Sacrifice

beat, bellow and decay,
      is there nothing more,
cold liquid crimson,
      colorful tainting,
      fallen from within,
 
down dark corduroy,
      to the bridge's end,
      descending stairway,
      plunge into the abyss,
baptism by fire,
cauterized spirit,
fresh wounds pass away,
      clear the dross,
      to set the stage,
      away with held breathe,
 
how it kills us,
to learn, to listen,
      freedom within dependence,
the scent of melon,
the night fragrant,
      senses awakened,
      memories lead on,
through velvet poetry,
 
      softly sleep soothes,
      lines drawn with the shades,
      where sand buries lies,
these translucent chameleons,
      change like water,
      the cages weaken,
relinquish their quarry
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Ukoyen Avatar
September 20, 2018 at 5:14 PM
Ukoyen Avatar
September 20, 2018 at 5:10 PM
NICE
Hobbs Avatar
October 1, 2018 at 6:57 PM
If you have specific lines you want to know about I'm more than happy to give you my take, however, I don't want to ruin what your imagination may do without my help.
Ukoyen Avatar
September 20, 2018 at 5:09 PM
I really dnt get the massage . idiots r lik puzzles sometimes, I ll be glad only if u can explain a little . but from d comment below, I guess its a great poem...thanks
Hobbs Avatar
October 1, 2018 at 6:56 PM
Victor, thank you for taking an interest in this one. It's more of an experimental exercise than anything. Maybe the best way to read it is to read only the lines that are Left aligned straight through to get a basic emotional impression (they do not make complete sense by themselves) and then read the indented lines. The indented lines provide a little more context to each (Left aligned) lines that they are under.
Ukoyen Avatar
September 20, 2018 at 5:17 PM
I meant IDIOMS* not idiots. Sorry sir
De Beaulieu Avatar
September 11, 2018 at 2:28 PM
Hello Luke Hobbs, I have a question. What is velvet poetry? I like the way the words flow in your poem. Welcome tothe Soup.I look frward to reading more of your poetry. Have a nice day my friend.
Hobbs Avatar
September 15, 2018 at 9:29 PM
Thank you very much Darlene. You asked an excellent question. I'll make you a deal. I'll tell you a secret in exchange for you telling me what YOU think "velvet poetry" is, and then I'll tell you what it is to me. The secret is that this poem got started by one of the collections of magnetic words. The lines which are Left aligned are from the word set. The lines which are indented (Right) are ones I added myself.
Sietesantos Avatar
September 3, 2018 at 8:26 AM
Hi Luke, this is another really powerful, thought-provoking, beautiful piece from start to end! Well done. Best regards. Pandita
Hobbs Avatar
September 15, 2018 at 9:20 PM
Glad you liked it and thank you for sharing your thoughts and encouragement.
Wigley Avatar
September 2, 2018 at 1:04 AM
Excellent piece of free verse, Luke, and I love that last Stanza. Welcome to the Soup! Hope you enjoy your time with us. Regards, Viv
Hobbs Avatar
September 3, 2018 at 6:34 AM
In poems, I try to "finish strong" if I can. I'm glad you liked it and thank you for the kind words.
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