Seas of Deception

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Written for "theres a darkness" sponsored by John Lawless (every line in this isnt meant to be taken literally, rather is metaphorical and has deeper meanings, so no hiccups.) 

 

If tormented truth is 
   the taste of her fire,
injecting her blood 
   with poisoned rain 
   in golden chalices, 
what is the color of 
eclipsed spheres
where there’s a 
desolated darkness 
that dwells through 
devious spirits 
to rise higher? 
Maybe there’s no 
heaven nor hell in 
the onyx fields of 
soulless stars,
where obsidian roses
bloom as signs of 
the devil’s immortality,
crooning doomed 
hymns to the 
honeycomb hues 
of raven's irises,
which reflect every 
bitter dream painted 
in strokes of thunder. 
But when dusk 
bleeds seas of deception,
sins stream through 
sinister shadows, 
slowly pulling innocence 
to a chamber of pitiless 
pins and heinous knives.
So watch her ascend 
as the metaphorical mistress 
of death and beyond,
she is no longer your 
heretic queen 
that serves you light,
that once breathed 
and walked through 
storms of toxic typhoons 
cloaked in 
summer serenades,
taming every hurricane 
with her crystal wings
that never tethered 
to an evil king of serpents.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



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Date: 2/17/2024 5:36:00 AM
Hope you're ok. Enjoy your (hopefully) restful break
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Date: 2/15/2024 3:13:00 PM
I love that she can divert as a heretic goddess then deceive as a metaphorical mistress of death and beyond, intriguing, Ink. She is much more than meets the eye. Perhaps she rises higher in the bigger picture. Loved it!
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Date: 2/15/2024 2:23:00 AM
Wow, what a poem, your creative writing skills never fails to amaze me. A wonderful conclusion dear Inky. Behold the ascension of the powerful mistress of death and beyond. No longer serving as the heretic queen of light, she tames hurricanes with her crystal wings. Let her guide you to the other side with unwavering strength and determination. Amazing...Hugs
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Date: 2/14/2024 5:25:00 PM
Woah,,, heavy stuff, Ink. "If tormented truth is her fire"... it must burn to give itself away...? Love? This was very forthright, and I have to say, beautiful. I am well. Always wishing you light and love <3
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Date: 2/14/2024 9:37:00 AM
Your words unfurl a lustrous tapestry of our dyed-in-the wool ambiguities involving passions good and evil. Our hopes and despairs coalesce and dissolve in equal measure. Brilliant! My best, Robert
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Date: 2/14/2024 8:49:00 AM
I hear the echo of a dire warning here in this poem. "she is no longer your heretic queen that serves you light, that once breathed and walked through storms of toxic typhoons cloaked in summer serenades, taming every hurricane with her crystal wings". When tolerance crosses limits one can turn into a cruel witch, dwelling in darkness. When one is engulfed by seas of deception, to any extent, one can go. The poem is so evocative and haunting with the use of powerful images and lofty diction., No doubt your poetic skills are brought to the fore. Dark poetry at its best, dear Empress!
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Date: 2/14/2024 5:28:00 AM
Dearest Ink Empress, I admire you for your stunning poem. Your words are like a haunting melody, traversing through the depths of emotion and thoughts that linger in the mind long after reading. Your imagery is incredibly evocative, creating a landscape of darkness and despair illuminated by flashes of brilliance. The juxtaposition of light and darkness, heaven and hell, innocence and sin, adds layers of complexity to your work, inviting, me, the reader to delve deeper into the mysteries you explore.I was particularly struck by your portrayal of the protagonist as a metaphorical mistress of death and beyond, a figure who defies conventional notions of good and evil, light and darkness. Your poem is a testament to the power of language to evoke raw emotion and challenge preconceived notions. It is the beauty of expression and the transformative power of art. Inspiring! - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 2/13/2024 12:08:00 PM
A deep and dark poem delving into themes of darkness, torment, and rebellion against societal expectations, creating a vivid and evocative portrayal of a character who defies conventional notions of righteousness and obedience.. It xplores the concept of eclipsed spheres and desolated darkness, painting a picture of a world where sinister spirits reign and where traditional notions of heaven and hell are challenged... The obsidian roses and raven's irises evoke a sense of gothic beauty tinged with danger and malevolence. .. The imagery of dusk bleeding seas of deception and sins streaming through sinister shadows creates a haunting atmosphere, suggesting a descent into moral ambiguity and moral decay. The chamber of pitiless pins and heinous knives symbolizes the harsh realities of existence and the cruelty of fate.... You write the best dark poetry...
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Date: 2/12/2024 11:15:00 AM
WOW!!! What a write/great ending. I really enjoyed reading this one. "Good Luck"  Have a blessed day writing away..........................
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Date: 2/12/2024 3:47:00 AM
A waltz with the devil? I would rather not. The evil one is full of lies. I Prefer God's Love.
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Date: 2/11/2024 6:12:00 PM
between light and darkness, man will walk all his life, this is a very convincing poem, with beautiful images, every word balance the "night", what a challenge, thank you poet
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Date: 2/11/2024 2:50:00 PM
Dear Ink, your gorgeous poem evokes a sense of curiosity to contemplate the origins of this occurrence. The vivid imagery you have crafted adds an exhilarating sense to the reading experience. The profound query of "What hue adorns eclipsed spheres..." prompts contemplation on the colors they might possess. In this context, a scene from the film Legally Blonde comes to mind, wherein his desire for Elle to channel her strengths towards endeavors.
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Date: 2/11/2024 12:47:00 PM
Darkness permeates this poem. I see it as an intro to one of my favorite crime shows. Good luck with it.
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Date: 2/11/2024 11:11:00 AM
No heaven or hell? The Devil as an insidious free range imp? GAAA! It's more than a fellow can bear. Seriously though, you shine whether you're writing on relationship angst, true love, or the pesky devil and his minions. Carry on, dear Ink
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Date: 2/11/2024 10:48:00 AM
I would think the darkness would be on the winners' list. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Your visit to my page was uplifting. Sara K
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Date: 2/11/2024 10:26:00 AM
So, she's no longer the good one. Makes me wonder how this all happened. The images you came up with make this exciting to read. Asking "What is the color of eclipsed spheres...," made me think about what color would they be. I'm thinking of a line in the film Legally Blonde during a car ride where Emmet says, he would like Elle to "Harness her power for good." So I'm thinking yellow. I guess I like seeing bad transformed into good. Continuous improvement not applicable to this perfect poem.
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Date: 2/11/2024 9:11:00 AM
Yes, very dark indeed. I enjoyed you made it a woman just because often darkness is a masculine association. My favorite part was about the soulless stars.
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Date: 2/11/2024 8:10:00 AM
Every poem you write, my friend, is worthy of praise. Well deserving of top wins and heartfelt accolades, for the reader dwells in your brilliant poetry, taking on the feelings you convey.---Maybe there’s no heaven nor hell in the onyx fields of soulless stars, where obsidian roses bloom as signs of the devil’s immortality----So watch her ascend as the metaphorical mistress of death and beyond, she is no longer your heretic queen ---And so much more, WOW! And A FAVE!!
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Date: 2/11/2024 7:49:00 AM
a waltz or dance with the devil through vivid imagery, alliteration and internal rhyme..it might be interesting for you to experiment with your line breaks and lengthen the lines, as it would have the effect of condensing the poems a bit and adding clarity, something to consider...?
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Ink Empress
Date: 2/11/2024 7:55:00 AM
Thanks dear charlotte, for your comment. I rather find it challenging to read long lines, this is a short poem, but i guess different people prefer formatting differently. Silent one keeps telling me the same thing but unfortunately i find it hard to arrange it as long lines because my brain prefers thin poems lol thanks again i hope u are doing well
Date: 2/11/2024 7:15:00 AM
I am indeed fascinated by your poetic ability Ink Empress! Your style is so very unique and begs contemplation! As others have expressed, I am remarkably impressed by your talent and skill!
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Date: 2/11/2024 6:20:00 AM
Woahh wowww!!What a magnificently knitted, powerful and dark piece with your signature style, my dear Ink! I'm absolutely awestruck by the artistic abilities that your heart possesses.This poem, has such a deep and meaningful essence which pierced right through my heart. Sometimes, this world may turn extremely cruel, where, our souls are no longer able to bleed stardust, rather, ravenous wings of fury rise, for, we refuse to be tamed by their evil blames and games..I can feel all those emotions
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Hiya Sharma
Date: 2/11/2024 6:22:00 AM
which you've woven here so intricately! Truly stunning, heartfelt and so wondrous.. "watch her ascend as the metaphorical mistress of death and beyond,she is no longer your heretic queen that serves you light", "If tormented truth is the taste of her fire" Goshh, love that! "that never tethered to an evil king of serpents" Yessss.. Also, your title 'seas of deception' is so intriguing and perfect.. Best wishes for the contest, you've nailed it! Sending love and light, always.
Date: 2/11/2024 6:00:00 AM
Mmmm the outer space element to this piece lingers on so gorgeously… Maybe there’s no heaven nor hell in the onyx fields of soulless stars,where obsidian roses bloom.. reflect every bitter dream painted in strokes of thunder… I love that line n how dark it gets.. taming every hurricane with her crystal wings that never tethered to an evil king of serpents..this piece carries enchanting weight throughout..stunning ending papi!!
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Date: 2/11/2024 5:53:00 AM
Another masterpiece .. don’t know how you do it .
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