Secret of Lips-- Retourne

The moonbeam wears its glittered thread, while stars lift evening's fine sarong a trance ascends far overhead moist kisses fondling a raw song While stars lift evening's fine sarong in secrets flushed …dark turns to light when hungry lips meet to adorn a fragrant tryst of soul’s birthright A trance ascends far overhead to drape clandestine hours…winds tease, pouring a thirst on mouths that spread dusk to sun in heavenly bliss Moist kisses fondling a raw song As lovers moan in harmony To steal the gaps…now worlds belong In hush of oneness, as they flee. A Kiss is Just a Kiss Contest ~ secret love~ 7/24/2013
A retourne is a French form of poetry, similar to the kyrielle, with four (4) quatrains written in tetrameter (8 syllables/line). - Lines 2, 3, and 4 are REPEATED as the first line of verses 2, 3, and 4
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Undertaker Avatar
August 5, 2013 at 10:09 AM
great nette.Congrats on your win. (:cJenish
Dietrich Avatar
August 4, 2013 at 1:40 AM
I see you made the list. Way to go, Nette, with your retourne gem.
A  Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 9:30 PM
amazing... love ~SKAT~
A   Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 9:02 PM
a sweet winning poem...Linda
Gasun Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 8:17 PM
This is soo lovely! You did it very well! Biggest hearty congratulations on another super win my dear friend Nette! Cheers! Thank you so much for sharing! Have a blessed wkend to you and your love ones! love lots and big hugs, Leonora
Gorelick Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 8:01 PM
Hadnt heard of this form..glad you used it.Congrats. BG
Kendrick Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 3:33 PM
Congrats on your great win..I knew it would be in the winners' list..Sara
Andresen Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 3:09 PM
- Congratulations on your winning poems, nice to read your entry Nette. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
Lamoureux Avatar
August 3, 2013 at 2:17 PM
Beautiful imagery as always, stunning piece. Congrats!
Poet Avatar
July 26, 2013 at 8:47 AM
Good to know this new form.Beautiful imagery here Nette.
Chircop Avatar
July 25, 2013 at 2:24 PM
I never tried this form Nette.You did a wonderful job with it.The vast vocabulary of enchantment is in your hands.I love the way you used the word sarong..original.Going tmfvs..you deserve it
Devnath  Avatar
July 25, 2013 at 9:56 AM
My poetess friend, I feel you have golden liquid ink hidden in you to depict beautiful images with excellent words. You have shown a fantastic magic here. Loved much. Always, bl
Tacito Avatar
July 25, 2013 at 9:33 AM
You are like a walking thesaurus filled with metaphors & serenity. This piece is just another example of that...
Madonsela Avatar
July 25, 2013 at 8:30 AM
Very dreamy, i was left gloomed with such joy and excitement . LOVE IT!!! *smiles* Ron
Ober Avatar
July 25, 2013 at 8:09 AM
Gorgeous! You have such an elegant style, Nette.
Kendrick Avatar
July 25, 2013 at 7:24 AM
Those repeating lines can be fun and easy but they can be hard to work with sometimes..Great job that you did ..It has good flow..Thanks for the visit..Sara
Thomas Avatar
July 24, 2013 at 9:27 PM
Wow!!!very lovely tapestry of words, amazing they fit naturally together, to make this beautiful poem. Really enjoyed reading nette, thankyou for sharing....cherie<3
Sivey Avatar
July 24, 2013 at 9:26 PM
YES! A new form, and I have to admit I have already written one in that form. I have to put this within my form listing that I have created for myself. I sure would like to see more of these wonderful forms Nette, you are a master of many forms my friend! This write is truly a phenomenal write! I really enjoyed reading this enlightening nighttime poem this evening! What a powerful piece, Great Work!!
Manassian Avatar
July 24, 2013 at 9:18 PM
Romantic, romantic, romantic!!!! YES! Your words are a prelude to wonders to come...beautiful imagery, Nette. I don't know how you think up of these things....While starts life evening's fine sarong...and THEN...to follow rules and meter....WOW! Lovely! C'est manifique!
Dietrich Avatar
July 24, 2013 at 3:26 PM
thanks for showing this French form, Nette. Stunning imagery as always.
Andresen Avatar
July 24, 2013 at 11:29 AM
- Another one of your beautiful poem ! - Thank you for the B-day blog yesterday Nette!! - I had a really nice day! - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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