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Screaming At the Sky

Screaming at the Sky
 
Mothers screaming mournfully at a deaf sky
holding their heads helplessly as they cry
pitiful tears for innocent, defenseless children slaughtered
in fatal cross fires, deadly drug wars
drive-by shootings, and cases of mistaken identity
on blood-splattered streets, senseless endless violence; but
who really gives a damn, only grief-stricken
mothers screaming mournfully at a deaf sky.


(Form – Enjambment posted as Verse – 8 lines with 7 words in each line.
The 1st line and the 8th line are the same)


10-21-2014


Contest:      8 Lines 7 words ~ First and Last Line Must be the Same
Sponsor:     Rick Parise
Placement:  2nd

Copyright © Pandita Sietesantos | Year Posted 2014

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Ann Foster Date: 10/17/2019 6:37:00 PM So powerful. so real... Excellent write. Ann Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 10/18/2019 12:54:00 PM Thank you so very much, dear Ann, for your visit and for honoring me with your high praises which mean a lot to me! Warmest regards and hugs. Pandita

Tim Peterson Date: 5/12/2018 3:11:00 PM Wonderfully heart wrenching. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 5/12/2018 5:15:00 PM Hi Tim, thank you for visiting and thank you for your kind complimentary words, my friend! Best wishes. Pandita

Line Gauthier Date: 2/10/2018 9:09:00 AM Powerful winner. Well done, Pandita. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 2/10/2018 9:13:00 AM Thank you my friend - thank you! Hugs. Pandita

April Walter Skyy Date: 8/22/2015 12:48:00 PM I really enjoyed reading this poem.I don't know to must about the different formats. I just write how I feel but.. I did try Blitz for the first time if you would like to check them out. "Eyes Can't Find" and "Stormy" and let me know what you think of them. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 8/22/2015 5:56:00 PM Hi April, thank you so very much for stopping by and for your thoughtful, heartfelt response to this piece. While it is challenging, it's always fun to try a new form so every now and then, I attempt a new one. I will definitely check out your work. Warmest regards. Pandita

Edlynn Nau Date: 8/16/2015 7:21:00 PM How could any person comment without using the word:POWERFUL! Love that you did it in this genre and captured so well the image of the lost children and screaming mothers. Real skill to write in this genre! It takes a lot of tugging at the words. This is a 7. Please do more of these! Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 8/18/2015 10:27:00 PM Hi Edlynn, thank you so very much for your wonderful continued support for my work! I greatly appreciate getting such insightful, heartfelt, feedback, compliments and high score from you. Warmest regards. Pandita

William Gray Date: 2/10/2015 10:51:00 AM A very powerful piece, of realist imagination. I loved this, thank you Pandita. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 2/11/2015 2:48:00 PM Thank you my friend. This is another piece that is special to me. I truly appreciate your kind comments and encouragement to keep it going! Kindest regards. Pandita.

Michael Miers Date: 2/3/2015 6:37:00 AM a short and brutal existence. an emotionally wringing piece. superb imagery and the grief it portrays is palpable. there's a lot of power here. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 2/3/2015 2:11:00 PM Michael, thank you for this powerful feedback. You just made my day, dear Poet! Warmest regards. Pandita

Joanmarie Peranteau Date: 12/14/2014 2:27:00 PM I know this pain, I know this action of "screaming mournfully at a deaf sky." The Image is so clearly conveyed by way of this write. Thank you for sharing this great piece. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 12/16/2014 7:57:00 PM Many thanks, dear friend for reading and complimenting this piece! Warmest regards, Pandita.

Goran Rahim Date: 11/11/2014 8:41:00 PM beautiful write, the image, the pain, and the scream were felt in this piece. you are amazing. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/11/2014 10:51:00 PM Thank you so very much, dear Goran, for your visit and for honoring me with your high praises which mean a lot to me! Warmest regards, Pandita

John Pettinger Date: 11/7/2014 2:35:00 PM I can feel the grief so it must be good Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/8/2014 7:51:00 AM Thank you, John for your visit and for complimenting this piece! It means a lot to me! Warmest regards. Pandita

Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/5/2014 3:46:00 PM Pandita, this is good graphic imagery against the senselessness of today's violence. BIG congrats. WIsh I would see more of you! Please visit me from time to time! Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/6/2014 6:23:00 AM Hi Andrea, thank you so very much for visiting and commenting on this piece! You will certainly be seeing more of me as I will be visiting you more often. Have a wonderful day, my friend! Pandita

Funom Makama Date: 11/4/2014 9:45:00 AM you filled my thoughts when I was logging in here and I couldn't wait to rush to your pages and guess what?????? As always, I am not disappointed. What a great piece here with astonishing lines. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/4/2014 12:19:00 PM Thank you my friend, you made my day with your thoughtful comments and superlative compliments! Thanks also for the encouragement which means a lot coming from a poet such as yourself! Warmest regards. Pandita

Faye Gibson Date: 11/3/2014 12:41:00 PM Congratulations, Pandita. This is a sadly true and powerful write. It deserved a high placement. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/3/2014 3:57:00 PM Hi Faye, thank you so very much for stopping by and for your thoughtful, heartfelt response to this piece. Warmest regards. Pandita

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 11/3/2014 10:21:00 AM I am so happy you did well with this poem that I love so much. Congratulations on your win Pandita Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/3/2014 3:59:00 PM Thank you so very much, Brenda for your continued encouragement and support! I appreciate the wonderful compliments. Pandita

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 11/3/2014 8:54:00 AM Brilliant write Pandita n a great message there my friend! Congrats on super win! Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/3/2014 4:01:00 PM Thank you kindly dear Dr. Upma, for your sweet compliments! Warmest regards. Pandita

S.Jagathsimhan Nair Date: 11/2/2014 11:07:00 PM Congrats on the big win, Pandita. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/3/2014 3:58:00 PM Many thanks, my friend, for your compliments and kind congratulations! Warmest regards. Pandita

Maurice Yvonne Date: 11/2/2014 9:32:00 PM Back to congratulate you on your win, yeah!! Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/3/2014 3:57:00 PM Thank you so very much, Maurice for your always encouraging compliments and comments! Have a wonderful week! Pandita

Sandra Haight Date: 11/2/2014 6:34:00 PM What a powerful poem, Pandita! So much emotion in so few words! Congratulations on your high win! Sandra Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/2/2014 7:41:00 PM Hi Sandra, thank you so very much for stopping by and for your thoughtful, heartfelt response to this piece. Warmest regards. Pandita

Barbara Gorelick Date: 11/2/2014 6:08:00 PM A deaf sky..what a powerful phase. Congrats on your big win. BG Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/2/2014 7:39:00 PM Thank you so very much, BG for your always encouraging compliments and comments! Have a wonderful week! Pandita

Debbie Guzzi Date: 11/2/2014 2:21:00 PM Excellent message flows seamlessly! Congrad's Light & Love Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/2/2014 4:16:00 PM Thank you so very much, Debbie for your continued encouragement and support! I appreciate the wonderful compliments. Pandita

Jan Allison Date: 11/2/2014 2:14:00 PM so glad to see this in the winners list - such a powerful write - many congrats Pandita:-) Hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/2/2014 4:18:00 PM Thank you kindly dear Jan for your compliments! Warmest regards. Pandita

Sara Kendrick Date: 11/2/2014 2:04:00 PM Emotive and expressive work about a great topic..Way to go with this winner..Congrats..Sara Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 11/2/2014 4:15:00 PM Many thanks, Sara, for your compliments and congratulations! Warmest regards. Pandita

Millicent Mashatola Date: 10/29/2014 2:39:00 AM so touching...indeed mother a unite soldier. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 10/31/2014 3:39:00 PM Hi Milly, thank you for stopping by with wonderful compliments, my friend! This type of violence is an unfortunate reality of our times and sadly too many people have become too complacent about these atrocities. Warmest regards. Pandita

Maurice Yvonne Date: 10/28/2014 10:04:00 AM True, true, true, I never take for granted the days we have. Unfortunately it is those that deserve so much more that lead these lives. In the capture of poverty and little hope and then this. A brilliant write Pandita. I will fav this, make sure I don't forget. Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 10/28/2014 12:59:00 PM Thank you, Maurice, for choosing to read this piece and for your wonderful compliments! As the saying goes, "No man is an island... any man's death diminishes me, because I am involved in mankind." Therefore, we are all affected by tragedy and violence! I also thank you for making this one of you favs! Warmest regards. Pandita

Paul Callus Date: 10/26/2014 6:13:00 AM This is very touching Pandita; situations like these become everyday facts and people start taking them for granted. (I know that Mexico has a big problem.) I pity the innocent victims, most of all, and those heartbroken relatives they leave behind. Will a solution ever be found?! {I always wondered how you came to have an Indian name...now I know:)} /x/ paul Login to Reply Pandita Sietesantos Date: 10/26/2014 6:06:00 PM Paul, thank you for honoring me with your wonderful compliments, my friend! This type of violence is an unfortunate reality of our times and sadly people have become too complacent about these atrocities. Warmest regards. Pandita "

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