Premiere Contest WinnerSandalwood

They are playing that song again
The one that reminds me of you
It began to rewind as I turned up the dial
from a place long ago that's been bleached for awhile

"California Dreamin" sifts through the air
like the sandalwood incense, that used to be there.

       "All the leaves are brown, and the sky is grey
        I've been for a walk ....On a winter's day"

There's an image I've kept, still tucked within my mind
It used to fill me with envy, until it reckoned with time 
You at twenty-one, wild and beautiful in a way that I could never be
Perched upon your back-porch steps, beneath the russet trees
Soaking up the morning sun, stroking your guitar

I only knew you then, as that 'hippie" type of girl
The one who lived next-door that year
Your candles shimmering, bangles glimmering
A tangle of strawberry hair, that flirted with the wind 
Childlike and fair, devil-may-care, long gypsy skirts,
and a peasant look that took one's breath

The faint scent of sandalwood, swept into my yard
from your wide-opened windows, wide-opened doors,
while I was wrangling a baby on my hip
or hanging bleached-white sheets onto a clothesline

I had often wished I were you, ... flitting about, barefoot in the morning air
But, I was teaching my toddler to tie his shoes
Both of us twenty-one, ... on two sides of a cedar fence, ...
a thousand light years apart

    "All the leaves are brown, and the sky is grey
        I've been for a walk,...on this winter's day
          All the leaves are brown.  Songs have come and gone
               Seasons had their songs, but what became of you?"
           
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Misra Avatar
July 19, 2016 at 5:51 AM
Very deep and beautiful, Carrie. Congrats on your top spot. ~karam~
Kimathi Avatar
July 11, 2016 at 8:25 AM
Hi Carrie. Congrats for your well, deserved first placement with this awesome piece!! ;-)
A  Avatar
July 10, 2016 at 12:01 PM
Carrie, this is one of the first well deserved wins in "llsc" I'm amazed and happy for you. Skat
Carber Avatar
July 10, 2016 at 10:23 AM
This is a lovely, wistful poem Carrie--and it is a strong poem because you manage to avoid both regret and resignation, which is not an easy thing. Its intrinsic courage reminds me of John Clare's magnificent poem, 'I Am', which he wrote after losing fame, fortune, family and freedom and was committed to Bedlam in 19th century England. There's aren't many poems I could fall in love with, but this one...sure.
Godwin Avatar
July 9, 2016 at 9:39 PM
Oh, my gosh, Carrie, I am going to cry and can't define specifically why other than we all have these emotions for past someones and wonderment that go with it. As an Army brat, I may have more than my share. You transported me, not to a specific person or place, but to a feel I've never been able to describe as precise and creatively as you did. A bittersweet Fav ... CayCay
Marschall Avatar
July 9, 2016 at 5:37 PM
Carrie, A brilliant poem - well done! Congratulations on your win!
Haight Avatar
July 9, 2016 at 4:34 PM
Beautiful poem, Carrie. Congratulations on your Trophy First Place win in Laura's Premiere contest! Hugs, Sandra
Scars Avatar
July 9, 2016 at 2:49 PM
Carrie, I knew this was a winner the second I read it! It's beautiful and perfectly penned...congrats on your top placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo
Scars Avatar
July 9, 2016 at 3:03 PM
plus I love that song....:)-luloo
Merryman Avatar
July 16, 2015 at 8:48 PM
A beautiful, nostalgic piece, Carrie! Love it! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim
Marcum Wong Avatar
July 16, 2015 at 5:56 PM
Oh Carrie, the sentiment in this poem is so heart warming it made me misty eyed. I once had a friend I admired like that. She lived in back of my little one bedroom with her husband. She was a fashion model, unusually short for a model, but filled with the New York glamour from whence she came. She was so genuine and kind. I have always remembered her. I loved your poem! Congratulations on your win! 7
Lamoureux Avatar
July 15, 2015 at 9:11 AM
My absolute favourite so far! Congratulations Carrie.
A  Avatar
July 14, 2015 at 11:42 PM
Carrie, congratulations on your win. **SKAT**
Carter Avatar
July 14, 2015 at 11:20 PM
I love your poem it certainly takes me back and makes me think of all the women I had wished I could be like : )
Deschler Avatar
July 14, 2015 at 9:46 PM
I love the wonderful, nostalgic quality of this poem. It makes me wonder what happened to the friends I've lost contact with... Congrats on the win, Carrie!
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 3, 2014 at 12:41 AM
Carrie, this lovely nostalgic piece transported me back in time when I was surrounded by the hippie generation that began the movements to take better care of our land and ourselves. Mahalo
Loving Iii Avatar
September 24, 2013 at 2:08 PM
i do not like insence but if its sandalwood burn it. congradulations on your first place win. you go girl.
A   Avatar
September 22, 2013 at 8:18 PM
as always...lovely win..Linda
Jones Avatar
September 21, 2013 at 11:50 AM
Different paths in life and both beautiful...like your poem...Congratulations Carrie on yet another awesome win
Kendrick Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 1:22 PM
Knew it was a winner...Congrats..Sara
Jones Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 11:26 AM
Oh Carrie! I feel like you wrote this for me, thank you. So sweet to read your consistently marvelous work, Rock on, Carrie, you're poetry grooves me more than I can express.
Roberts Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 10:10 AM
Lovely poem and a deserved first place ...Seren
Adams Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 9:03 AM
i am also honored to share this spot with you, your poem is well crafted and beautiful...your hippie girl comes to life! Love this one, congrats on your awesome win :)
Hamilton Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 8:15 AM
well done on a first rate win Carrie well deserved congrats Shadow x smile
Lamoureux Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 7:47 AM
Wow, I love the mood and emotion you have created. I also like the nostalgic feel. Congratulations!
Gasun Avatar
September 20, 2013 at 5:55 AM
A stunning & excellent write my dear fried Carrie! I love it. Big hearty congratulations on your well-deserved super win! (I'll also include your other recent super wins). Cheers and super big hugs! Thank you so much for sharing! love lots, Leonora
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