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Saved By Her Love

I have feelings of supreme loneliness and hate I can’t imagine being without them now Heartache and extreme pain I know as of late The happenings of forlorn I feel exactly how I’m a product of being worse and of falling apart Stepping around the hurt and the terror I’m alone seemingly timeless in my heart A state of horrible being as looking in a mirror Graciously she enters into my disheveled life The love she brings is greater than I’ve ever seen Her heart comes to me and finally ends my strife My heart is filled more than there’s ever been Her love for me is more than what’s really shown Greater than any passion that has ever been known Russell Sivey Form: English Sonnet Entrant into Debbie Guzzi's "Debbie and Cyndi's Sonneteers" contest 4/13/2012

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Date: 5/4/2012 5:18:00 AM
A belated congratulations on your win in the "Sonneteers" contest Russell. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/30/2012 3:47:00 AM
delighted by your rhyme that leaves me feeling serene and peaceful, russell... you take short and long forms to new heights.. congrats with huggs...great pacing!
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Date: 4/27/2012 10:14:00 PM
Russell, such a loving write. I hope you paased this poem to said lady! She is sure to love this tribute. Congratulations on your win in our contest. Smiles from CYndi
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Date: 4/27/2012 8:39:00 AM
Fabulous Russell!!...Congratulations on your win...how creative you are...Well Done, big hugs,love~deb
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Date: 4/15/2012 8:30:00 AM
Thank you Russ for accepting my 5 lines.You have done a good job using this forms end rhyme..think about making the syllable count more regular [it's usually 10 BUT 12 is done too!] Read your verse outloud to see if you think the rhythm needs tweaking. Try to remove the [I] in at least line 1..perhaps start with the more reader invoving [Feeling of supreme loneliness and hate] which is 10 ;)..you are so kind to me I want to be of help to you too! Light & Love
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Date: 4/13/2012 6:41:00 PM
Great write.
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