Secrets of the Sahara

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Soft-bouncing thru a gentle desert breeze
          She rode secure atop the camel's back
               Like skirring swells on rolling Persian seas
     Connecting stars that winked in midnight black

She tried to think on what was now ahead
          To shed those horrid thoughts of yesterdays
               A hidden slave to others and their bed
     Sold long before she knew of women's ways

To live in that cruel world of twisted needs
          She often drowned her dreams of being free
               Yet through that life of furtive men and deeds
     The stars would sing to her of what might be

And when her eyes had long since dried of tears
          Her broken spirit, cleaving at its crease
               She gathered all her earnings o'er the years
     And with her treasures, bought her own release

Now 'cross the desert eventide she wandered
          True hope now blooming in those distant lands
               And tho' her pride and person had been squandered
     Those secrets, she'd left buried in the sands

          For ...

As she strengthened from those hidden scars ...
          The darkest nights so birth ... the brightest stars.







~ 2nd Place ~  in the "Secret" Poetry Contest, Faraz Ajmal, Judge & Sponsor.

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/30/2018 3:30:00 PM

I can easily see why this impassioned piece won a Top Placement Greg! It is a tale beautifully and delicately told! Congratulations on your deserving win! First Place for me! ; ) xxoo Happy New Year!

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/7/2019 7:59:00 PM

That's very sweet of you, Connie, and I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one ... not my "usual" direction, but I love to weave tales of overcoming adversity - the best of the human spirit! Blessings, Dear Poet! :-) <3 <3

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/30/2018 10:44:00 AM

Hi Greg, Congratulations on your placement in the contest. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/7/2019 7:58:00 PM

You are always so kind, Alexis, thank you my dear friend! :-) <3

Debjani Mitra

Date: 12/30/2018 2:10:00 AM

Hello Greg, your words are so rich, expressive, and powerful, I learn a lot and enjoy your constructs... Congratulations and wishes for a happy new year

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/7/2019 7:57:00 PM

This is so sweet of you, Debjani, and I'm so happy that you liked my little story of victory and strength of spirit ... many thanks and blessings to you, My Friend! :-) <3

Faraz Ajmal

Date: 12/29/2018 1:49:00 PM

You have written a wonderful story depicting the sad tale of a girl, only the deserts of Sahara hides the pain she must have undergone and all those secrets will be kept in it, I really enjoyed reading this wonderful poem of yours. Many congratulations on your wonderful 2nd position in my contest, it sure was a beauty. Good luck and have a really nice day

Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/7/2019 7:53:00 PM

Thank you so much, Faraz, I was so honored and humbled to have placed so highly with this poem ... it had received no comments until now, so it really made my day! Blessings to you for the kindness - I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one! :-)