Schism

You took innocence
sow seeds in maturing brain
create illusions
in the name of the father...
a lattice for prejudice.

© Harry J Horsman 2012

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Bl Devnath

Date: 10/19/2012 8:29:00 AM

"In the name of father" many things are done and divide people. Reality is on boom. Lovely done, my friend.

Modupe Sefunmi

Date: 10/19/2012 2:39:00 AM

Lovely write!

Jonas L. Rozario

Date: 10/8/2012 9:31:00 AM

This is very deep...I dig it. Should do well if written for a contest...thanks for stopping by my page!!!

Mapaseka Prudence Tshuwa

Date: 10/8/2012 6:30:00 AM

we change the world with words, cheers to good writing.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/7/2012 4:52:00 PM

Yes, sometimes religion can cause problems where a true belief in God and His Son Jesus don't cause that problem because it is all about true love or agape love...A love that is hard for mankind to understand or get a grasp around but a love that we should all strive for in our lives..Thanks for stopping by..Your review of my work is always uplifting..Sara

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/7/2012 2:30:00 PM

Harry, "powerful lines" in your poem, very well written - Always intresant to read your poems Harry. Have a good and creativ week. - oxox love Anne-Lise :)

Jack Horne

Date: 10/7/2012 12:32:00 PM

clever and thought provoking write, Harry

Jack Ellison

Date: 10/7/2012 8:56:00 AM

Very interesting and thought provoking, Harry... cheers, Jack

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 10/7/2012 3:16:00 AM

Profound words to ponder. Seems everyone has gone tanka crazy. . . But l adore them.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/6/2012 11:41:00 PM

hmm, no new one. Let me know which clerihew is not entered in my contest and I will check it out!!!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 10/6/2012 5:21:00 PM

harry this time you CAN make it more personal [subjective] and you CAN use metaphor, simile, personification etc...the last 2 lines should really show the emotions of the poet Light & Love kemosabe

Terry O'Leary

Date: 10/6/2012 2:50:00 PM

Oooo... very nice Harry, I like it... Terry (% thanks for your super kind comment!)...

Victoria Anderson-Throop

Date: 10/6/2012 2:00:00 PM

fine word choice... leaves the interpretation open to the reader...about religion? about family? It seems to me about religion.but perhaps I take the word schism too literally... Your work is intriguing and pleasantly discomforting..(like eating spicy food!) Victoria

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 10/6/2012 9:18:00 AM

ASTOUNDING LINES HARRY LUV .. DEEP AND PENETRATING .. SVENGALI AT WORK WITH THIS POETIC ART MASTERPECE MY FRIEND ..

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 10/6/2012 6:25:00 AM

Interesting thoughts. Lovely. tfs

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/6/2012 2:52:00 AM

wow, something to ponder deeply about, harry... enjoyed !...all the best and huggs!:)

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 10/6/2012 12:54:00 AM

Love it. Always, Laura

Lucilla Carrillo

Date: 10/5/2012 5:01:00 PM

Good write Harry. In The name of the Father. Thanks for sharing. Lucy

Sandy Ivy D

Date: 10/5/2012 4:49:00 PM

nice Sandy

David Williams

Date: 10/5/2012 4:17:00 PM

Harry there are memories of a sad youth in this for me, I reallly like it...David

Joe Maverick

Date: 10/5/2012 1:36:00 PM

This is a quite well presented write Harry, Intruiging and working well on its different levels .."

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/5/2012 12:52:00 PM

hmmm, yes, I am with Mandy here on this one. It's one to really think on. But the title seems to say it all!! WEll, let me find one of your oldies now!!