Sedoka- Slow down

Speeding through highway
My eyes caught the traffic sign~
'Slow down, there's work in progress'

With a sudden brake,
a screeching sound, tiers stilled.
Moved slow with extreme caution.

7th gradecaresedoka

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Sam Kauffman

June 1, 2026 at 11:27 AM

Dearest Valsa, congratulations on your win. You have so skillfully used images of driving on a freeway as a metaphor to "slow down!" Wonderfully done! Sending you blessings, dear friend!

Sotto Poet

June 1, 2026 at 3:57 AM

Congratulations! Well done, Valsa! With such heartfelt expression, I do not doubt that the final portion will be inspiring, just like yours. Absolutely stunning.

Andrea Dietrich

May 31, 2026 at 9:03 PM

Nice win, dear. Congratulations

Kim Rodrigues

May 31, 2026 at 5:24 PM

Sounds scary! Congrats!

Paige Hind

May 30, 2026 at 6:50 PM

very deep- I love the layers of this poem

Hiya Sharma

May 30, 2026 at 10:54 AM

My dearest Valsa, hope you've been doing well.. it's been such a long while since I read any of your beautiful poetry.. just to let you know, I've always missed your soulful weavings! and oh wow! What a picturesque and wonderful sedoka! It really builds up the atmosphere! You really have that golden spark in your will and how amazing it feels to be reading you once again! Feeling good to be back ~ sending many best wishes and light. Always.