Seeing To the Door

This bliss rover I.
Lazed fresh muddy-smoke,
In hot-rate envy.
A digital glow moans,
2 am, lighting my skin.

She easily, nameless,
Just left.
My mass sweat,
On my cotton-mix.
She a slapdash, I letting.

Hour previous, world dyed in smut.
Three ago she open, breathing.
I flush, on decernables,
Day ago, I was settling,
On her far possibilities.

Shame thinking 
Justice grasping.
"All in all" apes right.
Upright, stone carving.
Tailoring white pillows,
With black market Viagra.

Her last words.
"Your precious"
Cleverly my eyes
Nuzzel wood floors.
Then sleep, a push to morning.
I did see her to the door.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Bentley Avatar
November 22, 2010 at 9:08 AM
I think this is awesome man.
Brown Avatar
November 12, 2010 at 11:52 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round of the Poetrysoup site contest Johnathon. The best to you in the finals. Love, Carol
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November 8, 2010 at 10:19 AM
Congratulations on your poem being featured this week Johnathon. Love, Carol
Shango Avatar
December 22, 2009 at 7:04 AM
There is a Jamaican poet, Dennis Scot, I cut my teeth on him ... O we share some same sensibilities ... but you are crisp, stronger than I, great drift in the word
Guzzi Avatar
December 19, 2009 at 7:58 AM
Some things are clearer "She a slapdash I savior/savor? "letting?" veagra/Viagra. Trinity shame thinking ...I don't get how these Justice grasping....two lines connect to the following "All in all" apes right. Upright, stone carving. Tailoring white pillows, With black market Viagra. Previuos 4 lines VERY VERY good Much improved in coherance!!!Light & Love
Guzzi Avatar
December 17, 2009 at 2:16 PM
"Holy trinity thinking/Justice grasping."..no idea hon which holy trinity? if she is a sexual savior sent from God we need more clues? Hope this is some help. Light & Love and onward per your request!
Guzzi Avatar
December 17, 2009 at 2:15 PM
(Any 4 letter word in a title should be capitalized ;)..) Ok very unique write..also disjointed...first I switch to present tense (no ed's) I think perhaps there's not quite enough "bread crumbs" we know it's a sexual encounter yet certain phrases are a bit too puzzling? "Off a off screen."? Off an off screen..(a porn site?) "She slapdashed, savior letting." ..Slapdash she, savior letting?/getting?
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