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Seven cities sat* silently in the sandstorm** Waiting as the wind whipped around wickedly** Dun walls draped with dirt and dust** And the darkened sun desperately seeking a dim scenery* But as the unsecured boards were battered and broken about Clapping clappers clipping** the next scene The humans huddle in the hovels hiding and hidden** From the farce of the ferocious furor, full of fear** But then, as suddenly as it started, it subsides** As silence settles** and the sand sifts** down Down to the ground and gravel And carefully eyes peek out of slits and keyholes Seeing the first rays slice through the haze Defining from pastel to watercolor to crisp bristle brush Even if the voice of the cities are still hush* There is a stirring of life Of hope In the end of stormy strife*** *personification **alliteration ***metaphor

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Date: 10/5/2014 3:49:00 PM
Hello new poet friend! Thank you so much for your entry. [clapper is onomatopoeia as well] Congrad's on your win please do enter my next contest. Light & Love
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Date: 10/5/2014 11:30:00 AM
Congrats on a worthy and deserved win, Daniel! Captivating imagery and great alliteration. Very much enjoyed. // paul
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Date: 10/5/2014 9:41:00 AM
wowow!!! love the end of this, hope!!! :) good flow and descriptions! kudos!
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Date: 10/4/2014 5:47:00 PM
Great piece Daniel, captured my heart and mind 'til the end. Congrats on your win... HSK AlKendi
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Date: 10/4/2014 10:35:00 AM
Wonderful write here Daniel ! Was rather a tough contest n u scored real high! Big congrats!
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Date: 10/4/2014 10:06:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Daniel. You have done an amazing job on this challenge.
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Date: 10/4/2014 9:54:00 AM
Your descriptions are so outstanding! Wonderful example of all the challenges Debbie proposed! Congrats to you !
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Date: 10/4/2014 9:39:00 AM
Astounding imagery, congrats on the win, Daniel
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Date: 9/25/2014 9:32:00 AM
This is well written, I hope you do well.
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Date: 9/24/2014 8:32:00 AM
Little help new friend line 1 Seven cities sat* [this may be used as an example of personification (yes it is also alliteration)- use 1*] line 2 use this one for alliteration use ** last line [In the end of stormy strife] is metaphor use 3 *** on the bottom of the verse put * personification ** alliteration ***metaphor [you needed to note 3 poetic devices used in the verse for this contest] Light & Love
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Date: 9/24/2014 9:48:00 PM
Thanking thee kindly! Daniel
Date: 9/23/2014 12:54:00 AM
Wow! What a sandstorm. Great imagery. I can't believe I'm the first to comment on this poem. Well written, my friend in poetry. :)
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