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Same old dream

as the world wakes
to make, and take and break 
as the light draws near
a sneering voice in my ear says 
wake, you have your part to take
you have your time to make and break
to sleep to dream 
to make mistakes
another way
another day
To lose your hair
to change your face
to work for a while 
to earn your place
to dance at parties
to sing and laugh
to have quiet times
and long candlelit baths
to find true love and lose it again
to see see death and violence
too profound to explain
to hope or to pray
to leave or to stay
to travel, to see
what this world contains
And each morning the world awakes
repeats its warning
to make, and take and break 
as the light draws near
a sneering voice in my ear says 
wake, we have your bones to break
Sun creaks insidiously across my floor
Cars car by outside
and my bladder is sore

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 10/17/2018 10:26:00 AM
Wow! You've captured the angst of life perfectly. As we get older, remember, "go" when ever you have the chance to ;P
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Date: 10/14/2018 3:59:00 PM
I love it that you hear the sneering voice in the morning. I do too. It is nice to think we have time for long candelit baths and to find true love. This is a terrific poem. Easy to read, and fast-paced. Welcome to PoetrySoup. You have found some of your new best friends.
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Greig Turnbull
Date: 10/15/2018 12:23:00 AM
Hi Caren, I'm over the moon with your comment! Thank you so much. I'm new to this so the feedback is fantastic. That poem is something I tell myself when everything feels like a struggle. I'm not technically good and don't know much about form etc. I just love words and images. I'm looking forward to reading your work when I get home......Bacon Boy intrigues!
Date: 10/13/2018 5:16:00 PM
Hello Greig and welcome! I like this free-flowing easy-rhyming free verse, and I like how you open it up to all the possibilities of the world but then close it back to the actual thing we all think about first in the morning (well, I do!) in the last line! Nicely done!
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Greig Turnbull
Date: 10/14/2018 12:31:00 AM
Hi Nina, thank you so much for your feedback. I have a lot more I'll be posting. I just love writing. Trying to get my work out there bit it's pretty hard/complicated! You have a huge body of work. I look forward to reading it all today! Again, thank you Nina.