Tammy Reams | + Follow Poet |
Free verse | + Fav Poem | Comment | Email | Print |

Sadness Weeps Contest Four Lines

Buried deep I can not breath this black abyss no light I see

      Muddy dirt surrounds me in a bottomless pit so endless and extreme

Please! No more rain or I will further sink into this rayless ground no hand to grab I scream

          'Oh' the worms of gore as birds sit plucking for more!

T Reams 9/19/2015  Contest sponsored by: Broken Wings  'Four Lines'

* Placed 2nd*

Copyright © Tammy Reams | Year Posted 2015

Please Login to post a comment

Michael Tor Date: 9/28/2015 11:07:00 PM Tammy excellent win! Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/29/2015 6:12:00 PM Thank you very much Michael!

Skat A Date: 9/28/2015 9:53:00 PM Hi Tammy, Congratulations on your Four Line win. Forever **SKAT** Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/29/2015 6:11:00 PM Thank you very much for the nice comment Skat! Have a great day.

Laura Leiser Date: 9/28/2015 12:15:00 AM Congrats on your chilling, winning poem, Tammi! Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/28/2015 3:44:00 PM Thank you Laura for the nice comment.

Jan Allison Date: 9/26/2015 5:31:00 PM Dropping back with my congrats Tammy:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/27/2015 8:32:00 AM Thanks Jan! Hugs back to you!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 9/24/2015 11:37:00 PM Ah such a wonderful write Tammy, love the last line the most! Congrats on big win! Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/26/2015 7:21:00 AM Thank you Dr. Upma for the great comment!

John Lawless Date: 9/24/2015 8:57:00 PM Gruesomely dark and gory. All it needs is Alfred Hitchcock saying "Good Evening" as only he could..congrats no the win Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/26/2015 7:20:00 AM Thank you John for the great comment! Alfred Hitchcock was one of my favorites!

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/24/2015 3:25:00 PM not just dark and deep but also gross. Which is GOOD!! (I just hate the thought of worms around me, so that makes a very vivid picture.) Big congrats for your big win. Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/26/2015 7:19:00 AM Thank you for the great comment Andrea!

Alexis Y. Date: 9/23/2015 8:46:00 PM Tammy, congratulations on your win:-) Alexis Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/26/2015 7:18:00 AM Thank you for the comment Alexis!

Casarah Nance Date: 9/23/2015 6:41:00 PM worms of gore as birds sit plucking for more....oohh nice...great lil write and awesome win! Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/23/2015 7:20:00 PM Thank you so much for the great comment Casarah!

Eve Roper Date: 9/23/2015 6:02:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Tammy. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/23/2015 7:20:00 PM Thank you so much for the great comment Eve! Hugs back to you!

James Inman Date: 9/23/2015 10:48:00 AM Love it! So emotional. Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/23/2015 7:19:00 PM Thank you very much for the nice comment James!

Paul Callus Date: 9/20/2015 3:44:00 AM Metaphorically powerful, Tammy! Impressive transmission of deep emotions and extreme helplessness. #7 // paul Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/20/2015 8:00:00 AM Thank you very much Paul!!!! Have a great day.

Emile Pinet Date: 9/19/2015 1:35:00 PM You describe your experience perfectly and it takes shape in my mind’s eye. Emile. Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/19/2015 5:42:00 PM Thank you so much for the nice comment Emile!

Miraj Raha Date: 9/19/2015 9:28:00 AM great reflection about sadness,those four lines were very powerful I must say,they express the helplessness of the reader. Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/19/2015 5:41:00 PM Thank you so much for the wonderful comment Miraj!

John Lawless Date: 9/19/2015 9:20:00 AM this is dark, deep, yucky, icky and one hellova metaphor so many situations..... Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/19/2015 5:41:00 PM Thank you so much for the great comment John on the metaphor! I have been doing a lot of poetry reading on this so I can advance in a better degree in my poetry.

Jan Allison Date: 9/19/2015 9:10:00 AM ooh this is dark and deep Tammy good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply Tammy Reams Date: 9/19/2015 5:39:00 PM Thank you Jan for the very nice comment. Hugs back to you.