though I don't know what an "OBE" is, I do see that it was something that has sparked and flared up an outstanding write! Man, I feel so ignorant and fuddy duddy at times, with words.:( Regardless, as usual, I'm blown away by the "spirit pitch" and beauty of your writes! Best wishes, Mikki

Black Eyed Susan April 17, 2012 at 8:24 AM wonderful sonnet. I enjoyed your inner search and almost obe. love the last line - cute personification of the star to end this piece positively, with a smile :)

Jared Pickett April 17, 2012 at 7:50 AM You are really good at the Sonnet. I always enjoy these more when penned by You!! Good work!.:JP}

Kash Poet April 16, 2012 at 11:55 PM Wonderfully penned Sonnet by you Andrea.very nicely expressed feelings in this poem.Best wishes to you.

Kash Poet April 16, 2012 at 11:53 PM Yess!!