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Sapphic

Holding Adonis In another place and another lifetime, gazing into eyes that gazed back with passion. Kissing you, loving you and how you touched me. Summer’s moon watched us. Are you in the world, my sweet lover? Are you? Have you gone the way of the gods before you? Blessed was I to hold you so closely. I was holding Adonis. For the "Guzzically Inspired Poetry Contest" Sponsored by Craig Cornish

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Date: 4/1/2012 2:27:00 PM
Congratulations on a well written poem and the credit it deserves.
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Date: 4/1/2012 12:50:00 PM
I am very happy to send you this congratulations on your well deserved win in Craig's "Guzzically Inspired" contest Andrea. Love, Carol
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Date: 3/31/2012 7:18:00 PM
Makes one feel as if we were standing under the summer sky, speaking to the stars! Lovely and romantic!!! Congrats!!!
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Date: 3/31/2012 4:25:00 PM
I knew this was a winner! Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 3/11/2012 6:03:00 PM
This one goes to my FAVs!!
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Date: 3/9/2012 9:54:00 AM
Good one Andrea and good for trying that form. made me smile. love phyl
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Date: 3/5/2012 2:26:00 PM
Truly beautiful piece, my friend. A sure winner. Many congrats on your wins, of course : )
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Date: 3/4/2012 2:51:00 AM
it'a about how the poetic scene flowed in a seamless manner, andie... enjoyed the allusion to adonis.. win it!..:) huggs!
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Date: 3/4/2012 2:00:00 AM
I like this verse. It makes my imagination spring to life. Good write.- JH
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Date: 3/3/2012 10:37:00 AM
lovely lines Andrea.. this was a true challenge for me ..only wrote four lines to enter contest.... form is super challenging but u did a wonderful work of poetic art liv..good luck in contest luv..
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Date: 3/3/2012 6:17:00 AM
what a beautiful poem. xxoo
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Date: 3/3/2012 6:12:00 AM
Ooo ive come over all swoony Andy.. awesome poem xxx
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Date: 3/3/2012 2:01:00 AM
:-) Soup mail!
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Date: 3/3/2012 1:50:00 AM
I TOLD YOU TO STOP WRITING ABOUT ME w/o my permission!!!~ :) ha! I hardly remember this story taking place!~ I musta been hit over the head with a golf NINE IRON. YES! U are correct that a NINE Is golf club used for short shots often in the rough stuff! NOT really the detailed description you gave...but STILL CORRECT! ......Allllllmost....tho' there is a nine iron club, and u may interpret my poem that way. I wrote it about a chick I know that sleeps will a Nine Milometer Pistol! ...close:) ha!
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Date: 3/3/2012 1:02:00 AM
I am smiling here not after reading your poem but the Captcha is saying BORE!This is a beautiful emotional poem.Though I know you can write any type of poem without being yourself in such a mental setup.Loved it Andrea.Best wishes.
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Date: 3/2/2012 9:19:00 PM
Oh, Andrea, this is beautiful and so emotive. I especially loved the moon watching.... ummm... could be me, hon, but is the syllable count 11 for your third line? This deserves top spot, just want to ensure some wee thing doesn't get in the way of that. It's just after 11 here. Thunderstorm!!! This is weird for March! Girl could wake up any minute. Hoping to read and comment for a bit. You were my first drop by. So glad I read this! Spicey!!! :-) Cyndi
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Date: 3/2/2012 6:43:00 PM
love that title, Holding Adonis. opens up horizons. good luck on the contest Andrea
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Date: 3/2/2012 6:11:00 PM
ANdrea, he he... I thought this contest had to do with Debbie... this is a great poem... good luck in the contest~have a nice one ;-)* PD
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Date: 3/2/2012 5:09:00 PM
This is truly a lovely write, thoroughly enjoyed sharing it, Blessings, Bren
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Date: 3/2/2012 4:34:00 PM
guess i miss out too Andrea, but i love the poem, and i can dream. harry
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Date: 3/2/2012 2:35:00 PM
Great one..Reads like a winner..Enjoyed..I will have to check out this Sapphic Stanza..Thanks for stopping by..Sara
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Date: 3/2/2012 1:56:00 PM
Oh to be an Adonis , mabe not lol , Hugs and best wishes Andrea , Declan xxx
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Date: 3/2/2012 1:53:00 PM
Another lifetime -?-?- OK. (the cat has 9 life) Well,well.... I love this one Andrea - a completed poem - luck in contest!!! - oxox love Anne-Lise
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Date: 3/2/2012 1:24:00 PM
Wow, you tried and successfully completed this contest! I really enjoyed this write that you have completed for us to enjoy! I loved the way you formulated the lines on the this one, great job Andrea! Two lines in particular that I thought were done very well have to be, "Blessed was I to hold you closely. I was, holding Adonis" that is a fantastic two lines right there my friend! I love your write! Great Work!!
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Date: 3/2/2012 10:39:00 AM
Lucky you! What am I saying? ... Lucky Adonis!!! Terrific write for this very challenging contest. I will come back and see how it does in the ranking. I am afraid this challenge is far too great for the likes of me. Joe
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