Sandalwood Premiere Contest Winner

They are playing that song again
The one that reminds me of you
It began to rewind as I turned up the dial
from a place long ago that's been bleached for awhile

"California Dreamin" sifts through the air
like the sandalwood incense, that used to be there.

       "All the leaves are brown, and the sky is grey
        I've been for a walk ....On a winter's day"

There's an image I've kept, still tucked within my mind
It used to fill me with envy, until it reckoned with time 
You at twenty-one, wild and beautiful in a way that I could never be
Perched upon your back-porch steps, beneath the russet trees
Soaking up the morning sun, stroking your guitar

I only knew you then, as that 'hippie" type of girl
The one who lived next-door that year
Your candles shimmering, bangles glimmering
A tangle of strawberry hair, that flirted with the wind 
Childlike and fair, devil-may-care, long gypsy skirts,
and a peasant look that took one's breath

The faint scent of sandalwood, swept into my yard
from your wide-opened windows, wide-opened doors,
while I was wrangling a baby on my hip
or hanging bleached-white sheets onto a clothesline

I had often wished I were you, ... flitting about, barefoot in the morning air
But, I was teaching my toddler to tie his shoes
Both of us twenty-one, ... on two sides of a cedar fence, ...
a thousand light years apart

    "All the leaves are brown, and the sky is grey
        I've been for a walk,...on this winter's day
          All the leaves are brown.  Songs have come and gone
               Seasons had their songs, but what became of you?"
           
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Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 7/19/2016 5:51:00 AM
Very deep and beautiful, Carrie. Congrats on your top spot. ~karam~
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Date: 7/11/2016 8:25:00 AM
Hi Carrie. Congrats for your well, deserved first placement with this awesome piece!! ;-)
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Date: 7/10/2016 12:01:00 PM
Carrie, this is one of the first well deserved wins in "llsc" I'm amazed and happy for you. Skat
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Date: 7/10/2016 10:23:00 AM
This is a lovely, wistful poem Carrie--and it is a strong poem because you manage to avoid both regret and resignation, which is not an easy thing. Its intrinsic courage reminds me of John Clare's magnificent poem, 'I Am', which he wrote after losing fame, fortune, family and freedom and was committed to Bedlam in 19th century England. There's aren't many poems I could fall in love with, but this one...sure.
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Date: 7/9/2016 9:39:00 PM
Oh, my gosh, Carrie, I am going to cry and can't define specifically why other than we all have these emotions for past someones and wonderment that go with it. As an Army brat, I may have more than my share. You transported me, not to a specific person or place, but to a feel I've never been able to describe as precise and creatively as you did. A bittersweet Fav ... CayCay
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Date: 7/9/2016 5:37:00 PM
Carrie, A brilliant poem - well done! Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 7/9/2016 4:34:00 PM
Beautiful poem, Carrie. Congratulations on your Trophy First Place win in Laura's Premiere contest! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 7/9/2016 2:49:00 PM
Carrie, I knew this was a winner the second I read it! It's beautiful and perfectly penned...congrats on your top placement and thank you for being a part of my contest :)-luloo
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Date: 7/9/2016 3:03:00 PM
plus I love that song....:)-luloo
Date: 7/16/2015 8:48:00 PM
A beautiful, nostalgic piece, Carrie! Love it! Congrats on your win! Love, Kim
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Date: 7/16/2015 5:56:00 PM
Oh Carrie, the sentiment in this poem is so heart warming it made me misty eyed. I once had a friend I admired like that. She lived in back of my little one bedroom with her husband. She was a fashion model, unusually short for a model, but filled with the New York glamour from whence she came. She was so genuine and kind. I have always remembered her. I loved your poem! Congratulations on your win! 7
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Date: 7/15/2015 9:11:00 AM
My absolute favourite so far! Congratulations Carrie.
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Date: 7/14/2015 11:42:00 PM
Carrie, congratulations on your win. **SKAT**
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Date: 7/14/2015 11:20:00 PM
I love your poem it certainly takes me back and makes me think of all the women I had wished I could be like : )
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Date: 7/14/2015 9:46:00 PM
I love the wonderful, nostalgic quality of this poem. It makes me wonder what happened to the friends I've lost contact with... Congrats on the win, Carrie!
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Date: 6/3/2014 12:41:00 AM
Carrie, this lovely nostalgic piece transported me back in time when I was surrounded by the hippie generation that began the movements to take better care of our land and ourselves. Mahalo
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Date: 9/24/2013 2:08:00 PM
i do not like insence but if its sandalwood burn it. congradulations on your first place win. you go girl.
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Date: 9/22/2013 8:18:00 PM
as always...lovely win..Linda
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Date: 9/21/2013 11:50:00 AM
Different paths in life and both beautiful...like your poem...Congratulations Carrie on yet another awesome win
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Date: 9/20/2013 1:22:00 PM
Knew it was a winner...Congrats..Sara
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Date: 9/20/2013 11:26:00 AM
Oh Carrie! I feel like you wrote this for me, thank you. So sweet to read your consistently marvelous work, Rock on, Carrie, you're poetry grooves me more than I can express.
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Date: 9/20/2013 10:10:00 AM
Lovely poem and a deserved first place ...Seren
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Date: 9/20/2013 9:03:00 AM
i am also honored to share this spot with you, your poem is well crafted and beautiful...your hippie girl comes to life! Love this one, congrats on your awesome win :)
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Date: 9/20/2013 8:15:00 AM
well done on a first rate win Carrie well deserved congrats Shadow x smile
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Date: 9/20/2013 7:47:00 AM
Wow, I love the mood and emotion you have created. I also like the nostalgic feel. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/20/2013 5:55:00 AM
A stunning & excellent write my dear fried Carrie! I love it. Big hearty congratulations on your well-deserved super win! (I'll also include your other recent super wins). Cheers and super big hugs! Thank you so much for sharing! love lots, Leonora
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