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*3rd Place*
Sartorial Self Portrait
Poetic Form: Sonnet
Contest Judged: 2024 June 20
Sponsored by: Jaymee Thomas
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Ex Hotelier hangs I, We've Vacancies, closet not quite empty, merely absentees, the clothes that sort out--hang like memories, of guests gone--front door, yards from Seven Seas.
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Spaced air fills--their heart and soul ... 'minds me best, start whiles fresh--ere end, 'familiars' chose. Clothes: suits, trousers, waistcoats: here it's a vest, I 'un' prefix: changed old address to close.
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Three-piece suit, daily polished shoes; discharged. Unfamiliars stayed, changed weather, scenes, locale, lifestyle, minus people emerged, keds, heaps tees, and shorts; comeback kid hang dreams.
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Proper, primed, and polished fine ... 'yesterdays, wink naught to lose those bright golden hue days.
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Date: 7/21/2024 9:31:00 PM
'clothes hang out like memories', 'retired proper, primed and polished' lovely. so much effort in this amazing poem. congratulations dear poet. Happy writing.
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Hilo Poet
Date: 7/23/2024 11:27:00 PM
Thank you, thriveni, most good of your sharing, and your insights, Aloha William
Date: 7/20/2024 3:27:00 PM
Congratulations Hilo on your win.
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Hilo Poet
Date: 7/20/2024 3:44:00 PM
Thank you for the comeback, it keeps on me'toes and off me'bed. Aloha William
Date: 7/20/2024 7:48:00 AM
Nice! Originality 10! Congratulations!! Xo
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Hilo Poet
Date: 7/20/2024 7:49:00 PM
Ah, Bo Derek, how'd they spell NV--anywho, GLAD you're still here, Aloha William
Date: 7/20/2024 6:54:00 AM
Congratulations on placing third in my contest! It was certainly first place for stark originality :) I genuinely appreciate such a different take on the prompt, and one that truly tells a visual and textual story in a way that I have never seen. Thank you for sharing your art.
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Hilo Poet
Date: 7/20/2024 7:20:00 AM
Mahalo, Jaymee, I had fun and thanks for noting the spin, and placement, Aloha William
Date: 6/23/2024 5:20:00 AM
Love the depiction of the remnants of a bygone period being hangers in a closet. Which means a change in environs and style even. It's lovely to reflect on how fast time flies and the mixed nostalgia for fire days that flow so quickly. The memories are what makes it so special. Lovely written Dear Hilo.
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Hilo Poet
Date: 6/23/2024 7:05:00 AM
After reading your reminiscent point, I thought to accentuate it with a little 'Hawaiian Style: Mahalo for your great endearing note of inspiration--hope there's justice there, Aloha William

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