Samoom

Seven cities sat* silently in the sandstorm**
Waiting as the wind whipped around wickedly**
Dun walls draped with dirt and dust**
And the darkened sun desperately seeking a dim scenery*

But as the unsecured boards were battered and broken about
Clapping clappers clipping** the next scene
The humans huddle in the hovels hiding and hidden**
From the farce of the ferocious furor, full of fear**

But then, as suddenly as it started, it subsides**
As silence settles** and the sand sifts** down
Down to the ground and gravel
And carefully eyes peek out of slits and keyholes

Seeing the first rays slice through the haze
Defining from pastel to watercolor to crisp bristle brush
Even if the voice of the cities are still hush*
There is a stirring of life
Of hope
In the end of stormy strife***

*personification
**alliteration
***metaphor
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Guzzi Avatar
October 5, 2014 at 3:49 PM
Hello new poet friend! Thank you so much for your entry. [clapper is onomatopoeia as well] Congrad's on your win please do enter my next contest. Light & Love
Callus Avatar
October 5, 2014 at 11:30 AM
Congrats on a worthy and deserved win, Daniel! Captivating imagery and great alliteration. Very much enjoyed. // paul
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
October 5, 2014 at 9:41 AM
wowow!!! love the end of this, hope!!! :) good flow and descriptions! kudos!
Alkendi Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 5:47 PM
Great piece Daniel, captured my heart and mind 'til the end. Congrats on your win... HSK AlKendi
A. Sharma Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 10:35 AM
Wonderful write here Daniel ! Was rather a tough contest n u scored real high! Big congrats!
Meier-Hans Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 10:06 AM
Congratulations on your win Daniel. You have done an amazing job on this challenge.
Richards Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 9:54 AM
Your descriptions are so outstanding! Wonderful example of all the challenges Debbie proposed! Congrats to you !
Mehta Avatar
October 4, 2014 at 9:39 AM
Astounding imagery, congrats on the win, Daniel
Lamoureux Avatar
September 25, 2014 at 9:32 AM
This is well written, I hope you do well.
Guzzi Avatar
September 24, 2014 at 8:32 AM
Little help new friend line 1 Seven cities sat* [this may be used as an example of personification (yes it is also alliteration)- use 1*] line 2 use this one for alliteration use ** last line [In the end of stormy strife] is metaphor use 3 *** on the bottom of the verse put * personification ** alliteration ***metaphor [you needed to note 3 poetic devices used in the verse for this contest] Light & Love
Human Avatar
September 24, 2014 at 9:48 PM
Thanking thee kindly! Daniel
Gifford Avatar
September 23, 2014 at 12:54 AM
Wow! What a sandstorm. Great imagery. I can't believe I'm the first to comment on this poem. Well written, my friend in poetry. :)
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