Jan Allison Poet Pantoum

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Secret Love Pantoum - Emotive Write

I always think of you on the first of May
Recalling the New York Mining Disaster
What a tragedy it ruined my holiday
For whom the bell tolls expressed the broadcaster

Recalling the New York Mining Disaster
Stayin Alive would have been a miracle
For whom the bell tolls expressed the broadcaster
Immortality?  Guess I am cynical

Stayin Alive would have been a miracle
My secret love died that day; now I’m alone
Immortality?  Guess I am cynical
If I can’t have you I don’t want to go home

My secret love died that day; now I’m alone
Such a heartbreaker!  Forbidden love so right
If I can’t have you I don’t want to go home
You should be dancin’ right here with me tonight

Such a heartbreaker! Forbidden love so right
What a tragedy it ruined my holiday
You should be dancin’ right here with me tonight
I always think of you on the first of May

Beegees Titles used -  the Beegees  were prolific songwriters writing well over 900 songs for themselves and other artists

The first of May
New York Mining Disaster
Tragedy
Holiday
For whom the bell tolls
Stayin’ alive
Immortality
If I can’t have you
Secret love
Alone
Heartbreaker
Love so right
You should be dancin’

Musical Pantoum Contest Sponsored by Silent One
05~30~16

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Anisha Dutta June 22, 2016 at 8:28 AM Great write JAN. I am so late to visit. Any way I didn't miss it. Congrats n love Jan Allison June 22, 2016 at 5:44 PM Thanks Anisha - i too spend less and less time here at the moment:-( hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath June 15, 2016 at 2:33 PM Congrats on your beautiful win with this beautiful poem my lovely friend. A 7.Loved always, bl Jan Allison June 16, 2016 at 7:23 AM Thanks BL:-) hugs Jan xx

Lukas Ficklin June 15, 2016 at 12:00 AM Great write JAN... Congrats on your win :) Jan Allison June 15, 2016 at 6:54 AM Many thanks Lukas:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper June 14, 2016 at 9:42 PM Jan, congratulations on your win !! :-) Hugs Jan Allison June 15, 2016 at 6:54 AM Many thanks Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Karam Misra June 14, 2016 at 8:17 PM Excellent write, Jan. Congrats on your fabulous win. ~karam~ Jan Allison June 15, 2016 at 6:54 AM Many thanks Karam:-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi June 14, 2016 at 3:14 PM Congratulations, Jan and very thoughtful and well penned piece.... Jan Allison June 15, 2016 at 6:55 AM Thanks Janis:-) hugs Jan xx

Scott Thirtyseven May 31, 2016 at 8:45 AM A very clever, very enjoyable write. Best of luck in the contest. Jan Allison May 31, 2016 at 8:58 AM Thanks Scott:-) hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A May 31, 2016 at 3:24 AM enjoyed this truly Jan, good luck in the contest:)... ~Luv Linda~ Jan Allison May 31, 2016 at 5:56 AM Thanks Linda:-) hugs jan xx

Matthew Anish May 30, 2016 at 9:17 PM I liked the early Bee Gees better. Do you remember the one with the line "I just got to get a message to you"? I think you have made a fine use of the Malaysian form. Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison May 31, 2016 at 5:55 AM I too like the early stuff but Saturday Night fever was a fabulous soundtrack too - one of my fave tracks is called 'Ellan Vannin' its all about our little Island the Isle of Man where they spent their childhood years:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Ball May 30, 2016 at 8:46 PM Very well done. Good luck on the contest. God Bless, JB Jan Allison May 31, 2016 at 5:52 AM Many thanks Judy:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Hauser May 30, 2016 at 7:37 PM Wonderful job! Jan Allison May 30, 2016 at 7:39 PM Thanks Mike it was quite a challenge to write - if it hadn't been a public holiday here on our little Island and i was listening to the motorbike races on the radio and chilling wouldn't have tried this contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 30, 2016 at 6:57 PM wow, a job very well done, Dearie!!! I have one too. Hope to post it this week sometime. you chose a great group to represent titles of and a great theme.Soupmail. Jan Allison May 30, 2016 at 7:02 PM Thanks Andrea I await your soupie:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. May 30, 2016 at 12:00 PM Hi Jan, I really enjoyed reading your "Pantoum". You made it look easy. I did one called "Beauty Is In The Eye Of The Be Holder"and don't I will be doing another anytime soon. I'm sure you will be in the winner's circle with this write. Best of luck in the contest 7 :-) Alexis Jan Allison May 30, 2016 at 12:49 PM It really is quite a challenge - if I hadn't been on holiday I probably wouldn't have put the time and effort into writing it:-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian May 30, 2016 at 10:50 AM How Deep Is Your Love? One of my favs. This was beautiful, Jan. Very well written...so cleverly done. hugs, dear one. Good luck Jan Allison May 30, 2016 at 7:42 PM They wrote some awesome music Eileen - I love 'immortality' ... am having it played at my funeral lol. The Beegees spent some of their childhood on the Island in fact Robin had a house here up until his death in 2012 Jan Allison May 30, 2016 at 12:37 PM Thanks Eileen - there are so so many Bee Gees songs i could have used and several more stanzas could have been penned - may do another one on a happier theme:-) hugs jan xx

Frederic Parker May 30, 2016 at 10:01 AM nicely done..it looks like it was a lot of work..good luck in the contest..I believe it will do well Jan Allison May 30, 2016 at 10:12 AM Thanks Frederic it was a real challenge but as it's a bank holiday and I am at home listening to the pre TT races on the radio I thought I would use the time to write the poem:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight May 30, 2016 at 9:28 AM Love this, Jan! You used those song titles so well in your well-written, emotional Pantoum! I see a winner here! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison May 30, 2016 at 9:30 AM Thanks Sandra - I wasn't going to even write for the contest as I thought it was quite a challenge. the Bee gees were such prolific song writers I probably could have done more stanzas but am happy with the poem as it is:-) hugs Jan xx